Re: [T2TRG] Melinda Shore's No Objection on draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-09: (with COMMENT)
Xavier De Foy <Xavier.DeFoy@InterDigital.com> Thu, 24 August 2023 01:25 UTC
Return-Path: <xavier.defoy@interdigital.com>
X-Original-To: t2trg@ietfa.amsl.com
Delivered-To: t2trg@ietfa.amsl.com
Received: from localhost (localhost [127.0.0.1]) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTP id EC75FC16951E for <t2trg@ietfa.amsl.com>; Wed, 23 Aug 2023 18:25:40 -0700 (PDT)
X-Virus-Scanned: amavisd-new at amsl.com
X-Spam-Flag: NO
X-Spam-Score: -7.107
X-Spam-Level:
X-Spam-Status: No, score=-7.107 tagged_above=-999 required=5 tests=[BAYES_00=-1.9, DKIM_SIGNED=0.1, DKIM_VALID=-0.1, DKIM_VALID_AU=-0.1, DKIM_VALID_EF=-0.1, RCVD_IN_DNSWL_HI=-5, RCVD_IN_ZEN_BLOCKED_OPENDNS=0.001, SPF_HELO_NONE=0.001, SPF_PASS=-0.001, T_SCC_BODY_TEXT_LINE=-0.01, URIBL_DBL_BLOCKED_OPENDNS=0.001, URIBL_ZEN_BLOCKED_OPENDNS=0.001] autolearn=unavailable autolearn_force=no
Authentication-Results: ietfa.amsl.com (amavisd-new); dkim=pass (2048-bit key) header.d=interdigital.com
Received: from mail.ietf.org ([50.223.129.194]) by localhost (ietfa.amsl.com [127.0.0.1]) (amavisd-new, port 10024) with ESMTP id 666urbH5zAOU for <t2trg@ietfa.amsl.com>; Wed, 23 Aug 2023 18:25:37 -0700 (PDT)
Received: from us-smtp-delivery-139.mimecast.com (us-smtp-delivery-139.mimecast.com [170.10.133.139]) (using TLSv1.3 with cipher TLS_AES_256_GCM_SHA384 (256/256 bits) key-exchange X25519 server-signature RSA-PSS (2048 bits)) (No client certificate requested) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTPS id 5A8BAC169502 for <t2trg@irtf.org>; Wed, 23 Aug 2023 18:25:32 -0700 (PDT)
DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; d=interdigital.com; s=mimecast20220303; t=1692840330; h=from:from:reply-to:subject:subject:date:date:message-id:message-id: to:to:cc:cc:mime-version:mime-version:content-type:content-type: content-transfer-encoding:content-transfer-encoding: in-reply-to:in-reply-to:references:references; bh=iTDZqP44IyzWo7ZVwWKklubqz+z2agP9WctNMWZbT8k=; b=BLUDVEXrGsYFLXk3Yc33ac2o6dluv75AK/gvfqgjfZN3mp66gihjI7a64+ggThGITlOcNk Zs0wZLGaZ9Y+yUS7eHIFYxFqNR9Apy5C6T0RK21YUXPFfvDjBjLz5VC+CNJhbdXp449LWq bvavjrqN9l5Tl5IcL6SoeLCsjU/RGRjqeLQIRWwa1w60nNyDtIhYTKb/KjMkK69DssYE7O oGx3WSHhkkeVVpBLSM97vtP4D4Lrc9I6EG6vMkGMxOwvq/FqhFfn1d7e4xXWOJoxVS9lM9 Dnj/kShwp+RuPB06dvv8PMnl46dLzsPBWJtNvDXZ179/O46vl8gCdp6YmCiAnQ==
Received: from NAM11-BN8-obe.outbound.protection.outlook.com (mail-bn8nam11lp2168.outbound.protection.outlook.com [104.47.58.168]) by relay.mimecast.com with ESMTP with STARTTLS (version=TLSv1.2, cipher=TLS_ECDHE_RSA_WITH_AES_256_GCM_SHA384) id us-mta-608-cTZtA4VGN_WWE0j_TjE6GA-1; Wed, 23 Aug 2023 21:24:26 -0400
X-MC-Unique: cTZtA4VGN_WWE0j_TjE6GA-1
Received: from DS7PR10MB4863.namprd10.prod.outlook.com (2603:10b6:5:297::17) by CH3PR10MB7575.namprd10.prod.outlook.com (2603:10b6:610:167::13) with Microsoft SMTP Server (version=TLS1_2, cipher=TLS_ECDHE_RSA_WITH_AES_256_GCM_SHA384) id 15.20.6699.24; Thu, 24 Aug 2023 01:24:22 +0000
