Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9556 <draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-10> for your review
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Subject: Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9556 <draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-10> for your review
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All, With Eve’s approval, we have now received all necessary approvals and consider AUTH48 complete: https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9556 Thank you for your attention and guidance during the AUTH48 process. We will move this document forward in the publication process at this time. RFC Editor/ap > On Apr 8, 2024, at 2:56 AM, Eve Schooler <eve.schooler@gmail.com> wrote: > > Hi All, > My sincere apologies for the long delay responding. > I also approve the publication of this document! > Thank you all for your efforts to get this document "to the finish line"! > Much appreciated. > Best regards, > Eve > > Eve M. Schooler, PhD > RAEng Visiting Professor of Sustainable Computing > Department of Engineering Science > University of Oxford, UK > +1 650-868-7369 > > On Thu, Apr 4, 2024 at 5:14 PM Alanna Paloma <apaloma@amsl.com> wrote: > Hi Matthias, > > We have noted your approval: > https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9556 > > Once we’ve received Eve’s approval, we will move this document forward in the publication process. > > Thank you, > RFC Editor/ap > > > On Apr 4, 2024, at 2:33 AM, Matthias Kovatsch <ietf@kovatsch.net> wrote: > > > > Dear Alanna > > > > I hereby also approve the publication. > > > > Kind regards, > > Matthias > > > >> -----Original Message----- > >> From: Alanna Paloma <apaloma@amsl.com> > >> Sent: Wednesday, April 3, 2024 5:14 PM > >> To: Yong-Geun Hong <yonggeun.hong@gmail.com> > >> Cc: Xavier De Foy <Xavier.DeFoy@interdigital.com>; Jungha Hong > >> <jhong@etri.re.kr>; Ari Keränen <ari.keranen@ericsson.com>; Colin Perkins > >> <csp@csperkins.org>; Matthias Kovatsch <matthias@kovatsch.net>; > >> eve.schooler@gmail.com; Kutscher, Dirk <ietf@dkutscher.net>; rfc-editor@rfc- > >> editor.org; irsg@irtf.org; auth48archive@rfc-editor.org > >> Subject: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9556 <draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-10> for your > >> review > >> > >> Hi Yong-Geun, > >> > >> You approval has been noted: > >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9556 > >> > >> We will await approvals from Matthias and Eve prior to moving this document > >> forward in the publication process. > >> > >> Thank you, > >> RFC Editor/ap > >> > >>> On Apr 2, 2024, at 4:27 PM, Yong-Geun Hong <yonggeun.hong@gmail.com> > >> wrote: > >>> > >>> Dear Alanna Paloma. > >>> > >>> Thanks for your efforts. > >>> > >>> I approve the publication of this draft. > >>> > >>> Best regards. > >>> > >>> Yong-Geun. > >>> > >>> 2024년 4월 2일 (화) 오전 9:06, Alanna Paloma <apaloma@amsl.com>님이 > >> 작성: > >>> Hi Xavier, > >>> > >>> Thank you for your reply. We’ve updated the files accordingly. > >>> > >>> The files have been posted here (please refresh): > >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556.txt > >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556.pdf > >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556.html > >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556.xml > >>> > >>> The relevant diff files are posted here: > >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556-diff.html (comprehensive diff) > >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556-auth48diff.html (all AUTH48 > >> changes) > >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556-lastdiff.html (htmlwdiff diff > >> between last version and this) > >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556-lastrfcdiff.html (rfcdiff between > >> last version and this) > >>> > >>> We will await approvals from each party listed on the AUTH48 status page > >> below prior to moving this document forward in the publication process. > >>> > >>> For the AUTH48 status of this document, please see: > >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9556 > >>> > >>> Thank you, > >>> RFC Editor/ap > >>> > >>>> On Apr 1, 2024, at 6:57 AM, Xavier De Foy > >> <Xavier.DeFoy@InterDigital.com> wrote: > >>>> > >>>> Hi Alanna, > >>>> > >>>> Here is my take on the use of "/" in the draft (if my co-authors agree) > >>>> > >>>> Original => my suggestion (note: additional note for the editor) > >>>> > >>>> > >>>> 2.1 > >>>> and/or => and/or > >>>> 2.4 > >>>> and/or => and/or > >>>> highly available/efficient => highly available and efficient > >>>> audio/video => audio and/or video > >>>> Artificial intelligence (AI) / machine learning (ML) systems => Artificial > >> intelligence (AI) and machine learning (ML) systems > >>>> 3.3 > >>>> and/or => and/or > >>>> 4.2 > >>>> devices/sensors => devices and sensors > >>>> remote/cloud => remote (e.g., cloud) > >>>> remote/cloud => remote (e.g., cloud) > >>>> IoT devices/computing nodes => The computing nodes > >>>> 4.3 > >>>> network/compute/storage => network/compute/storage > >>>> (note to the editor: actually, if using / here is a problem, possibly use > >> "network, compute, and storage", but I find the resulting sentence hard to > >> parse) > >>>> 4.3.2 > >>>> multi-vendor/operator => multi-vendor and multi-operator > >>>> 4.4.1 > >>>> compute/storage => compute and storage > >>>> to/from => to or from > >>>> distributed/peer-to-peer => distributed (e.g., peer-to-peer) > >>>> 4.4.2 > >>>> stored/cached data => data stored or cached > >>>> 4.4.3 > >>>> local/mobile => local or mobile > >>>> 4.5.1 > >>>> edge/local => local (e.g., edge) > >>>> functions/services => functions and services > >>>> 4.5.2 > >>>> AI/ML => AI/ML (note: keep as is, this is a common contraction) > >>>> > >>>> > >>>> Best Regards, > >>>> Xavier. > >>>> > >>>> -----Original Message----- > >>>> From: Alanna Paloma <apaloma@amsl.com> > >>>> Sent: Monday, March 25, 2024 2:26 PM > >>>> To: Jungha Hong <jhong@etri.re.kr> > >>>> Cc: Ari Keränen <ari.keranen@ericsson.com>; Colin Perkins > >> <csp@csperkins.org>; yonggeun.hong@gmail.com; Xavier De Foy > >> <Xavier.DeFoy@InterDigital.com>; ietf@kovatsch.net; > >> eve.schooler@gmail.com; Kutscher, Dirk <ietf@dkutscher.net>; rfc-editor@rfc- > >> editor.org; irsg@irtf.org; auth48archive@rfc-editor.org > >>>> Subject: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9556 <draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-10> for your > >> review > >>>> > >>>> Hi Jungha, > >>>> > >>>> Thank you for your reply. We have updated the files accordingly. > >>>> > >>>> Please note that we have one remaining query: > >>>>> ) Might it be helpful to the reader to clarify the slash in cases like the > >> following (i.e., does it stand for "and", "or", or "and/or"?)? Note: this appears > >> in several places, the following is just an example. > >>>>> > >>>>> Original: > >>>>> The IoT gateway plays a common role in providing access to a > >>>>> heterogeneous set of IoT devices/sensors,... > >>>>> > >>>>> Perhaps: > >>>>> The IoT gateway plays a common role in providing access to a > >>>>> heterogeneous set of IoT devices and sensors,… > >>>> > >>>> … > >>>> The files have been posted here (please refresh): > >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556.txt > >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556.pdf > >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556.html > >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556.xml > >>>> > >>>> The relevant diff files are posted here: > >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556-diff.html (comprehensive diff) > >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556-auth48diff.html (all AUTH48 > >> changes) https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556-lastdiff.html (htmlwdiff > >> diff between last version and this) https://www.rfc- > >> editor.org/authors/rfc9556-lastrfcdiff.html (rfcdiff between last version and > >> this) > >>>> > >>>> For the AUTH48 status of this document, please see: > >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9556 > >>>> > >>>> Thank you, > >>>> RFC Editor/ap > >>>> > >>>>> On Mar 22, 2024, at 9:48 AM, Jungha Hong <jhong@etri.re.kr> wrote: > >>>>> > >>>>> Hi, > >>>>> > >>>>> Please find my answers inline with [JH]. > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> -----Original Message----- > >>>>> From: Alanna Paloma <apaloma@amsl.com> > >>>>> Sent: Saturday, March 23, 2024 1:23 AM > >>>>> To: Ari Keränen <ari.keranen@ericsson.com>; Colin Perkins > >>>>> <csp@csperkins.org>; jhong@etri.re.kr; yonggeun.hong@gmail.com; > >> Xavier > >>>>> De Foy <Xavier.DeFoy=40InterDigital.com@dmarc.ietf.org>; > >>>>> ietf@kovatsch.net; eve.schooler@gmail.com; Kutscher, Dirk > >>>>> <ietf@dkutscher.net> > >>>>> Cc: rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org; irsg@irtf.org; > >>>>> auth48archive@rfc-editor.org > >>>>> Subject: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9556 <draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-10> for > >>>>> your review > >>>>> > >>>>> Authors, Ari, and Colin, > >>>>> > >>>>> Thank you for your replies. We have updated the files accordingly. Please > >> see below for our additional questions. > >>>>> > >>>>>> The text in sec 2.4 “Self-driving car”says : > >>>>>> such as high-resolution cameras, radars, Light Detection and > >>>>>> Ranging (LiDAR), sonar sensors, and GPS systems Since we say “radars” > >> should we also say “LiDARs” or change “radars” to “radar”? > >>>>> > >>>>> ) Instead of pluralizing “LiDAR”, may we update it to “LiDAR systems”? > >>>>> > >>>>> Perhaps: > >>>>> With a multitude of sensors, such as high-resolution > >>>>> cameras, radars, Light Detection and Ranging (LiDAR) systems, sonar > >>>>> sensors, and GPS systems, autonomous vehicles generate vast > >>>>> amounts of real-time data. > >>>>> > >>>>> [JH] “LiDAR systems” is better. > >>>>> > >>>>> ) Might it be helpful to the reader to clarify the slash in cases like the > >> following (i.e., does it stand for "and", "or", or "and/or"?)? Note: this appears > >> in several places, the following is just an example. > >>>>> > >>>>> Original: > >>>>> The IoT gateway plays a common role in providing access to a > >>>>> heterogeneous set of IoT devices/sensors,... > >>>>> > >>>>> Perhaps: > >>>>> The IoT gateway plays a common role in providing access to a > >>>>> heterogeneous set of IoT devices and sensors,… > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>>>> 6) <!