[Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-opsawg-lsn-deployment-04
Martin Thomson <martin.thomson@gmail.com> Mon, 06 January 2014 18:44 UTC
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-opsawg-lsn-deployment-04 Reviewer: Martin Thomson Review Date: 2014-01-06 IETF LC End Date: 2014-01-06 IESG Telechat date: (if known) Summary: This document describes a generic way that MPLS LSPs can be deployed to support the deployment of CGNs in a way that addresses a range of common requirements. As a draft, it's still a little rough, but it is mostly ready for publication as an Informational RFC. Major issues: none Minor issues: The abstract says this: This document does not intend to defend the merits of CGN. Which seems wise given their somewhat contentious nature. But then the entirely of Section 2 does exactly the opposite. I don't know what the right answer is here, but maybe the right thing to do is delete Section 2. Figures 1 and 2 should probably use different labels for the two CPE boxes. The top one is being translated, the bottom one isn't. Section 6 is a little too speculative to be valuable. How about using the boilerplate: This document has no IANA actions. I'm not sure what "security measures" might be employed here: If a provider plans to operate the pre-translation realm (CPE towards translator IPv4 zone) as a non-public like network, then additional security measures may be needed to secure this environment. What might be secured in these scenarios? Confidentiality? Access to network resources? Perhaps this should talk about what a network operator wants to secure: access to the network. Then maybe talk about access control and isolation. In Section 4, this seems a little vague: Various redundancy models can be used within this architecture to support failover from one physical CGN hardware instance to another. I don't expect an enumeration of the options, but this seems important enough to at least point to where the redundancy options might exist? Redundant "VPNs"/LSPs? Redundant paths from the VRF termination? Nits: Missing period in Section 9 I found the structure of the first part of Section 3.1 difficult: Centralized deployments of CGN (longer proximity to end user and/or higher densities of subscribers/connections to CGN instances) differ from distributed deployments of CGN (closer proximity to end user and /or lower densities of subscribers/connections to CGN instances). Maybe this could be expanded a little to improve comprehension. This statement seems redundant: Other requirements may be assessed on a operator-by-operator basis, but those listed above may be considered for any given deployment architecture. As far as it goes, some of the requirements listed might not apply to a particular deployment, or part thereof.
- [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-opsawg-lsn… Martin Thomson
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-opsawg… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-opsawg… Victor Kuarsingh
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-opsawg… Victor Kuarsingh
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-opsawg… Martin Thomson
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-opsawg… Jari Arkko
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-opsawg… Victor Kuarsingh
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-opsawg… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-opsawg… Martin Thomson
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-opsawg… Benoit Claise
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-opsawg… Victor Kuarsingh
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-opsawg… Victor Kuarsingh
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-opsawg… Victor Kuarsingh
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-opsawg… Martin Thomson
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-opsawg… Jari Arkko