[v6ops] Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-ietf-v6ops-siit-dc-2xlat-02: (with COMMENT)

["Barry Leiba" <[e-mail]>]

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draft-ietf-v6ops-siit-dc-2xlat-02: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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A small editorial thing in the abstract:

   This document describes an extension of the Stateless IP/ICMP
   Translation for IPv6 Internet Data Centre Environments architecture
   (SIIT-DC), which allows applications, protocols, or nodes that are
   incompatible with IPv6, and/or Network Address Translation to operate
   correctly in an SIIT-DC environment.

With the comma after "IPv6", it looks like you mean this:

   which allows
   1. applications, protocols, or nodes that are
      incompatible with IPv6
   and/or
   2. Network Address Translation
   to operate correctly in an SIIT-DC environment.

...when what you mean is this:

   which allows applications, protocols, or nodes that are
   incompatible with
   1. IPv6
   and/or
   2. Network Address Translation
   to operate correctly in an SIIT-DC environment.

I suggest removing the comma.