--[rfced] Should "device" be updated to "devise" or is there > >>>>>>> another way to rephrase this sentence? > >>>>>>> Original: > >>>>>>> Conversely, a cloud back-end might want to device data even if it is > >>>>>>> currently asleep. > >>>>>>> Perhaps: > >>>>>>> Conversely, a cloud backend might want to access device data even if > >>>>>>> the device is currently asleep. > >>>>>>> --> > >>>>>> Good catch – we meant the second variant. > >>>>> > >>>>> ) Please clarify, should the sentence be updated to use “devise” or should > >> it be updated to the Perhaps text? > >>>>> > >>>>> [JH] Please update it to the Perhaps text. > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>>>> 20) <!--[rfced] Throughout the document, there were certain places > >>>>>>> we may have expected a citation. Please review cases like the > >>>>>>> following (there may be more, just examples): > >>>>>>> As the number of people working on farming has been decreasing over > >>>>>>> time,... > >>>>>>> *Smart Construction* > >>>>>>> Safety is critical at construction sites. Every year, many > >>>>>>> construction workers lose their lives because of falls, collisions, > >>>>>>> electric shocks, and other accidents. > >>>>>>> Policy makers have begun to provide frameworks that limit the usage > >>>>>>> of personal data and impose strict requirements on data controllers > >>>>>>> and processors. > >>>>>>> --> > >>>>>> Good point – I suggest that we (authors) go through the document and > >> add references to such statements. > >>>>> > >>>>> ) Please note that we still await word regarding where citations should be > >> added. > >>>>> > >>>>> [JH] I have added 8 citations as follows: > >>>>> > >>>>> *Smart Factory* > >>>>> The use of edge computing in a smart factory [Jamilu] can reduce the > >>>>> cost of network and storage resources by reducing the communication > >>>>> load to the central data center or server. > >>>>> > >>>>> [Jamilu] Argungu, J., Idina, M., Chalawa, U., Ummar, M., Bello, S., Arzika, I., > >> and Mala, B., > >>>>> "A Survey of Edge Computing Approaches in Smart Factory", International > >> Journal of Advanced > >>>>> Research in Computer and Communication Engineering, Vol. 12, Issue > >> 9, September 2023. > >>>>> > >>>>> *Smart Grid* > >>>>> In future smart city scenarios, the Smart Grid will be critical in > >>>>> ensuring highly available/efficient energy control in city-wide > >>>>> electricity management [Mehmood]. > >>>>> > >>>>> [Mehmood] Mehmood, M., Oad, A., Abrar, M., Munir, H., Hasan, S., > >> Muqeet, H., and Golilarz, N., > >>>>> "Edge computing for IoT-enabled smart grid", Security and > >> Communication Networks, Vol. 2021, > >>>>> Article ID 5524025, https://doi.org/10.1155/2021/5524025. > >>>>> > >>>>> *Smart Agriculture* > >>>>> In existing farms, simple systems such as management according to > >>>>> temperature and humidity can be easily and inexpensively implemented > >>>>> using IoT technology [Tanveer]. > >>>>> > >>>>> As the number of people working on farming has been decreasing over > >>>>> time, increasing automation enabled by edge computing can be a driving > >>>>> force for future smart agriculture [OGrady]. > >>>>> > >>>>> [Tanveer] Tanveer, S., Sree, N., Bhavana, B., and Varsha, D., "Smart > >> Agriculture System using IoT", > >>>>> 2022 IEEE World Conference on Applied Intelligence and Computing > >> (AIC), Sonbhadra, India, 2022, > >>>>> pp. 482-486, doi: 10.1109/AIC55036.2022.9848948. > >>>>> > >>>>> [OGrady] O'Grady, M., Langton, D., and O'Hare, G., "Edge computing: A > >> tractable model for smart agriculture?", > >>>>> Artificial Intelligence in Agriculture, Vol. 3, September 2019, Pages > >> 42-51, https://doi.org/10.1016/j.aiia.2019.12.001. > >>>>> > >>>>> *Smart Construction* > >>>>> Safety is critical at construction sites. Every year, many > >>>>> construction workers lose their lives because of falls, collisions, > >>>>> electric shocks, and other accidents [BigRentz]. > >>>>> > >>>>> Using edge computing[Yue], data generated at the construction site can > >>>>> be processed and analyzed on an edge server located within or near the > >>>>> site. > >>>>> > >>>>> [BigRentz] BigRentz, "41 Construction Safety Statistics for 2024", > >> https://www.bigrentz.com/blog/construction-safety-statistics. > >>>>> > >>>>> [Yue] Yue, Q.,Mu, S., Zhang, L., Wang, Z., Zhang, Z., Zhang, X., Wang, Y., > >> and Miao, Z., > >>>>> "Assisting Smart Construction With Reliable Edge Computing > >> Technology", Frontiers in Energy Research, Sec. Smart Grids, > >>>>> Vol. 10, 2022, https://doi.org/10.3389/fenrg.2022.900298. > >>>>> > >>>>> *Self-Driving Car* > >>>>> Edge computing plays a crucial role in safety-focused self-driving car > >> systems [Badjie]. > >>>>> > >>>>> [Badjie] The Future of Autonomous Driving Systems with Edge Computing, > >>>>> https://medium.com/@bakarykumba1996/the-future-of- > >> autonomous-driving-systems-with-edge-computing-8c919597c4ee. > >>>>> > >>>>> *Digital Twin* > >>>>> Decision makers can use digital twins to test and validate different > >>>>> strategies, identify inefficiencies, and optimize Performance [CertMagic]. > >>>>> > >>>>> [CertMagic] CertMagic, "Digital Twin Technology: Simulating Real-World > >> Scenarios for Enhanced Decision Making", > >>>>> https://certmagic.medium.com/digital-twin-technology- > >> simulating-real-world-scenarios-for-enhanced-decision-making-8844c51e856d. > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> --- > >>>>> The files