Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9326 <draft-ietf-ippm-ioam-direct-export-11> for your review
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Authors, While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. 1) <!-- [rfced] Please note that the title of the document has been updated as follows: a) Abbreviations have been expanded per Section 3.6 of RFC 7322 ("RFC Style Guide"). b) The hyphen in "In-situ" has been removed to be consistent with recently published IOAM documents. Please review. Original: In-situ OAM Direct Exporting Current: In Situ Operations, Administration, and Maintenance (IOAM) Direct Exporting --> 2) <!-- [rfced] We had the following questions related to similar text in both the Abstract and Introduction: Original (Abstract): This document introduces a new IOAM option type (denoted IOAM-Option-Type) called the Direct Export (DEX) Option-Type, which is used as a trigger for IOAM data to be directly exported or locally aggregated without being pushed into in-flight data packets. Original (Introduction): This document defines a new IOAM-Option-Type called the Direct Export (DEX) Option-Type. This Option-Type is used as a trigger for IOAM nodes to locally aggregate and process IOAM data, and/or to export it to a receiving entity (or entities). a) We have updated mentions in the text above to use "IOAM Direct Export (DEX) Option-Type" to exactly match its use at https://www.iana.org/assignments/ioam/ioam.xhtml. Please let us know any objections and/or if similar changes should be made elsewhere in the document (specifically the IANA Considerations section?). b) There is some difference in the description of how the DEX Option-Type is used in the Intro and Abstract. Please let us know if/how these instances should be made consistent. --> 3) <!-- [rfced] FYI: We changed "Direct EXporting" to "Direct Exporting" for consistency throughout the document. Please let us know of any objections. Original: DEX: Direct EXporting Current: DEX: Direct Exporting --> 4) <!-- [rfced] FYI: We rearranged parts of this sentence and added more context (specifically to the content in parenthesis) for ease of the reader. Please let us know of any objections. Original: An IOAM encapsulating node configured to incorporate the DEX Option-Type encapsulates (possibly a subset of) the packets it forwards with the DEX Option-Type, and MAY export and/or collect the requested IOAM data immediately. Current: An IOAM encapsulating node configured to incorporate the DEX Option-Type encapsulates the packets (and possibly a subset of the packets) it forwards with the DEX Option-Type and MAY export and/or collect the requested IOAM data immediately. --> 5) <!-- [rfced] Will readers know what "it" is referring to in this sentence? Original: Therefore, an IOAM encapsulating node that supports the DEX Option-Type MUST support the ability to incorporate the DEX Option-Type selectively into a subset of the packets that are forwarded by it. Perhaps: Therefore, an IOAM encapsulating node that supports the DEX Option-Type MUST support the ability to incorporate the DEX Option-Type selectively into a subset of the packets that are forwarded by the DEX Option-Type. --> 6) <!-- [rfced] We suggest rephrasing and condensing this sentence, as it may be difficult to parse for some readers due to the number of adverbs. Would the suggested text change the original meaning of the sentence? Original: As mentioned above, the data can be locally collected, and optionally can be aggregated and exported to a receiving entity, either proactively or on-demand. 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Thank you for your cooperation, RFC Editor -------------------------------------- RFC9326 (draft-ietf-ippm-ioam-direct-export-11) Title : In-situ OAM Direct Exporting Author(s) : H. Song, B. Gafni, F. Brockners, S. Bhandari, T. Mizrahi WG Chair(s) : Marcus Ihlar, Tommy Pauly Area Director(s) : Martin Duke, Zaheduzzaman Sarker
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