Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9486 <draft-ietf-ippm-ioam-ipv6-options-12> for your review
Shwetha <shwetha.bhandari@gmail.com> Sat, 23 September 2023 13:08 UTC
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Date: Sat, 23 Sep 2023 18:38:00 +0530
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Subject: Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9486 <draft-ietf-ippm-ioam-ipv6-options-12> for your review
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Thanks much for the review and suggestions. +1 to Frank's response to the suggestions. Looks good to me. Thanks Shwetha On Sat, 23 Sept 2023, 6:21 pm Frank Brockners (fbrockne), < fbrockne@cisco.com> wrote: > Dear RFC editor, > > Thanks a lot for your review and suggestions. Please see inline below. > > > -----Original Message----- > > From: rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org <rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org> > > Sent: Friday, 22 September 2023 07:02 > > To: shwetha.bhandari@thoughtspot.com; Frank Brockners (fbrockne) > > <fbrockne@cisco.com> > > Cc: rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org; ippm-ads@ietf.org; ippm-chairs@ietf.org; > > marcus.ihlar@ericsson.com; martin.h.duke@gmail.com; > > auth48archive@rfc-editor.org > > Subject: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9486 <draft-ietf-ippm-ioam-ipv6-options- > > 12> for your review > > > > Authors, > > > > While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as > > necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. > > > > 1) <!--[rfced] Would you like to rephrase the RFC's title as follows in > order > > for "(IOAM)" to be included, similar to the title of RFC 9197? > > > > Original: > > In-situ OAM IPv6 Options > > > > Current: > > In Situ Operations, Administration, and Maintenance (OAM) IPv6 Options > > > > Perhaps: > > IPv6 Options for In Situ Operations, Administration, and Maintenance > > (IOAM) > > --> > > ...FB: Agreed. Consistency with RFC 9197 is a good thing. > > > > > > > 2) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in > the > > title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. > > --> > > ...FB: Given that this document is about the encapsulation of IOAM into > IPv6 options, IMHO the keywords in the title are sufficient. > > > > > > > 3) <!-- [rfced] Section 1: To closely match the text in RFC 9197, should > this > > text be updated to add "that IOAM is enabled for"? > > > > Original: > > The terms "encapsulation" and "decapsulation" are used in this > > document in the same way as in [RFC9197]: An IOAM encapsulating node > > incorporates one or more IOAM-Option-Types into packets. > > > > Perhaps: > > The terms "encapsulation" and "decapsulation" are used in this > > document in the same way as in [RFC9197]: An IOAM encapsulating node > > incorporates one or more IOAM-Option-Types into packets > > that IOAM is enabled for. > > --> > > ...FB: Agreed. > > > > > > > > 4) <!-- [rfced] Section 3: FYI, in order to make it clear that the list > goes with > > "Option Data", we have updated the text for as follows and changed the > > indentation of the list. Please review and let us know if you prefer > otherwise. > > > > Original: > > Option Data: Variable-length field. Option-Type-specific data. > > > > IOAM Option data is inserted as follows: > > > > 1. Pre-allocated Trace Option: ... > > [...] > > > > 2. Proof of Transit Option: ... > > [...] > > > > > > Current: > > Option Data: Variable-length field. The data is specific to the > > Option Type, as detailed below. > > > > Pre-allocated Trace Option: ... > > > > Option Type: ... > > > > IOAM Type: ... > > > > Proof of Transit Option: ... > > > > Option Type: ... > > > > IOAM Type: ... > > --> > > ...FB: Agreed. The enumeration also didn't make a lot of sense, i.e., the > simple list like you have it now, is better. > > > > > > 5) <!--[rfced] Section 3: The term "4n alignment" has not been used in in > > other RFCs. Would you like to update it as follows or otherwise? > > (The surrounding text is included for context; it uses the phrase "a > multiple- > > of-4 offset".) > > > > Original: > > All the IOAM IPv6 options defined here have alignment requirements. > > Specifically, they all require 4n alignment. This ensures that > > fields specified in [RFC9197] are aligned at a multiple-of-4 offset > > from the start of the hop-by-hop and destination options header. > > > > Perhaps: > > All the IOAM IPv6 options defined here have alignment requirements. > > Specifically, they all require alignment on multiples of 4 bytes. > > This ensures that fields specified in [RFC9197] are aligned at > > a multiple-of-4 offset from the start of the hop-by-hop and > > destination options header. > > --> > > ...FB: Agreed. > > > > > > > 6) <!--[rfced] Section 6: To confirm, is it intentional that the > descriptions of > > the two option types exactly match? > > Both are "IOAM Destination Option and IOAM Hop-by-Hop Option", as > > shown in the registry (https://www.iana.org/assignments/ipv6- > > parameters/). > > --> > > ...FB: This is probably the best we can do. TBD_1_0 (0x11) and TBD_1_1 > (0x31) apply to both hop-by-hop as well as destination options. An > alternative would be to explicitly spell out which IOAM option types apply > to which value - which would make the registry entries very long and also > would require updating them, as soon as any newly defined IOAM option type > would use a code point. > > > > > > > > 7) <!-- [rfced] Contributors section > > > > FYI, per Section 4.1.1 of RFC 7322 ("RFC Style Guide"), we updated the > > document to have one section titled "Contributors". We have removed the > > sentence about "and the end of this document" and used the contact > > information from the "Contributors' Addresses". > > > > Current: > > Contributors > > > > This document was the collective effort of several authors. The text > > and content were contributed by the editors and the coauthors listed > > below. > > > > Carlos Pignataro > > [...] > > --> > > > > ...FB: ACK. Makes sense. > > > > > 8) <!-- [rfced] Please review these terms and let us know if it's > acceptable to > > update to the form on the right to match past RFCs, particularly RFC > 9197. > > > > Edge to Edge Option -> Edge-to-Edge Option > > IOAM data fields -> IOAM Data-Fields > > IOAM E2E option -> IOAM E2E Option > > IOAM Option Type -> OAM Option-Type > > IOAM domain -> IOAM-Domain > > IOAM-Opt-Type -> IOAM Opt-Type > > IOAM-Option-Types -> IOAM Option-Types > > Option Type vs. Option-Type -> Option-Type > > Proof of Transit Option -> Proof of Transit Option-Type > > --> > > ...FB: Perfect. Thanks for driving towards consistency. > > > > > > > > 9) <!-- [rfced] FYI - We have added expansions for abbreviations upon > first > > use per Section 3.6 of RFC 7322 ("RFC Style Guide"). Please review each > > expansion in the document carefully to ensure correctness. > > --> > > ...FB: Thanks. All your expansions look good to me. > > > > > > > 10) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the > online > > Style Guide <https://www.rfc- > > editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language> > > and let us know if any changes are needed. > > > > Note that our script did not flag any words in particular, but this > should still > > be reviewed as a best practice. > > --> > > ..FB: Thanks. I did not catch any issues either. > > Thanks a lot for all the updates and suggested edits. With those, the doc > looks ready to me. > > Thanks, Frank > > > > > > Thank you. > > > > RFC Editor/st/ar > > > > > > On Sep 21, 2023, rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org wrote: > > > > *****IMPORTANT***** > > > > Updated 2023/09/21 > > > > RFC Author(s): > > -------------- > > > > Instructions for Completing AUTH48 > > > > Your document has now entered AUTH48. 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