Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-eman-requirements-10.txt

[Juergen Quittek <[e-mail]>]

Hi Francis,

Thanks a lot for the review.  Please see replies inline.

On 28.01.13 16:41, "Francis Dupont" <[e-mail]> wrote:

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>I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
>Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
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><http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
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>Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
>you may receive.
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>Document: draft-ietf-eman-requirements-10.txt
>Reviewer: Francis Dupont
>Review Date: 20130125
>IETF LC End Date: 20120125
>IESG Telechat date: unknown
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>Summary: Ready
>
>Major issues: None
>
>Minor issues: None
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>Nits/editorial comments:
> - ToC page 2: very inconsistent use of caps: I propose to put the first
>letter
>  of all words in upper cases. And of course apply this to titles (in the
>very
>  unlikely case the ToC is not auto generated)

Fixed as proposed.

> - ToC page 3 and 11 page 23: Acknowledgements -? Acknowledgments

Well, both is possible.  I changed it as suggested.

> - 1 page 4: IT -> Information Technology

Changed. 

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> - 1 page 4 and others: why Power State and not power state? I believe it
>  comes from a document where you imported the term from?

The capitalized term is defined in the terminology section.  Is this OK?

> - 12 pages 23 and 24: Telcommunication -> Telecommunication (twice)

Fixed, even three times.

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> - Authors' Addresses: please use the full names of countries (surface
>mail
>  was not yet converted to ISO IS 3166 as far as I know :), so:
>   DE -> Germany
>   IN -> India (or Republic of India?)
>   BE -> Belgium

Done.  Mouli, I used India.  Is this correct or do we have to use
"Republic of India"?

Thanks,
    Juergen

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