Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <draft-ietf-tsvwg-ecn-l4s-id-29> for your review
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Subject: Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <draft-ietf-tsvwg-ecn-l4s-id-29> for your review
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Martin (and Karen,) On 06/01/2023 18:47, Martin Duke wrote: > Bob, > > In case this was lost in the holiday shuffle, the ball is in your court. [BB3] Thanks. I had read all the emails, but it wasn't clear to me that I had been given the edit token on ecn-l4s-id. I will set to re-expanding some abbreviations in the XML now. This is the approach I shall take: For the example list of transport protocols in the intro, I will go back to the RFC Editor's first approach of expanding the "non-core" protocol names, instead of including citations for DCCP and SCTP (which are cited later when each protocol is actually discussed). 1. Intro. CURRENT: The transport wire protocol, e.g., TCP, QUIC, SCTP [RFC4960 <https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9331.html#RFC4960>], DCCP [RFC4340 <https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9331.html#RFC4340>], or RTP/RTCP, is orthogonal (and therefore not suitable for distinguishing L4S from Classic packets). PROPOSED: The transport wire protocol, e.g., TCP, QUIC, the Stream Control Transmission Protocol (SCTP), the Datagram Congestion Control Protocol (DCCP), and RTP/RTCP, is orthogonal (and therefore not suitable for distinguishing L4S from Classic packets). 1.1. Latency, Loss, and Scaling Problems For the list of AQMs, I'll take a similar approach to that you've just approved for the DualQ draft, except RED has already been expanded at this point. Specifically: CURRENT: However, Random Early Detection (RED) and other algorithms from the 1990s were sensitive... ... More recent state-of-the-art AQM methods, such as FQ-CoDel [RFC8290 <https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9331.html#RFC8290>], PIE [RFC8033 <https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9331.html#RFC8033>], or Adaptive RED [ARED01 <https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9331.html#ARED01>],... ... This was useful because per-flow queuing (FQ) .... PROPOSED: However, Random Early Detection (RED) and other algorithms from the 1990s were sensitive... ... More recent state-of-the-art AQM methods, such as Flow Queue CoDel [RFC8290 <https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9331.html#RFC8290>], Proportional Integral controller Enhanced (PIE) [RFC8033 <https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9331.html#RFC8033>], or Adaptive RED [ARED01 <https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9331.html#ARED01>], ... ... This was useful because per-flow queuing (FQ) ... Deeper into the Document I'll add back expansions of EH, ESP, TRILL etc. Bob > > On Wed, Dec 28, 2022 at 10:24 AM Martin Duke <martin.h.duke@gmail.com> > wrote: > > I'm sympathetic to the desire to keep sentences brisk, but I find > the idea that these acronyms are stashed in the references list to > be reader-hostile. Would it be too much to ask for a short > glossary just after the introduction to spell these out? > > On Thu, Dec 22, 2022 at 4:27 PM Bob Briscoe <ietf@bobbriscoe.net> > wrote: > > Gorry, > > On 22/12/2022 09:20, Gorry Fairhurst wrote: >> On 21/12/2022 21:46, Bob Briscoe wrote: >>> Martin, >>> >>> On 20/12/2022 19:24, Martin Duke wrote: >>>> >>>> >>>> On Sat, Dec 17, 2022 at 7:16 AM Bob Briscoe >>>> <ietf@bobbriscoe.net> wrote: >>>> >>>> Martin, >>>> >>>> On 16/12/2022 23:22, Martin Duke wrote: >>>>> There is a lot of email about this; pardon me if it's >>>>> been thoroughly discussed: >>>>> >>>>> (1) I don't understand why we edited out introducing >>>>> acronyms on first use: >>>>> DCTCP, FQ-Codel, PIE, TRILL, EH, ESP >>>> >>>> [BB] We persuaded the RFC Editor to expand or not on a >>>> case-by-case basis rather than following an >>>> "expand-on-first-use" rule too rigidly. >>>> Before the RFC Editor process, we had judged that these >>>> particular ones were: >>>> * better known by their abbreviation than their expansion >>>> * easily look-up-able for anyone interested in the >>>> expansion, via the title of the reference cited beside them >>>> * and they were within a sentence that was already >>>> long, so an (unnecessary) expansion would make it >>>> overly long and complicated. >>>> >>>> In the case of DCTCP, it's expansion adds important >>>> context, but the first use is in an already complex >>>> sentence. So, at the first use it says "the DCTCP/DualQ >>>> solution described below", and it is expanded in the >>>> next para. >>>> >>>> Also, FQ is expanded elsewhere 'cos it's meaning is >>>> important, but CoDel is only expanded in the