have been posted here (please refresh): > >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556.txt > >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556.pdf > >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556.html > >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556.xml > >>>>> > >>>>> The relevant diff files are posted here: > >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556-diff.html (comprehensive > >>>>> diff) https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556-auth48diff.html (all > >>>>> AUTH48 changes) > >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556-lastdiff.html (htmlwdiff > >>>>> diff between last version and this) > >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9556-lastrfcdiff.html (rfcdiff > >>>>> between last version and this) > >>>>> > >>>>> For the AUTH48 status of this document, please see: > >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9556 > >>>>> > >>>>> We will await approvals from each party listed on the AUTH48 status page > >> below prior to moving this document forward in the publication process. > >>>>> > >>>>> Thank you, > >>>>> RFC Editor/ap > >>>>> > >>>>>> On Mar 22, 2024, at 7:51 AM, Ari Keränen <ari.keranen@ericsson.com> > >> wrote: > >>>>>> > >>>>>> One small thing that I noticed while reading the diff (sending to retracted > >> audience since it’s really nitty). The text in sec 2.4 “Self-driving car”says : > >>>>>> such as high-resolution cameras, radars, Light Detection and > >>>>>> Ranging (LiDAR), sonar sensors, and GPS systems Since we say “radars” > >> should we also say “LiDARs” or change “radars” to “radar”? > >>>>>> Cheers, > >>>>>> Ari > >>>>>> From: irsg <irsg-bounces@irtf.org> on behalf of Ari Keränen > >>>>>> <ari.keranen=40ericsson.com@dmarc.ietf.org> > >>>>>> Date: Friday, 22. March 2024 at 16.35 > >>>>>> To: Alanna Paloma <apaloma@amsl.com>, Xavier De Foy > >>>>>> <Xavier.DeFoy=40InterDigital.com@dmarc.ietf.org>, Kutscher, Dirk > >>>>>> <ietf@dkutscher.net>, yonggeun.hong@gmail.com > >>>>>> <yonggeun.hong@gmail.com> > >>>>>> Cc: auth48archive@rfc-editor.org <auth48archive@rfc-editor.org>, > >>>>>> jhong@etri.re.kr <jhong@etri.re.kr>, irsg@irtf.org <irsg@irtf.org>, > >>>>>> ietf@kovatsch.net <ietf@kovatsch.net>, rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org > >>>>>> <rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org> > >>>>>> Subject: Re: [irsg] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9556 > >>>>>> <draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-10> for your review Hi Authors & Alanna, > >>>>>> I believe the “DDS” acronym should be actually “Data Distribution > >> Service” instead of “Discovery Domain Set”. > >>>>>> Otherwise the updates as discussed below look good to me. > >>>>>> Cheers, > >>>>>> Ari (as the doc shepherd) > >>>>>> From: Alanna Paloma <apaloma@amsl.com> > >>>>>> Date: Thursday, 21. March 2024 at 20.49 > >>>>>> To: Xavier De Foy <Xavier.DeFoy=40InterDigital.com@dmarc.ietf.org>, > >>>>>> Kutscher, Dirk <ietf@dkutscher.net>, yonggeun.hong@gmail.com > >>>>>> <yonggeun.hong@gmail.com> > >>>>>> Cc: rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org <rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org>, > >>>>>> jhong@etri.re.kr <jhong@etri.re.kr>, ietf@kovatsch.net > >>>>>> <ietf@kovatsch.net>, eve.schooler@gmail.com > >> <eve.schooler@gmail.com>, > >>>>>> irsg@irtf.org <irsg@irtf.org>, Ari Keränen > >>>>>> <ari.keranen@ericsson.com>, auth48archive@rfc-editor.org > >>>>>> <auth48archive@rfc-editor.org> > >>>>>> Subject: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9556 <draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-10> > >>>>>> for your review Authors, > >>>>>> > >>>>>> Thank you for your replies. We have updated the files as requested. See > >> below for additional questions and comments. > >>>>>> > >>>>>> ) Yong-Geun - In RFC 9453, your name appears as "Y-G.” in the header, > >> and in this document, it appears as "Y.-G.” May we update this document to > >> remove the period after “Y” to reflect RFC 9453? > >>>>>> > >>>>>> ) Might it be helpful to the reader to clarify the slash in cases like the > >> following (i.e., does it stand for "and", "or", or "and/or"?)? Note: this appears > >> in several places, the following is just an example. > >>>>>> > >>>>>> Original: > >>>>>> The IoT gateway plays a common role in providing access to a > >>>>>> heterogeneous set of IoT devices/sensors,... > >>>>>> > >>>>>> Perhaps: > >>>>>> The IoT gateway plays a common role in providing access to a > >>>>>> heterogeneous set of IoT devices and sensors,… > >>>>>> > >>>>>>>> 6) <!--[rfced] Should "device" be updated to "devise" or is there > >>>>>>>> another way to rephrase this sentence? > >>>>>>>> Original: > >>>>>>>> Conversely, a cloud back-end might want to device data even if it > >>>>>>>> is currently asleep. > >>>>>>>> Perhaps: > >>>>>>>> Conversely, a cloud backend might want to access device data even > >>>>>>>> if the device is currently asleep. > >>>>>>>> --> > >>>>>>> Good catch – we meant the second variant. > >>>>>> > >>>>>> ) Please clarify, should the sentence be updated to use “devise” or should > >> it be updated to the Perhaps text? > >>>>>> > >>>>>>>> 9) <!--[rfced] The SVG figures in Section 4.2 have their width and > >>>>>>>> height specified, which will make the artwork not scale. 