[babel] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-babel-yang-model-09

Stewart Bryant via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Tue, 04 May 2021 17:39 UTC

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Reviewer: Stewart Bryant
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-babel-yang-model-09
Reviewer: Stewart Bryant
Review Date: 2021-05-04
IETF LC End Date: 2021-04-22
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: A well written text that is ready for publication. Just one note and a
couple of minor nits.

Major issues: None

Minor issues:

5.  Acknowledgements
 Juliusz Chroboczek provided most of the example configurations for babel that
 are shown in the Appendix.

The Appendix seems seems quite substantive, I am surprised that Juliusz was not
listed as an author.

Nits/editorial comments:
2.1.  Information Model

" attributes are marked a read-only objects in the information module"
SB> s/marked a/marked as/

2.3.  YANG Module
"On other hand, for a"

SB> s/On other hand/On the other hand/