Received: from DS7PR10MB4863.namprd10.prod.outlook.com ([fe80::a891:4d1c:27e0:93c5]) by DS7PR10MB4863.namprd10.prod.outlook.com ([fe80::a891:4d1c:27e0:93c5%6]) with mapi id 15.20.6699.026; Thu, 24 Aug 2023 01:24:22 +0000
From: Xavier De Foy <Xavier.DeFoy@InterDigital.com>
To: Melinda Shore <mshore@fastly.com>, The IRSG <irsg@irtf.org>
CC: "draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge@ietf.org" <draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge@ietf.org>, "t2trg-chairs@ietf.org" <t2trg-chairs@ietf.org>, "t2trg@irtf.org" <t2trg@irtf.org>, "ari.keranen@ericsson.com" <ari.keranen@ericsson.com>
Thread-Topic: Melinda Shore's No Objection on draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-09: (with COMMENT)
Thread-Index: AQHZ0Vwen60V0ApcK0iCpy1CahbBTK/4r/mA
Date: Thu, 24 Aug 2023 01:24:21 +0000
Message-ID: <DS7PR10MB4863CFEBC1F9E5DDE32ECCC7E51DA@DS7PR10MB4863.namprd10.prod.outlook.com>
References: <169231214781.56117.3621310742631486313@ietfa.amsl.com>
In-Reply-To: <169231214781.56117.3621310742631486313@ietfa.amsl.com>
Accept-Language: en-US
X-MS-Has-Attach:
X-MS-TNEF-Correlator:
x-ms-publictraffictype: Email
x-ms-traffictypediagnostic: DS7PR10MB4863:EE_|CH3PR10MB7575:EE_
x-ms-office365-filtering-correlation-id: d9d9bf3c-19e3-455e-cc69-08dba440d882
x-ms-exchange-senderadcheck: 1
x-ms-exchange-antispam-relay: 0
x-microsoft-antispam: BCL:0
x-microsoft-antispam-message-info: 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
x-forefront-antispam-report: CIP:255.255.255.255; CTRY:; LANG:en; SCL:1; SRV:; IPV:NLI; SFV:NSPM; H:DS7PR10MB4863.namprd10.prod.outlook.com; PTR:; CAT:NONE; SFS:(13230031)(366004)(346002)(136003)(396003)(376002)(39850400004)(451199024)(1800799009)(186009)(83380400001)(2906002)(53546011)(6506007)(38100700002)(5660300002)(52536014)(33656002)(26005)(86362001)(38070700005)(8676002)(4326008)(8936002)(316002)(107886003)(66946007)(9686003)(66556008)(76116006)(66446008)(66476007)(64756008)(110136005)(54906003)(478600001)(966005)(122000001)(55016003)(71200400001)(7696005)(41300700001)(85282002); DIR:OUT; SFP:1102
x-ms-exchange-antispam-messagedata-chunkcount: 1
x-ms-exchange-antispam-messagedata-0: 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
MIME-Version: 1.0
X-MS-Exchange-AntiSpam-ExternalHop-MessageData-ChunkCount: 1
X-MS-Exchange-AntiSpam-ExternalHop-MessageData-0: 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
X-OriginatorOrg: interdigital.com
X-MS-Exchange-CrossTenant-AuthAs: Internal
X-MS-Exchange-CrossTenant-AuthSource: DS7PR10MB4863.namprd10.prod.outlook.com
X-MS-Exchange-CrossTenant-Network-Message-Id: d9d9bf3c-19e3-455e-cc69-08dba440d882
X-MS-Exchange-CrossTenant-originalarrivaltime: 24 Aug 2023 01:24:22.0084 (UTC)
X-MS-Exchange-CrossTenant-fromentityheader: Hosted
X-MS-Exchange-CrossTenant-id: e351b779-f6d5-4e50-8568-80e922d180ae
X-MS-Exchange-CrossTenant-mailboxtype: HOSTED
X-MS-Exchange-CrossTenant-userprincipalname: /XngjqhRShx/8pEw/BGP19gVEmzkSyUyHp8H1PZHaCedei1gi5z4ZZ8mdS/BNlBxuRbocqMUHEvB1sU7lRlUzZL3V86arCWMoSBk7yrleVo=
