Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9448 <draft-ietf-acme-authority-token-tnauthlist-13> for your review
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Authors, While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. 1) <!--[rfced] We note the profile name is expanded in Section 5. Would you like to expand it in the title and abstract as well, or leave it as simply "TNAuthList"? Original (Title): TNAuthList profile of ACME Authority Token Perhaps: Telephone Number Authorization List (TNAuthList) Profile of Automated Certificate Management Environment (ACME) Authority Token Original (Abstract): ...using the TNAuthList defined by STI certificates. Perhaps: ... using the Telephone Number Authorization List (TNAuthList) defined by STI certificates. --> 2) <!--[rfced] Please clarify this sentence, in particular from "as per" onward. It doesn't parse. Is citing "[RFC8555]" as an adjective necessary? Original: The format of the string that represents the TNAuthList MUST be constructed using base64url encoding, as per [RFC8555] base64url encoding described in Section 5 of [RFC4648] according to the profile specified in JSON Web Signature in Section 2 of [RFC7515]. Perhaps: The string that represents the TNAuthList MUST be constructed using base64url encoding, as described in Section 5 of [RFC4648] and as defined in Section 2 of JSON Web Signature [RFC7515]. --> 3) <!--[rfced] Should it be "Telephone Number Authority List" or "Telephone Number Authorization List"? Both forms are used within this document. Original (Section 3): the TN Authorization List vs. Original (Section 5): The Telephone Number Authority List Authority Token (TNAuthList Authority Token) is a profile instance of ... --> 4) <!--[rfced] Are these terms equivalent? If so, should Section 5.4 be updated to use the shorter form? Original (Section 3): the TNAuthList ASN.1 object vs. Original (Section 5.4): the TN Authorization List certificate extension ASN.1 object --> 5) <!--[rfced] It does not appear that "Protected header" is defined in RFC 9447. Please review and let us know if/how this citation should be updated. Additionally, may we make "Protected" lowercase? Original: The TNAuthList Authority Token Protected header MUST comply with the Authority Token Protected header as defined in [I-D.ietf-acme-authority-token]. --> 6) <!--[rfced] We note that RFC 7231 does not contain a Section 14.8. Also, RFC 7231 has been obsoleted by RFC 9110; may we replace this reference to RFC 7231 with one to RFC 9110? If so, please provide the accurate section number. Original: For example, an HTTP authorization header containing a valid authorization credentials as defined in [RFC7231] Section 14.8. --> 7) <!--[rfced] In Section 6, are the steps listed meant to occur in a specific order? Should the list be converted to a numbered list? --> 8) <!--[rfced] Should "JWS signature" be updated to simply "JWS" to avoid redundancy (if expanded, "JWS signature" would read "JSON Web Signature signature"). Please review and let us know if any updates are needed. Original: JSON Web Signature (JWS, [RFC7515]) objects can include an "x5u" header parameter to refer to a certificate that is used to validate the JWS signature. Perhaps: JSON Web Signature (JWS) [RFC7515] objects can include an "x5u" header parameter to refer to a certificate that is used to validate the JWS. --> 9) <!-- [rfced] In the reference below, the URL provided returns a "document not found" error. We have updated the URL as follows, and the other information accordingly. Please review and let us know any updates. Original: [ATIS-1000080] ATIS/SIP Forum NNI Task Group, "Signature-based Handling of Asserted information using toKENs (SHAKEN) Governance Model and Certificate Management <https://access.atis.org/apps/group_public/ download.php/32237/ATIS-1000080.pdf>", July 2017. Current: [ATIS-1000080] ATIS, "Signature-based Handling of Asserted information using toKENs (SHAKEN): Governance Model and Certificate Management", ATIS-1000080.v005, December 2022, <https://access.atis.org/apps/group_public/ download.php/69428/ATIS-1000080.v005.pdf>. --> 10) <!--[rfced] Terminology a) We see that "CA" was expanded as both "certificate authority" (1 instance) and "certification authority". FYI, we have updated this term to the latter. (This matches the guidance received from experts in the past and matches usage in RFC 9447.) Please let us know if you object. Original: This section defines an optional mechanism for the Certificate Authority (CA) to host the certificate directly and provide a URL that the ACME client owner can directly reference in the "x5u" of their signed PASSporTs. Current: This section defines an optional mechanism for the certification authority (CA) to host the certificate directly and provide a URL that the ACME client owner can directly reference in the "x5u" of their signed PASSporTs. b) Throughout the text, "TNBlock" and "TN Block" appear to be used inconsistently. Please review these occurrences and let us know if/how they may be made consistent. c) FYI, we have added expansions for the following abbreviations per Section 3.6 of RFC 7322 ("RFC Style Guide"). Please review each expansion in the document carefully to ensure correctness. Certificate Signing Request (CSR) Personal Assertion Token (PASSporT) Signature-based Handling of Asserted information using ToKENs (SHAKEN) Secure Telephone Identity Revisited (STIR) Voice over IP (VoIP) --> 11) <!--[rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the online Style Guide <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language> and let us know if any changes are needed. Note that our script did not flag any words in particular, but this should still be reviewed as a best practice. --> Thank you. RFC Editor/ar/ap On Jul 24, 2023, rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org wrote: *****IMPORTANT***** Updated 2023/07/24 RFC Author(s): -------------- Instructions for Completing AUTH48 Your document has now entered AUTH48. Once it has been reviewed and approved by you and all coauthors, it will be published as an RFC. If an author is no longer available, there are several remedies available as listed in the FAQ (https://www.rfc-editor.org/faq/). 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Thank you for your cooperation, RFC Editor -------------------------------------- RFC9448 (draft-ietf-acme-authority-token-tnauthlist-13) Title : TNAuthList profile of ACME Authority Token Author(s) : C. Wendt, D. Hancock, M. Barnes, J. Peterson WG Chair(s) : Deb Cooley, Deb Cooley, Yoav Nir Area Director(s) : Roman Danyliw, Paul Wouters
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