Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ecrit-held-routing-04

[James Winterbottom <[e-mail]>]

Thank you for your comments Jouni,

I am going through them now and will post any queries or clarifications shortly.

Cheers
James



> On 4 Feb 2016, at 10:31 am, Jouni Korhonen <[e-mail]> wrote:
> 
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> 
> 
> - Jouni
> 
> Summary:
> 	This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits
> 	that should be fixed before publication. The nits are only
> 	editorial.
> 
> Comments:
> 
> I do have little expertise on ECRIT topics in general so bear with me.
> 
> * The I-D gives IDnits errors and stuff and those must be corrected.
>  Specifically those that concern the abstract, updating RFCs and such.
> 
> * Starting from Section 1 (Intro) most of the acronyms are not expanded
>  on the first use.. or at all in the document. Revisit all acronyms
>  including HELD, LoST etc and expand them on the first use.
> 
> * The sentence on line 185 (IDnits) took me a while to parse ;) Maybe
>  some rewording would make it a bit more readable.
> 
> * There is no reference to "forest guide". I would expect to see one
>  and at least a note that it is a special instance of a LoST server.
> 
> * In Section 4 URN is written multiple times as "urn".
> 
> * On line 290 s/PSAPS/PSAPs
> 
> * On lines 304 and 310 s/section/Section
> 
> * On line 462 s/Layer 7/layer-7
>