X-MS-Exchange-Transport-CrossTenantHeadersStamped: CH3PR10MB7575
X-Mimecast-Spam-Score: 0
X-Mimecast-Originator: interdigital.com
Content-Language: en-US
Content-Type: text/plain; charset="UTF-8"
Content-Transfer-Encoding: base64
Archived-At: <https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/t2trg/sUrTQYWkqA3nJH2ItnHsxen88Zw>
Subject: Re: [T2TRG] Melinda Shore's No Objection on draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-09: (with COMMENT)
X-BeenThere: t2trg@irtf.org
X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.39
Precedence: list
List-Id: IRTF Thing-to-Thing Research Group <t2trg.irtf.org>
List-Unsubscribe: <https://www.irtf.org/mailman/options/t2trg>, <mailto:t2trg-request@irtf.org?subject=unsubscribe>
List-Archive: <https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/browse/t2trg/>
List-Post: <mailto:t2trg@irtf.org>
List-Help: <mailto:t2trg-request@irtf.org?subject=help>
List-Subscribe: <https://www.irtf.org/mailman/listinfo/t2trg>, <mailto:t2trg-request@irtf.org?subject=subscribe>
X-List-Received-Date: Thu, 24 Aug 2023 01:25:41 -0000
Hi Melinda, thank you for your review. We will prepare an update to address your points. Best Regards, Xavier -----Original Message----- From: Melinda Shore via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Sent: Thursday, August 17, 2023 18:42 To: The IRSG <irsg@irtf.org> Cc: draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge@ietf.org; t2trg-chairs@ietf.org; t2trg@irtf.org; ari.keranen@ericsson.com; ari.keranen@ericsson.com Subject: Melinda Shore's No Objection on draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-09: (with COMMENT) Melinda Shore has entered the following ballot position for draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-09: No Objection When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this introductory paragraph, however.) The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge/ ---------------------------------------------------------------------- COMMENT: ---------------------------------------------------------------------- The content is very useful but the document itself could probably benefit from some copy editing. There are a number of instances of unidiomatic English in sections 3 and 4, and there are some other minor issues (tautological definition of "thing" in section 2.1, "mist computing" is defined but never used, etc.). The intro to section 3 says that some applications can generate a terabyte but never says what it's a terabyte of. None of these should be considered show-stoppers, just a little untidy. Overall I think it's a very good read, and, minor issues aside, ready to go.
- [T2TRG] Melinda Shore's No Objection on draft-irt… Melinda Shore via Datatracker
- Re: [T2TRG] Melinda Shore's No Objection on draft… Xavier De Foy
- Re: [T2TRG] Melinda Shore's No Objection on draft… Xavier De Foy
- Re: [T2TRG] [irsg] Melinda Shore's No Objection o… Melinda Shore
- Re: [T2TRG] [irsg] Melinda Shore's No Objection o… Colin Perkins