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Re: [Ace] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ace-extend-dtls-authorize-03.txt

Olaf Bergmann <bergmann@tzi.org> Mon, 19 September 2022 14:20 UTC

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From: Olaf Bergmann <bergmann@tzi.org>
To: Daniel Migault <mglt.ietf@gmail.com>
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Subject: Re: [Ace] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ace-extend-dtls-authorize-03.txt
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Hi Daniel,

On 2022-09-16, Daniel Migault <mglt.ietf@gmail.com> wrote:

> Please find the shepherd write-up. Feel free to provide any comments before we move the
> document forward.
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-ace-extend-dtls-authorize/shepherdwriteup/

In Section 2, please replace the reference to
I-D.ietf-ace-dtls-authorize with a reference to RFC 9202.

In Section 3, s/We do ghave/We do have/

In Section 6, I think the word "not" is missing?

> On Fri, Sep 16, 2022 at 12:05 PM Daniel Migault <mglt.ietf@gmail.com> wrote:
>
>  Hi Olaf, 
>
>  There two nits to address before the draft can be moved forward . 
>
>    ** The abstract seems to contain references ([RFC9202]), which it
>       shouldn't.  Please replace those with straight textual mentions of the
>       documents in question.
>   ** Obsolete normative reference: RFC 6347 (Obsoleted by RFC 9147)

Grüße
Olaf

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