Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <draft-ietf-tsvwg-ecn-l4s-id-29> for your review
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To: Martin Duke <martin.h.duke@gmail.com>, Karen Moore <kmoore@amsl.com>
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Subject: Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <draft-ietf-tsvwg-ecn-l4s-id-29> for your review
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Martin and Karen, I've re-expanded the remaining abbreviations in the att'd XML, as I said I would in my email below: rfc9331j.xml Also, I've att'd the diff from Karen's latest edit (which I've denoted as "rfc9331i"): rfc9331j-from-i.diff.html Bob On 07/01/2023 16:35, Bob Briscoe wrote: > Martin (and Karen,) > > On 06/01/2023 18:47, Martin Duke wrote: >> Bob, >> >> In case this was lost in the holiday shuffle, the ball is in your court. > > [BB3] Thanks. I had read all the emails, but it wasn't clear to me > that I had been given the edit token on ecn-l4s-id. > I will set to re-expanding some abbreviations in the XML now. This is > the approach I shall take: > > For the example list of transport protocols in the intro, I will go > back to the RFC Editor's first approach of expanding the "non-core" > protocol names, instead of including citations for DCCP and SCTP > (which are cited later when each protocol is actually discussed). > > > 1. Intro. > > > CURRENT: > The transport wire protocol, e.g., TCP, > QUIC, SCTP [RFC4960 > <https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9331.html#RFC4960>], DCCP > [RFC4340 <https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9331.html#RFC4340>], > or RTP/RTCP, is orthogonal (and > therefore not suitable for distinguishing L4S from Classic packets). > > PROPOSED: > The transport wire protocol, e.g., TCP, > QUIC, the Stream Control Transmission Protocol (SCTP), the Datagram > Congestion Control Protocol (DCCP), and RTP/RTCP, is orthogonal (and > therefore not suitable for distinguishing L4S from Classic packets). > > > 1.1. Latency, Loss, and Scaling Problems > > > For the list of AQMs, I'll take a similar approach to that you've just > approved for the DualQ draft, except RED has already been expanded at > this point. Specifically: > > CURRENT: > However, Random Early Detection (RED) and other algorithms from the > 1990s were sensitive... > ... > More recent state-of-the-art AQM methods, such as FQ-CoDel [RFC8290 > <https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9331.html#RFC8290>], > PIE [RFC8033 > <https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9331.html#RFC8033>], or > Adaptive RED [ARED01 > <https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9331.html#ARED01>],... > ... > This was useful because per-flow queuing (FQ) .... > > PROPOSED: > However, Random Early Detection (RED) and other algorithms from the > 1990s were sensitive... > ... > More recent state-of-the-art AQM methods, such as Flow Queue CoDel > [RFC8290 <https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9331.html#RFC8290>], > Proportional Integral controller Enhanced (PIE) [RFC8033 > <https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9331.html#RFC8033>], or > Adaptive RED [ARED01 > <https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9331.html#ARED01>], ... > ... > This was useful because per-flow queuing (FQ) ... > > > Deeper into the Document > > > I'll add back expansions of EH, ESP, TRILL etc. > > > Bob > >> >> On Wed, Dec 28, 2022 at 10:24 AM Martin Duke >> <martin.h.duke@gmail.com> wrote: >> >> I'm sympathetic to the desire to keep sentences brisk, but I find >> the idea that these acronyms are stashed in the references list >> to be reader-hostile. Would it be too much to ask for a short >> glossary just after the introduction to spell these out? >> >> On Thu, Dec 22, 2022 at 4:27 PM Bob Briscoe <ietf@bobbriscoe.net> >> wrote: >> >> Gorry, >> >> On 22/12/2022 09:20, Gorry Fairhurst wrote: >>> On 21/12/2022 21:46, Bob Briscoe wrote: >>>> Martin, >>>> >>>> On 20/12/2022 19:24, Martin Duke wrote: >>>>> >>>>> >>>>> On Sat, Dec 17, 2022 at 7:16 AM Bob Briscoe >>>>> <ietf@bobbriscoe.net> wrote: >>>>> >>>>> Martin, >>>>> >>>>> On 16/12/2022 23:22, Martin Duke wrote: >>>>>> There is a lot of email about this; pardon me if it's >>>>>> been thoroughly discussed: >>>>>> >>>>>> (1) I don't understand why we edited out introducing >>>>>> acronyms on first use: >>>>>> DCTCP, FQ-Codel, PIE, TRILL, EH, ESP >>>>> >>>>> [BB] We persuaded the RFC Editor to expand or not on a >>>>> case-by-case basis rather than following an >>>>> "expand-on-first-use" rule too rigidly. >>>>> Before the RFC Editor process, we had judged that >>>>> these particular ones were: >>>>> * better known by their abbreviation than their expansion >>>>> * easily look-up-able for anyone interested in the >>>>> expansion, via the title of the reference cited beside >>>>> them >>>>> * and they were within a sentence that was already >>>>> long, so an (unnecessary) expansion would make it >>>>> overly long and complicated. >>>>> >>>>> In