Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-detnet-oam-framework-11> for your review
Fabrice Theoleyre <fabrice.theoleyre@cnrs.fr> Tue, 05 March 2024 11:40 UTC
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Subject: Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-detnet-oam-framework-11> for your review
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Dear Megan, Thank you very much. The current version seems valid to me. For the keywords, I suggest to add: Metrics Tracing Best regards, Fabrice > Le 5 mars 2024 à 01:56, Megan Ferguson <mferguson@amsl.com> a écrit : > > Greg, Fabrice, Georgios, and Carlos, > > Thank you for your replies. We have updated accordingly. > > Please review the files carefully as we do not make changes after publication. > > Note: we did not see anyone reply to the keywords request. > We will assume the words in the title are sufficient unless we hear otherwise. > > The files have been posted here (please refresh): > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9551.txt > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9551.pdf > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9551.html > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9551.xml > > The relevant diff files have been posted here (please refresh): > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9551-diff.html (comprehensive diff) > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9551-auth48diff.html (AUTH48 changes only) > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9551-lastdiff.html (last to current version only) > > Please contact us with any further updates/questions/comments you may have. > > We will await approvals from each of the parties listed on the AUTH48 status page prior to moving forward to publication. > > The AUTH48 status page for this document is available here: > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9551 > > Thank you. > > RFC Editor/mf > >> On Mar 4, 2024, at 6:50 AM, CARLOS JESUS BERNARDOS CANO <cjbc@it.uc3m.es <mailto:cjbc@it.uc3m.es>> wrote: >> >> Thanks. I don't have anything to add and I agree with the proposed changes and replies by the co-authors. >> >> Carlos >> >> On Mon, Mar 4, 2024 at 10:38 AM Georgios Z. Papadopoulos <georgios.papadopoulos@imt-atlantique.fr <mailto:georgios.papadopoulos@imt-atlantique.fr>> wrote: >> Dear RFC editor, >> >> Thank you for your work and comments. >> >>> On 1 Mar 2024, at 20:08, rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org wrote: >>> >>> Authors, >>> >>> While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. >>> >>> 1) <!--[rfced] Fabrice: we see a slightly different address in RFC 9450. >>> Please let us know if ICube Lab, Pole API should be added to this >>> document as well?--> >>> >>> >>> 2) <!--[rfced] Please note that the XML submitted had some author >>> comments that have since been deleted. We assume all had been >>> reviewed. Please let us know if this is in error. --> >>> >>> >>> 3) <!--[rfced] Georgios: please note that we have updated the header to >>> use your single first initial as was done in RFC 9450. Please >>> let us know any objections. --> >> >> [GP] Many thanks. No objections. >> >>> 4) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in >>> the title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. --> >>> >>> >>> 5) <!--[rfced] Is the following text equivalent to the original? If so, >>> the "Perhaps" text may be clearer/easier for the reader. If not, >>> please let us know how to rephrase. >>> >>> Original: >>> Specifically, it investigates the requirements for a deterministic >>> network, supporting critical flows. >>> >>> Perhaps: >>> Specifically, it investigates the requirements for a deterministic >>> network that supports critical flows. >>> --> >> >> [GP] +1 >> Thanks for the reformulation. >> >>> 6) <!--[rfced] Please confirm that our updated text maintains your >>> intended meaning. >>> >>> Original: >>> DetNet expects to implement an OAM framework to maintain a real-time >>> view of the network infrastructure, and its ability to respect the >>> Service Level Objectives (SLOs), such as in-order packet delivery, >>> packet delay, delay variation, and packet loss ratio, assigned to each >>> DetNet flow. >>> >>> Current: >>> DetNet is expected to implement an OAM framework to maintain a >>> real-time view of the network infrastructure, and its ability to >>> respect the Service Level Objectives (SLOs), such as in-order packet >>> delivery, packet delay, delay variation, and packet loss ratio, >>> assigned to each DetNet flow. >>> --> >> >> [GP] +1 >> Thanks for the reformulation. >> >>> 7) <!--[rfced] Please review our updates to this paragraph to ensure we >>> have maintained your intended meaning. Note that a similar >>> change was made in Section 2. >>> >>> Original: >>> >>> This document lists the functional requirements toward OAM for a >>> DetNet domain. The list can further be used for gap analysis of >>> available OAM tools to identify possible enhancements of existing >>> or whether new OAM tools are required to support proactive and >>> on-demand path monitoring and service validation. >>> >>> Current: >>> >>> This document lists the OAM functional requirements for a DetNet >>> domain. The list can further be used for gap analysis of available >>> OAM tools to identify: >>> >>> * possible enhancements of existing tools, or >>> >>> * whether new OAM tools are required to support proactive and on- >>> demand path monitoring and service validation. >>> >>> --> >> >> [GP] +1 >> Thanks for the reformulation. >> >>> 8) <!--[rfced] As our policy is to expand abbreviations on first use, all >>> of the abbreviations in the "Abbreviations" sections have already >>> been introduced. Additionally, there are a number of >>> abbreviations in the "Definitions" section. Might it be better/ >>> more consistent to cut the "Abbreviations" section? --> >> >> [GP] +1 >> >>> 9) <!--[rfced] Please review the use of "it" in the following sentence. >>> Does it refer to "set" (i.e., a set of SLOs is required for the >>> flows that the set generates)? If not, please see the possible >>> rephrase below or let us know how we may clarify. >>> >>> Original: >>> Most critical applications will define a set of SLOs to be required >>> for the DetNet flows it generates. >>> >>> Perhaps: >>> Most critical applications will define a set of SLOs to be required >>> for the DetNet flows they generate. >>> --> >> >> [GP] +1 >> Thanks for the reformulation. >> >>> 10) <!--[rfced] In the following, may we cut "criteria" from this sentence >>> (as it seems to be the quality that degrades, not the criteria)? >>> >>> Original: >>> Because the quality of service criteria associated with a path may >>> degrade, the network has to provision additional resources along >>> the path. >>> >>> Perhaps: >>> Because the quality of service associated with a path may degrade, >>> the network has to provision additional resources along the path. >>> --> >> >> [GP] +1 >> Thanks for the reformulation. >> It makes more sense now indeed. >> >>> 11) <!--[rfced] We note that draft-mirsky-ippm-hybrid-two-step-15 is >>> listed in the datatracker as replaced by >>> draft-ietf-ippm-hybrid-two-step. 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- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Greg Mirsky
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Fabrice Theoleyre
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Georgios Z. Papadopoulos
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… CARLOS JESUS BERNARDOS CANO
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Megan Ferguson
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Greg Mirsky
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Fabrice Theoleyre
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Megan Ferguson
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Megan Ferguson
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Greg Mirsky
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Balázs Varga A
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… CARLOS JESUS BERNARDOS CANO
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Georgios Z. Papadopoulos
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Janos Farkas
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9551 <draft-ietf-d… Megan Ferguson