Re: [tsvwg] Publication has been requested for draft-ietf-tsvwg-iana-dscp-registry-04

[Spencer Dawkins at IETF <[e-mail]>]

On Tue, May 8, 2018 at 9:00 AM, David Black <[e-mail]> wrote:

David Black has requested publication of draft-ietf-tsvwg-iana-dscp-registry-04
> as Proposed Standard on behalf of the TSVWG working group.
>
> Please verify the document's state at https://datatracker.ietf.org/
> doc/draft-ietf-tsvwg-iana-dscp-registry/


I have a couple of comments, but this draft is ready for Last Call. Could
you take a look at my comments, and let me know what the right thing to do
is?

Thanks!

Spencer

 There's a reference to https://tools.ietf.org/html/rfc8126#section-4.9 in
the Introduction, but that text uses "Standards Action" with the reference
but without any expansion, while further down, the next occurrence of
"Standards Action" explains that this means "values are assigned by
Standards Track or Best Current Practice RFCs", without providing a
reference. Perhaps expanding

   These are assigned by
   Standards Action, as defined in [RFC8126].

to read

   These are assigned by
   Standards Action, as defined in [RFC8126], i.e., values are assigned
   by Standards Track or Best Current Practice RFCs

and dropping the expansion from the second mention would be clearer?

Independent of that question, I had to read through the text containing the
second mention a couple of times.

  Although Pool 1 has not yet been completely exhausted, this document
   changes the IANA registration policy of Pool 3 to assignment by
   Standards Action, i.e., values are assigned by Standards Track or
   Best Current Practice RFCs.  The rationale for this update is a need
   to assign codepoints for particular PHBs that are unable to use any
   of the unassigned values in Pool 1.

Would it be correct to say

  Although Pool 1 has not yet been completely exhausted, there is a need
   to assign codepoints for particular PHBs that are unable to use any
   of the unassigned values in Pool 1. This document
   changes the IANA registration policy of Pool 3 to assignment by
   Standards Action, i.e., values are assigned by Standards Track or
   Best Current Practice RFCs, allowing these codepoints to be assigned.

?