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Please review cases like the > >>>>>>>> following (there may be more, just examples): > >>>>>>>> As the number of people working on farming has been decreasing over > >>>>>>>> time,... > >>>>>>>> *Smart Construction* > >>>>>>>> Safety is critical at construction sites. 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Note that we do not make changes once a document is > >> published as an RFC. > >>>>>> > >>>>>> We will await approvals from each party listed on the AUTH48 status > >> page below prior to moving this document forward in the publication process. > >>>>>> > >>>>>> For the AUTH48 status of this document, please see: > >>>>>> > >>>>>> https://www/. > >>>>>> rfc- > >> editor.org%2Fauth48%2Frfc9556&data=05%7C02%7Cari.keranen%40ericss > >>>>>> o > >>>>>> > >> n.com%7Ce84ce8fc30894c03e9f908dc49d78462%7C92e84cebfbfd47abbe5208 > >> 0c6b > >>>>>> 8 > >>>>>> > >> 7953f%7C0%7C0%7C638466437584505133%7CUnknown%7CTWFpbGZsb3d8 > >> eyJWIjoiMC > >>>>>> 4 > >>>>>> > >> wLjAwMDAiLCJQIjoiV2luMzIiLCJBTiI6Ik1haWwiLCJXVCI6Mn0%3D%7C0%7C%7 > >> C%7C& > >>>>>> s > >>>>>> > >> data=kzFEwCnqIAUny0o13ijF5OqnFQ9N99%2F%2Fz4YshWSMh1s%3D&reserve > >> d=0 > >>>>>> > >>>>>> Thank you, > >>>>>> RFC Editor/ap > >>>>>> > >>>>>>> On Mar 20, 2024, at 4:13 PM, Xavier De Foy > >> <Xavier.DeFoy=40InterDigital.com@dmarc.ietf.org> wrote: > >>>>>>> > >>>>>>> Hi, > >>>>>>> Thank you very much for the review and updates. I generally agree with > >> Dirks replies and added a few minor comments with the marker [xdf] below. I > >> believe at this stage there are a couple of open items (one about the figure, > >> and one about possibly adding references). About the figures, I don’t have a > >> strong opinion (the current figures, which I guess are still not scaled, look fine > >> to me on PC and phone, and I don’t know how to test with scaling). For the > >> second point I’ll check with the editor of the use case section. > >>>>>>> Best Regards, > >>>>>>> Xavier. > >>>>>>> From: Dirk Kutscher <ietf@dkutscher.net> > >>>>>>> Sent: Tuesday, March 19, 2024 10:43 AM > >>>>>>> To: rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org > >>>>>>> Cc: jhong@etri.re.kr; yonggeun.hong@gmail.com; Xavier De Foy > >>>>>>> <Xavier.DeFoy@InterDigital.com>; ietf@kovatsch.net; > >>>>>>> eve.schooler@gmail.com; irsg@irtf.org; ari.keranen@ericsson.com; > >>>>>>> auth48archive@rfc-editor.org > >>>>>>> Subject: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9556 <draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-10> > >>>>>>> for your review Hello, many thanks for the careful review and the > >>>>>>> questions. > >>>>>>> Some answers inline: > >>>>>>> 1) <!-- [rfced] Please note that the title of the document has been > >>>>>>> updated as follows. Abbreviations have been expanded per Section > >>>>>>> 3.6 of RFC 7322 ("RFC Style Guide"). Please review. > >>>>>>> Original: > >>>>>>> IoT Edge Challenges and Functions > >>>>>>> Current: > >>>>>>> Internet of Things (IoT) Edge Challenges and Functions > >>>>>>> --> > >>>>>>> ACK > >>>>>>> 2) <!--[rfced] Dirk and Matthias: Is there a "short name" we could > >>>>>>> use for your organizations in the header?--> For Dirk: HKUST(GZ) > >>>>>>> 3) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear > >>>>>>> in the title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. --> > >>>>>>> • > >>>>>>> in-network computing > >>>>>>> • in network caching > >>>>>>> • in network storage > >>>>>>> > >>>>>>> 4) <!--[rfced] To help with longevity, we have updated uses of > >>>>>>> "currently", "today" and the like to say "at the time of writing". > >>>>>>> Please let us know any objections.--> ACK > >>>>>>> 5) <!--[rfced] Is the meaning of this sentence that IoT technology > >>>>>>> is being applied in more types of domains? Or that the applications > >>>>>>> listed are more demanding than other domains? (That is, is the > >>>>>>> healthcare domain itself more demanding or is there some application > >>>>>>> inside the healthcare domain that is more demanding?) > >>>>>>> Original: > >>>>>>> IoT technology is used with increasingly demanding applications, for > >>>>>>> example, in industrial, automotive and healthcare domains, leading > >>>>>>> to new challenges. > >>>>>>> Perhpas A: > >>>>>>> IoT technology is used with increasingly demanding applications in > >>>>>>> domains such as industrial, automotive, and healthcare, which leads > >>>>>>> to new challenges. > >>>>>>> Perhaps B: > >>>>>>> IoT technology is used with increasingly demanding applications, for > >>>>>>> example, the industrial, automotive, and healthcare domains, leading > >>>>>>> to new challenges. > >>>>>>> --> > >>>>>>> Variant A sounds good. > >>>>>>> 6) <!--[rfced] Should "device" be updated to "devise" or is there > >>>>>>> another way to rephrase this sentence? > >>>>>>> Original: > >>>>>>> Conversely, a cloud back-end might want to device data even if it is > >>>>>>> currently asleep. > >>>>>>> Perhaps: > >>>>>>> Conversely, a cloud backend might want to access device data even if > >>>>>>> the device is currently asleep. > >>>>>>> --> > >>>>>>> Good catch – we meant the second variant. > >>>>>>> 7) <!