Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-detnet-oam-framework-11> for your review
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From: CARLOS JESUS BERNARDOS CANO <cjbc@it.uc3m.es>
Date: Mon, 04 Mar 2024 14:50:07 +0100
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Subject: Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-detnet-oam-framework-11> for your review
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Thanks. I don't have anything to add and I agree with the proposed changes and replies by the co-authors. Carlos On Mon, Mar 4, 2024 at 10:38 AM Georgios Z. Papadopoulos < georgios.papadopoulos@imt-atlantique.fr> wrote: > Dear RFC editor, > > Thank you for your work and comments. > > > On 1 Mar 2024, at 20:08, rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org wrote: > > > > Authors, > > > > While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as > necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. > > > > 1) <!--[rfced] Fabrice: we see a slightly different address in RFC 9450. > > Please let us know if ICube Lab, Pole API should be added to this > > document as well?--> > > > > > > 2) <!--[rfced] Please note that the XML submitted had some author > > comments that have since been deleted. We assume all had been > > reviewed. Please let us know if this is in error. --> > > > > > > 3) <!--[rfced] Georgios: please note that we have updated the header to > > use your single first initial as was done in RFC 9450. Please > > let us know any objections. --> > > [GP] Many thanks. No objections. > > > 4) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in > > the title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. --> > > > > > > 5) <!--[rfced] Is the following text equivalent to the original? If so, > > the "Perhaps" text may be clearer/easier for the reader. If not, > > please let us know how to rephrase. > > > > Original: > > Specifically, it investigates the requirements for a deterministic > > network, supporting critical flows. > > > > Perhaps: > > Specifically, it investigates the requirements for a deterministic > > network that supports critical flows. > > --> > > [GP] +1 > Thanks for the reformulation. > > > 6) <!--[rfced] Please confirm that our updated text maintains your > > intended meaning. > > > > Original: > > DetNet expects to implement an OAM framework to maintain a real-time > > view of the network infrastructure, and its ability to respect the > > Service Level Objectives (SLOs), such as in-order packet delivery, > > packet delay, delay variation, and packet loss ratio, assigned to each > > DetNet flow. > > > > Current: > > DetNet is expected to implement an OAM framework to maintain a > > real-time view of the network infrastructure, and its ability to > > respect the Service Level Objectives (SLOs), such as in-order packet > > delivery, packet delay, delay variation, and packet loss ratio, > > assigned to each DetNet flow. > > --> > > [GP] +1 > Thanks for the reformulation. > > > 7) <!--[rfced] Please review our updates to this paragraph to ensure we > > have maintained your intended meaning. Note that a similar > > change was made in Section 2. > > > > Original: > > > > This document lists the functional requirements toward OAM for a > > DetNet domain. The list can further be used for gap analysis of > > available OAM tools to identify possible enhancements of existing > > or whether new OAM tools are required to support proactive and > > on-demand path monitoring and service validation. > > > > Current: > > > > This document lists the OAM functional requirements for a DetNet > > domain. The list can further be used for gap analysis of available > > OAM tools to identify: > > > > * possible enhancements of existing tools, or > > > > * whether new OAM tools are required to support proactive and on- > > demand path monitoring and service validation. > > > > --> > > [GP] +1 > Thanks for the reformulation. > > > 8) <!--[rfced] As our policy is to expand abbreviations on first use, all > > of the abbreviations in the "Abbreviations" sections have already > > been introduced. Additionally, there are a number of > > abbreviations in the "Definitions" section. Might it be better/ > > more consistent to cut the "Abbreviations" section? --> > > [GP] +1 > > > 9) <!--[rfced] Please review the use of "it" in the following sentence. > > Does it refer to "set" (i.e., a set of SLOs is required for the > > flows that the set generates)? If not, please see the possible > > rephrase below or let us know how we may clarify. > > > > Original: > > Most critical applications will define a set of SLOs to be required > > for the DetNet flows it generates. > > > > Perhaps: > > Most critical applications will define a set of SLOs to be required > > for the DetNet flows they generate. > > --> > > [GP] +1 > Thanks for the reformulation. > > > 10) <!--[rfced] In the following, may we cut "criteria" from this > sentence > > (as it seems to be the quality that degrades, not the criteria)? > > > > Original: > > Because the quality of service criteria associated with a path may > > degrade, the network has to provision additional resources along > > the path. > > > > Perhaps: > > Because the quality of service associated with a path may degrade, > > the network has to provision additional resources along the path. > > --> > > [GP] +1 > Thanks for the reformulation. > It makes more sense now indeed. > > > 11) <!--[rfced] We note that draft-mirsky-ippm-hybrid-two-step-15 is > > listed in the datatracker as replaced by > > draft-ietf-ippm-hybrid-two-step. 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- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… rfc-editor
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Greg Mirsky
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Fabrice Theoleyre
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Georgios Z. Papadopoulos
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… CARLOS JESUS BERNARDOS CANO
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Megan Ferguson
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Greg Mirsky
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Fabrice Theoleyre
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Megan Ferguson
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Megan Ferguson
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Greg Mirsky
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Balázs Varga A
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… CARLOS JESUS BERNARDOS CANO
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Georgios Z. Papadopoulos
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Janos Farkas
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Megan Ferguson