Re: [OPSAWG] I-D Action: draft-ietf-opsawg-l2nm-09.txt

Useful comments, thanks Tom.

Authors, please run idnits and fix issues. Also address Tom's comments.

I'll be doing my shepherd review this week. Hopefully you can post a new
revision when the gates open next Monday.

Cheers,
Adrian

-----Original Message-----
From: tom petch <ietfc@btconnect.com> 
Sent: 01 November 2021 12:48
To: mohamed.boucadair@orange.com; opsawg@ietf.org
Cc: adrian@olddog.co.uk
Subject: Re: I-D Action: draft-ietf-opsawg-l2nm-09.txt

From: OPSAWG <opsawg-bounces@ietf.org> on behalf of
mohamed.boucadair@orange.com <mohamed.boucadair@orange.com>
Sent: 20 October 2021 09:49
Hi all,

After discussing with Adrian, we are publishing this version that addresses
a recent comment from Julian. For more context, please refer to
https://github.com/IETF-OPSAWG-WG/lxnm/issues/350.

<tp>
Some stray thoughts

some lines are 90 characters long

802.1ah is referenced but not in I-D References
802.3ah ditto
802.1ag Amendment 5 looks like a separate document warranting a separate
reference
802.1p is referenced implicitly
802.1Q likewise

What is the difference between
identity bgp-l2encaps-type
  Base BGP L2 encapsulation type
     and
identity iana-pw-types
 Base BGP L2 encapsulation type

ccm-priority-type
what is high what low?

Local Maintenance End Point (MEP)
This is not the expansion used by the ITU-T

leaf split-horizon-filtering
what does true mean?

leaf ccm-interval
no units

leaf ccm-holdtime 
no units

leaf duplicate-ip-detection-interval
no units

leaf duplicate-ip-detection-interval
no units

Tom Petch

Cheers,
Med

> -----Message d'origine-----
> De : I-D-Announce <i-d-announce-bounces@ietf.org> De la part de internet-
> drafts@ietf.org
> Envoyé : mercredi 20 octobre 2021 10:34
> À : i-d-announce@ietf.org
> Cc : opsawg@ietf.org
> Objet : I-D Action: draft-ietf-opsawg-l2nm-09.txt
>
>
> A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts
> directories.
> This draft is a work item of the Operations and Management Area Working
> Group WG of the IETF.
>
>         Title           : A Layer 2 VPN Network YANG Model
>         Authors         : Samier Barguil
>                           Oscar Gonzalez de Dios
>                           Mohamed Boucadair
>                           Luis Angel Munoz
>       Filename        : draft-ietf-opsawg-l2nm-09.txt
>       Pages           : 155
>       Date            : 2021-10-20
>
> Abstract:
>    This document defines an L2VPN Network YANG Model (L2NM) that can be
>    used to manage the provisioning of Layer 2 Virtual Private Network
>    (VPN) services within a network (e.g., service provider network).
>    The L2NM complements the Layer 2 Service Model (L2SM) by providing a
>    network-centric view of the service that is internal to a service
>    providers.  The L2NM is particularly meant to be used by a network
>    controller to derive the configuration information that will be sent
>    to relevant network devices.
>
>    Also, the document defines the initial versions of two IANA-
>    maintained modules that defines a set of identities of BGP Layer 2
>    encapsulation types and pseudowire types.
>
>
> The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is:
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-opsawg-l2nm/
>
> There is also an htmlized version available at:
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-opsawg-l2nm-09
>
> A diff from the previous version is available at:
> https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-opsawg-l2nm-09
>
>
> Internet-Drafts are also available by anonymous FTP at:
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