--[rfced] The following three sentences use "typically". We > >>>>>>> will update to use another word to reduce redundancy unless we hear > >>>>>>> objection. > >>>>>>> Original: > >>>>>>> The service and application life-cycle is typically using an > >>>>>>> NFV-like management and orchestration model. > >>>>>>> The platform typically enables advertising or consuming services > >>>>>>> hosted on the platform (e.g., the Mp1 interface in ETSI MEC supports > >>>>>>> service discovery and communication), and enables communication with > >>>>>>> local and remote endpoints (e.g., message routing function in IoT > >>>>>>> gateways). The platform is typically extensible to edge applications > >>>>>>> because it can advertise a service that other edge applications can > >>>>>>> consume. > >>>>>>> Perhaps: > >>>>>>> Typically, the service and application life cycle is using an > >>>>>>> NFV-like management and orchestration model. > >>>>>>> The platform generally enables advertising or consuming services > >>>>>>> hosted on the platform (e.g., the Mp1 interface in ETSI MEC supports > >>>>>>> service discovery and communication), and enables communication with > >>>>>>> local and remote endpoints (e.g., message routing function in IoT > >>>>>>> gateways). The platform is usually extensible to edge applications > >>>>>>> because it can advertise a service that other edge applications can > >>>>>>> consume. > >>>>>>> --> > >>>>>>> Yes, thank you. > >>>>>>> 8) <!--[rfced] Please review the following questions related to this text: > >>>>>>> a) We are having trouble parsing "the list associated logical > >>>>>>> functions". Is "list" intended to be a noun or a verb? > >>>>>>> b) The placement of "in this section" is somewhat jarring (and makes > >>>>>>> two introductory phrases in the sentence). May we update as follows? > >>>>>>> Original: > >>>>>>> Although there are many approaches to edge computing, in this > >>>>>>> section, we attempt to lay out a general model and the list > >>>>>>> associated logical functions. > >>>>>>> Perhaps A (list is a noun): > >>>>>>> Although there are many approaches to edge computing, this section > >>>>>>> lays out an attempt at a general model and the list of associated > >>>>>>> logical functions. > >>>>>>> Perhaps B (list is a verb): > >>>>>>> Although there are many approaches to edge computing, this sections > >>>>>>> lays out an attempt at a general model and lists associated logical > >>>>>>> functions. > >>>>>>> --> > >>>>>>> Variant B sounds good. > >>>>>>> 9) <!--[rfced] The SVG figures in Section 4.2 have their width and > >>>>>>> height specified, which will make the artwork not scale. Please > >>>>>>> consider whether scaling should be enabled. Scaling will allow the > >>>>>>> figure to be resized when it is viewed on a mobile device; however, > >>>>>>> there may be aesthetic trade-offs (e.g., image may appear too large > >>>>>>> on a desktop screen or different figures may scale differently based > >>>>>>> on their relative sizes). Please review the HTML and PDF outputs and > >>>>>>> let us know how to proceed. > >>>>>>> --> > >>>>>>> The figure should probably be scaled so that the font size in the figure > >> corresponds to the one in the text and so that the figure is not wider than the > >> text width. What is a good way to achieve this in a portable fashion? > >>>>>>> [xdf] I don’t have a strong opinion on this, but after checking the pdf > >> and html links you provide at the end of this email, on a laptop and on a phone, > >> the 2 figures look fine as they are right now. > >>>>>>> 10) <!--[rfced] In the following text, how does the last clause > >>>>>>> relate to the rest of the sentence? If our suggested rephrase does > >>>>>>> not correctly capture your intent, please let us know how to > >>>>>>> rephrase. > >>>>>>> Original: > >>>>>>> In a distributed image processing application, some image processing > >>>>>>> functions can be similarly executed at the edge or in the cloud, > >>>>>>> while preprocessing, which helps limiting the amount of uploaded > >>>>>>> data, is performed by the IoT device. > >>>>>>> Perhaps: > >>>>>>> Similarly, in a distributed image processing application, some image > >>>>>>> processing functions can be executed at the edge or in the cloud, > >>>>>>> which helps with limiting the amount of uploaded data to be > >>>>>>> performed by the IoT device. > >>>>>>> --> > >>>>>>> How about this: > >>>>>>> Similarly, in a distributed image processing application, some image > >>>>>>> processing functions can be executed at the edge or in the cloud. To > >> limit the amount of data to be uploaded to central cloud functions, IoT edge > >> devices may pre-process data. > >>>>>>> 11) <!--[rfced] Should "IRTF attendees" be further clarified? Is > >>>>>>> this a particular meeting? Participants of all Research Groups?--> I > >>>>>>> suggest "participants of T2TRG meetings". > >>>>>>> 12) <!--[rfced] To avoid the awkward readability of both "used" and > >>>>>>> "using" in the same sentence, may we make the following update? > >>>>>>> Original: > >>>>>>> Broker-based solutions can be used, for example, using an IoT > >>>>>>> gateway as a broker to discover IoT resources. > >>>>>>> Perhaps: > >>>>>>> Broker-based solutions can be implemented; an example would be using > >>>>>>> an IoT gateway as a broker to discover IoT resources. > >>>>>>> --> > >>>>>>> How about: > >>>>>>> "In a broker-based system, an IoT gateway can act as a broker to > >> discover IoT resources." > >>>>>>> 13) <!