[Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-03

Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Tue, 05 July 2016 15:46 UTC

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.

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Document:  draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-03
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2016-07-05
IETF LC End Date:  2016-07-08
IESG Telechat date: NA


Summary:
This draft is ready to be published as BCP RFC but I have some comments.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:
-[Page 2], "arguable be better"---->"arguably be better"
-[Page 2], "types know"---->"types known"
-[Page 8], Section 7.1 and 7.2 have the same title, is that by choice?
-[Page 9], Section 10.1, first reference ([I-D.ietf-ice-rfc5245bis])to be updated to latest version.
-Also on [Page 4] Reference to "section 4.1.2.1" of [I-D.ietf-ice-rfc5245bis], it would be good to list the section title too (in case the numbering changes in the final version).

Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
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