the case of DCTCP, it's expansion adds important >>>>> context, but the first use is in an already complex >>>>> sentence. So, at the first use it says "the >>>>> DCTCP/DualQ solution described below", and it is >>>>> expanded in the next para. >>>>> >>>>> Also, FQ is expanded elsewhere 'cos it's meaning is >>>>> important, but CoDel is only expanded in the cited >>>>> title of its reference. >>>>> >>>>> >>>>> OK, you've clearly thought through the sequencing here. >>>>> I'm not going to insist on first-use, but I do think these >>>>> acronym expansions should be somewhere in the document, >>>>> either in a glossary or in subsequent use, as you've done >>>>> with DCTCP. >>>> >>>> [BB2] Does "somewhere in the document" include in the title >>>> of a reference cited where the abbreviation is first used >>>> (e.g. DCCP [RFC4340])? >>>> I've tried to only do this where the expansion isn't >>>> central to understanding the document, and expanding it on >>>> first use subtracts from the sense of the sentence. >>>> >>>> >>>> Bob >>> >>> Before a draft leaves the TSVWG, we would normally check >>> that all acronyms are expanded on their first use within the >>> body of the text (the abstract is treated separately and >>> needs to have its own definitions). I still think this is an >>> important, rather than requiring readers to consult another >>> document to understand if they have correctly interpreted an >>> acronym. >>> >> >> [BB] We're not saying anyone has to consult another document >> - just consult the title of the reference cited in /this/ >> document. And this is only for any abbreviation that: >> 1. is known by it's abbreviation (by those familiar with it) >> 2. would make a sentence in the intro hard to follow if all >> abbreviations were expanded >> 3. is only mentioned in passing so it isn't necessary for >> understanding the document. >> >>> On this document, I leave it to Martin to decide whether >>> there is reason to do otherwise. >>> >> >> [BB] Yup. >> Thanks >> >> >> Bob >> >>> Gorry >>> >>> (TSVWG Co-Chair) >>> >>>> >>>> >>>>>> (2) This edit in Sec 5.1 seems non-cosmetic. >>>>>> In case unforeseen problems arise with the L4S experiment, it MUST be >>>>>> possible to configure an L4S implementation to disable the L4S >>>>>> treatment. Once disabled,all packets of all ECN codepoints will receive >>>>>> Classic treatment, and ECT(1) packets MUST be treated as if they >>>>>> were Not-ECT. >>>>>> I agree that the original text was ambiguously >>>>>> worded, but the common-sense reading of the original >>>>>> (given that this is a section about network nodes) is >>>>>> that ECT(1) would >>>>>> go in the ECT(0) queue and be marked CE in accordance >>>>>> with the RFC 3168 rules. The new text is different. I >>>>>> can see advantages to the new rule but I wonder if we >>>>>> have >>>>>> consensus for this change? >>>>> >>>>> [BB] Yes, but common sense might be in short supply. >>>>> "Classic treatment" could be incorrectly taken to mean >>>>> "Classic ECN treatment". >>>>> This sentence went through an intermediate version, >>>>> which you might prefer because it stays closer to the >>>>> original: >>>>> >>>>> In case unforeseen problems arise with the L4S experiment, it MUST be >>>>> possible to configure an L4S implementation to disable the L4S >>>>> treatment. Once disabled,all packets of all ECN codepoints will receive Classic >>>>> treatment, and ECT(1) packets MUST be treated as if they >>>>> were Not-ECT*, then all packets of all ECN codepoints will** >>>>> receive treatment compatible with Classic congestion >>>>> control*. >>>>> >>>>> >>>>> But, in the most recent edits, I asked the RFC Editor >>>>> to take out the final clause completely at the >>>>> suggestion of my co-authors. >>>>> We can leave it in if you'd rather. >>>>> >>>>> >>>>> I think I ave misinterpreted the diff. This is fine as-is. >>>> >>>> -- >>>> ________________________________________________________________ >>>> Bob Briscoehttp://bobbriscoe.net/ >>> >>> >> >> -- >> ________________________________________________________________ >> Bob Briscoehttp://bobbriscoe.net/ >> > > -- > ________________________________________________________________ > Bob Briscoehttp://bobbriscoe.net/ -- ________________________________________________________________ Bob Briscoehttp://bobbriscoe.net/
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- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Karen Moore
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- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Martin Duke
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Gorry Fairhurst
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Martin Duke
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Martin Duke
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Koen De Schepper (Nokia)
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- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Karen Moore
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Martin Duke
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