--[rfced] Please review our update to "in replacement or > >> complement" > >>>>>>> and let us know if it does not capture your intended meaning. > >>>>>>> Original: > >>>>>>> More decentralized solutions can also be used in replacement or > >>>>>>> complement, for example, CoAP enables multicast discovery of an IoT > >>>>>>> device, and CoAP service discovery enables obtaining a list of > >>>>>>> resources made available by this device [RFC7252]. > >>>>>>> Current: > >>>>>>> More decentralized solutions can also be used in replacement of or > >>>>>>> in complement to the broker-based solutions; for example, CoAP > >>>>>>> enables multicast discovery of an IoT device and CoAP service > >>>>>>> discovery enables one to obtain a list of resources made available > >>>>>>> by this device [RFC7252]. > >>>>>>> --> > >>>>>>> Yes, much better. > >>>>>>> 14) <!--[rfced] Please review our update to the following text to > >>>>>>> ensure we've correctly captured your intended meaning. Because this > >>>>>>> text includes an example within an example and both are within a > >>>>>>> list, please review carefully. > >>>>>>> Original: > >>>>>>> * Adapting cloud management platforms to the edge, to account for > >>>>>>> its distributed nature, e.g., using Conflict-free Replicated Data > >>>>>>> Types (CRDT) [Jeffery], heterogeneity and customization, e.g., using > >>>>>>> intent-based management mechanisms [Cao], and limited resources. > >>>>>>> Current: > >>>>>>> * Adapting cloud management platforms to the edge to account for its > >>>>>>> distributed nature, e.g., using Conflict-free Replicated Data Types > >>>>>>> (CRDTs) [Jeffery], heterogeneity and customization (e.g., using > >>>>>>> intent-based management mechanisms [Cao]), and limited resources > >>>>>>> --> > >>>>>>> Thanks for spotting this. This sentence seems problematic for a couple > >> of reasons. The examples are quite specific. If co-authors and our shepherd > >> agree, we could simplify as follows: > >>>>>>> Adapting cloud management platforms to the edge to account for its > >> distributed nature, heterogeneity, need for customization, and limited > >> resources. > >>>>>>> [xdf] sounds good to me. I would propose keeping the references, by > >> adding a sentence after the one proposed by Dirk. Something like this (if co- > >> authors and shepherd agree): > >>>>>>> OLD: > >>>>>>> * Adapting cloud management platforms to the edge, to account for > >>>>>>> its distributed nature, e.g., using Conflict-free Replicated Data > >>>>>>> Types (CRDT) [Jeffery], heterogeneity and customization, e.g., using > >>>>>>> intent-based management mechanisms [Cao], and limited resources. > >>>>>>> NEW: > >>>>>>> * Adapting cloud management platforms to the edge to account for its > >> distributed nature, heterogeneity, need for customization, and limited > >> resources. For example, using Conflict-free Replicated Data Types (CRDTs) > >> [Jeffery] or intent-based management mechanisms [Cao]. > >>>>>>> 15) <!--[rfced] How can we break this run-on sentence up for the > >> reader? > >>>>>>> Original: > >>>>>>> * (Computation placement) Selecting, in a centralized or > >>>>>>> distributed/peer-to-peer manner, an appropriate compute device based > >>>>>>> on available resources, location of data input and data sinks, > >>>>>>> compute node properties, etc., and with varying goals including > >>>>>>> end-to-end latency, privacy, high availability, energy conservation, > >>>>>>> or network efficiency, for example, using load- balancing techniques > >>>>>>> to avoid congestion. > >>>>>>> Perhaps: > >>>>>>> * Computation placement: in a centralized or > >>>>>>> distributed/peer-to-peer manner, selecting an appropriate compute > >>>>>>> device. The selection is based on available resources, location of > >>>>>>> data input and data sinks, compute node properties, etc. with > >>>>>>> varying goals. These goals include end-to-end latency, privacy, high > >>>>>>> availability, energy conservation, or network efficiency. For > >>>>>>> example, using load-balancing techniques to avoid congestion. > >>>>>>> --> > >>>>>>> Yes, much better – thanks! > >>>>>>> 16) <!--[rfced] We are having difficulty parsing the parenthetical. > >>>>>>> Please review and let us know how it may be updated for clarity. > >>>>>>> Original: > >>>>>>> * Maintaining consistency, freshness, reliability, and privacy of > >>>>>>> stored/cached data in systems that are distributed, constrained, and > >>>>>>> dynamic (e.g., owing to end devices and computing nodes churn or > >>>>>>> mobility), and which can have additional data governance constraints > >>>>>>> on data storage location. > >>>>>>> --> > >>>>>>> I suggest the following: > >>>>>>> • Maintaining consistency, freshness, reliability, and privacy of > >>>>>>> stored/cached data in systems that are distributed, constrained, and > >> dynamic (e.g., due to node mobility, energy-saving regimes, and disruptions) > >> and which can have additional data governance constraints on data storage > >> location. > >>>>>>> 17) <!