cited >>>> title of its reference. >>>> >>>> >>>> OK, you've clearly thought through the sequencing here. I'm >>>> not going to insist on first-use, but I do think these >>>> acronym expansions should be somewhere in the document, >>>> either in a glossary or in subsequent use, as you've done >>>> with DCTCP. >>> >>> [BB2] Does "somewhere in the document" include in the title >>> of a reference cited where the abbreviation is first used >>> (e.g. DCCP [RFC4340])? >>> I've tried to only do this where the expansion isn't central >>> to understanding the document, and expanding it on first use >>> subtracts from the sense of the sentence. >>> >>> >>> Bob >> >> Before a draft leaves the TSVWG, we would normally check that >> all acronyms are expanded on their first use within the body >> of the text (the abstract is treated separately and needs to >> have its own definitions). I still think this is an >> important, rather than requiring readers to consult another >> document to understand if they have correctly interpreted an >> acronym. >> > > [BB] We're not saying anyone has to consult another document - > just consult the title of the reference cited in /this/ > document. And this is only for any abbreviation that: > 1. is known by it's abbreviation (by those familiar with it) > 2. would make a sentence in the intro hard to follow if all > abbreviations were expanded > 3. is only mentioned in passing so it isn't necessary for > understanding the document. > >> On this document, I leave it to Martin to decide whether >> there is reason to do otherwise. >> > > [BB] Yup. > Thanks > > > Bob > >> Gorry >> >> (TSVWG Co-Chair) >> >>> >>> >>>>> (2) This edit in Sec 5.1 seems non-cosmetic. >>>>> In case unforeseen problems arise with the L4S experiment, it MUST be >>>>> possible to configure an L4S implementation to disable the L4S >>>>> treatment. Once disabled,all packets of all ECN codepoints will receive Classic >>>>> treatment, and ECT(1) packets MUST be treated as if they >>>>> were Not-ECT. >>>>> I agree that the original text was ambiguously worded, >>>>> but the common-sense reading of the original (given >>>>> that this is a section about network nodes) is that >>>>> ECT(1) would >>>>> go in the ECT(0) queue and be marked CE in accordance >>>>> with the RFC 3168 rules. The new text is different. I >>>>> can see advantages to the new rule but I wonder if we have >>>>> consensus for this change? >>>> >>>> [BB] Yes, but common sense might be in short supply. >>>> "Classic treatment" could be incorrectly taken to mean >>>> "Classic ECN treatment". >>>> This sentence went through an intermediate version, >>>> which you might prefer because it stays closer to the >>>> original: >>>> >>>> In case unforeseen problems arise with the L4S experiment, it MUST be >>>> possible to configure an L4S implementation to disable the L4S >>>> treatment. Once disabled,all packets of all ECN codepoints will receive Classic >>>> treatment, and ECT(1) packets MUST be treated as if they >>>> were Not-ECT*, then all packets of all ECN codepoints will** >>>> receive treatment compatible with Classic congestion >>>> control*. >>>> >>>> >>>> But, in the most recent edits, I asked the RFC Editor >>>> to take out the final clause completely at the >>>> suggestion of my co-authors. >>>> We can leave it in if you'd rather. >>>> >>>> >>>> I think I ave misinterpreted the diff. This is fine as-is. >>> >>> -- >>> ________________________________________________________________ >>> Bob Briscoehttp://bobbriscoe.net/ >> >> > > -- > ________________________________________________________________ > Bob Briscoehttp://bobbriscoe.net/ > -- ________________________________________________________________ Bob Briscoehttp://bobbriscoe.net/
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- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Bob Briscoe
- [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <draf… Karen Moore
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Karen Moore
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Bob Briscoe
- [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <draf… Karen Moore
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Martin Duke
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Martin Duke
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Gorry Fairhurst
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Martin Duke
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Martin Duke
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Koen De Schepper (Nokia)
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Karen Moore
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Martin Duke
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9331 <… Karen Moore
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