[Gen-art] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-6man-ndpioiana-02

Dan Romascanu <dromasca@gmail.com> Mon, 26 February 2018 17:01 UTC

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Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
Review result: Almost Ready

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Document: draft-ietf-6man-ndpioiana-02
Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
Review Date: 2018-02-26
IETF LC End Date: 2018-03-06
IESG Telechat date: 2018-04-05

Summary:

This is a simple and straightforward document, fixing an omission in RFC 6275,
which updated RFC 4861 without explicitly marking it as such,  and failed to
create a registry to avoid conflicts. The content of the document looks fine,
but there are several minor issues that I would recommend to be considered and
discussed before approval and publication.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

1. As this document fixes a problem created by RFC 6275 which was was not
marked as updating RFC 4861, and did not create a registry to avoid conflicts,
it looks like this RFC (if approved) should also update RFC 6275.

2. Section 3 includes a reference to [IANA-TBD] which is not defined in the
document.

3. As the new registry contains one bit defined by RFC 6275, it seems that
[RFC6275] should also be a Normative Reference.

4. Section 4 - It would be good to capitalize Standards Action, and refer to
RFC 8126 as reference (also to be added)

Nits/editorial comments:

1. The Abstract and the Introduction contain a sentence with broken syntax:

'The purpose of this document is to request that IANA to create a new registry
...'

2. Several acronyms in the document are not explicitly expanded: ND, PIO, NDP