--[rfced] Is the following sentence intended to be a list of > >>>>>>> characteristics of communication brokering? If so, may we update it > >>>>>>> as follows? > >>>>>>> Original: > >>>>>>> Communication brokering is a typical function of IoT edge computing > >>>>>>> that facilitates communication with IoT devices, enabling clients to > >>>>>>> register as recipients for data from devices, as well as forwarding/ > >>>>>>> routing of traffic to or from IoT devices, enabling various data > >>>>>>> discovery and redistribution patterns, for example, north-south with > >>>>>>> clouds, east-west with other edge devices > >>>>>>> [I-D.mcbride-edge-data-discovery-overview]. > >>>>>>> Perhaps: > >>>>>>> Communication brokering is a typical function of IoT edge computing > >>>>>>> that facilitates communication with IoT devices, enables clients to > >>>>>>> register as recipients for data from devices forwards/routes of > >>>>>>> traffic to or from IoT devices, enables various data discovery and > >>>>>>> redistribution patterns (for example, north-south with clouds and > >>>>>>> east-west with other edge devices > >>>>>>> [I-D.mcbride-edge-data-discovery-overview]. > >>>>>>> --> > >>>>>>> Thanks, much better. Some additional edits: > >>>>>>> Communication brokering is a typical function of IoT edge computing > >>>>>>> that facilitates communication with IoT devices, enables clients to > >>>>>>> register as recipients for data from devices, forwards traffic to or > >>>>>>> from IoT devices, enables various data discovery and redistribution > >>>>>>> patterns (for example, north-south with clouds and east-west with > >>>>>>> other edge devices [I-D.mcbride-edge-data-discovery-overview]. > >>>>>>> [xdf] minor typo: need to close the parenthesis at the end of the > >> paragraph. > >>>>>>> 18) <!--[rfced] It's unclear how "dynamic" fits into the sentence below. > >>>>>>> Is it meant to read "dynamic environtments"? > >>>>>>> Original: > >>>>>>> * Addressing concerns such as limited resources, privacy, dynamic, > >>>>>>> and heterogeneous environments to deploy machine learning at the > >>>>>>> edge: > >>>>>>> Perhaps: > >>>>>>> * Addressing concerns such as limited resources, privacy, and > >>>>>>> dynamic and heterogeneous environments to deploy machine learning > >> at > >>>>>>> the > >>>>>>> edge: > >>>>>>> --> > >>>>>>> Yes. > >>>>>>> 19) <!-- [rfced] Please ensure that the guidelines listed in Section > >>>>>>> 2.1 of RFC 5743 have been adhered to in this document. --> IMO, > >> "Status of This Memo" has all the required information. > >>>>>>> 20) <!--[rfced] Throughout the document, there were certain places > >>>>>>> we may have expected a citation. Please review cases like the > >>>>>>> following (there may be more, just examples): > >>>>>>> As the number of people working on farming has been decreasing over > >>>>>>> time,... > >>>>>>> *Smart Construction* > >>>>>>> Safety is critical at construction sites. Every year, many > >>>>>>> construction workers lose their lives because of falls, collisions, > >>>>>>> electric shocks, and other accidents. > >>>>>>> Policy makers have begun to provide frameworks that limit the usage > >>>>>>> of personal data and impose strict requirements on data controllers > >>>>>>> and processors. > >>>>>>> --> > >>>>>>> Good point – I suggest that we (authors) go through the document and > >> add references to such statements. > >>>>>>> 21) <!-- [rfced] Throughout the text, the following terminology > >>>>>>> appears to be used inconsistently. Please review these occurrences > >>>>>>> and let us know if/how they may be made consistent. > >>>>>>> a) Capitalization > >>>>>>> Big Data vs. big data > >>>>>>> Cloud vs. cloud > >>>>>>> Industrial IoT vs. industrial IoT > >>>>>>> Smart Grid vs. smart grid > >>>>>>> Thing vs. thing > >>>>>>> Edge vs. edge > >>>>>>> I'm in favor of using lowercase for all terms except for "Thing". > >>>>>>> b) hyphenation > >>>>>>> edge computing vs. edge-computing (when in attributive position > >>>>>>> (before a noun)) > >>>>>>> --> > >>>>>>> How about just using "edge computing"? > >>>>>>> 22) <!-- [rfced] FYI - We have added expansions for the following > >>>>>>> abbreviations per Section 3.6 of RFC 7322 ("RFC Style Guide"). > >>>>>>> Please review each expansion in the document carefully to ensure > >>>>>>> correctness. > >>>>>>> Content Delivery Network (CDN) > >>>>>>> Constrained Application Protocol (CoAP) Discovery Domain Set (DDS) > >>>>>>> Information-Centric Networking (ICN) Light Detection and Ranging > >>>>>>> (LiDAR) Multi-access Edge Computing (MEC) Message Queuing > >> Telemetry > >>>>>>> Transport (MQTT) Open Platform Communications Unified Architecture > >>>>>>> (OPC UA) Software-Defined Networking (SDN) Virtual Machine (VM) > >>>>>>> --> > >>>>>>> Looks good. > >>>>>>> 23) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of > >>>>>>> the online Style Guide <https://w/ > >>>>>>> ww.rfc- > >> editor.org%2Fstyleguide%2Fpart2%2F%23inclusive_language&data= > >>>>>>> > >> 05%7C02%7Cari.keranen%40ericsson.com%7Ce84ce8fc30894c03e9f908dc49d > >> 78 > >>>>>>> > >> 462%7C92e84cebfbfd47abbe52080c6b87953f%7C0%7C0%7C6384664375845 > >> 14144% > >>>>>>> > >> 7CUnknown%7CTWFpbGZsb3d8eyJWIjoiMC4wLjAwMDAiLCJQIjoiV2luMzIiLCJB > >> TiI6 > >>>>>>> > >> Ik1haWwiLCJXVCI6Mn0%3D%7C0%7C%7C%7C&sdata=VnIvjPVfSj92XST0UrVrZ > >> 1%2FJ > >>>>>>> jSaC864NLBEU00gSYYI%3D&reserved=0> > >>>>>>> and let us know if any changes are needed. For example, please > >>>>>>> consider whether "native" should be updated. > >>>>>>> In addition, please consider whether "traditional" should be updated > >>>>>>> for clarity. 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