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Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ecrit-held-routing-04

Jari Arkko <jari.arkko@piuha.net> Thu, 04 February 2016 07:13 UTC

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Thanks a lot for your review, Jouni!

I think the issues you mention are worth thinking about. Authors?

I have placed a no-objection position on the telechat tonight, but I’d prefer the authors respond to these comments in some way, and deal with the ones that you feel are necessary to be dealt with.

Jari

On 04 Feb 2016, at 00:31, Jouni Korhonen <jouni.nospam@gmail.com> wrote:

> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. For more information, please see the FAQ at <​ http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
> 
> 
> - Jouni
> 
> Summary:
> 	This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits
> 	that should be fixed before publication. The nits are only
> 	editorial.
> 
> Comments:
> 
> I do have little expertise on ECRIT topics in general so bear with me.
> 
> * The I-D gives IDnits errors and stuff and those must be corrected.
> Specifically those that concern the abstract, updating RFCs and such.
> 
> * Starting from Section 1 (Intro) most of the acronyms are not expanded
> on the first use.. or at all in the document. Revisit all acronyms
> including HELD, LoST etc and expand them on the first use.
> 
> * The sentence on line 185 (IDnits) took me a while to parse ;) Maybe
> some rewording would make it a bit more readable.
> 
> * There is no reference to "forest guide". I would expect to see one
> and at least a note that it is a special instance of a LoST server.
> 
> * In Section 4 URN is written multiple times as "urn".
> 
> * On line 290 s/PSAPS/PSAPs
> 
> * On lines 304 and 310 s/section/Section
> 
> * On line 462 s/Layer 7/layer-7
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