Re: [auth48] [AD] [E] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9388 <draft-ietf-cdni-additional-footprint-types-11> for your review

[Rebecca VanRheenen <[e-mail]>]

Hi Murray* and Sanjay,

Murray, we believe that you are suggesting cutting “an” from the current sentence in the abstract (though let us know if there is anything else in that sentence that you’d like to improve). Sanjay has also suggested extending this text further. Which update is preferred? Please discuss and let us know how to update the document. 

*Murray, if Sanjay’s new text is preferred, please let us know if you approve it (we consider this update “above editorial” as it adds new text).

Current:
   This allows for an
   additive semantics over the narrowing semantics defined in Appendix B
   of RFC 8008 and therefore updates RFC 8008.  

Perhaps (remove “an”)
  This allows for
   additive semantics over the narrowing semantics defined in Appendix B
   of RFC 8008 and therefore updates RFC 8008.  

Or (Sanjay’s suggested text, with some minor edits):
   This new footprint union removes the narrowing constraint of RFC 8008, where 
   Appendix B states the following: "Multiple footprint constraints are additive: the
   advertisement of different footprint types narrows the dCDN's candidacy cumulatively.” 
   This document defines  a footprint union that allows aggregation of footprint objects and 
   thus avoids the narrowing semantics defined in RFC 8008. As a result, this change also 
   updates RFC 8008. 

Thank you,
RFC Editor/rv



> On Jul 8, 2023, at 3:20 PM, Mishra, Sanjay <[e-mail]> wrote:
> 
> Hi Murray - Thank you for your comments. We think, replacing the original wording with the following might meet your suggestion and hopefully also add more context.
> 
> your comment:
> "The sentence that begins "This allows for an ..." in the modified abstract
> appears to contain a grammatical error, but apart from fixing that the new
> Abstract is approved."
> 
> Rebecca - Please see the suggested change:
> 
> OLD:
> This allows for an additive semantics over the narrowing semantics defined in Appendix B of RFC 8008 and therefore updates RFC 8008.
> 
> NEW:
> This new footprint union removes the narrowing constraint of RFC 8008, where the appendix B states that "Multiple footprint constraints are additive: the
> advertisement of different footprint types narrows the dCDN's candidacy cumulatively". This document defines 
> a footprint union that allows to aggregate footprint objects and thus avoid the narrowing semantics defined in RFC 8008. 
> As a result this change also updates RFC 8008. 
> 
> Thanks
> Sanjay
> 
> On Fri, Jul 7, 2023 at 8:00 PM Murray S. Kucherawy <[e-mail]> wrote:
> The sentence that begins "This allows for an ..." in the modified abstract
> appears to contain a grammatical error, but apart from fixing that the new
> Abstract is approved.
> 
> -MSK, ART AD
> 
> On Wed, Jul 5, 2023 at 11:50 AM Rebecca VanRheenen <[e-mail]>
> wrote:
> 
> > Hi Sanjay, Nir, and Murray*,
> >
> > Sanjay and Nir, thank you for providing the additional edits. We have
> > applied them all and posted updated files (see below). We did not make any
> > changes regarding <aside> and consider that question closed per your
> > response. Please review the updated files and let us know if you approve
> > the document in its current form.
> >
> > *Murray, as AD, please review the latest changes in the abstract and let
> > us know if you approve. You can view the changes in this diff file:
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388-2Dauth48diff.html&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=PlF4M8_QdgOcmznwdCMsxFh7aXWwvePuXEAGbxAQEynm34FjneeU8Olmzk4fY_sb&s=izrh5yCq36M_Mp9jyvN4prxiCrB_4Lv9qXtGjZj0WIc&e= 
> >
> > Updated XML file:
> >   https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388.xml&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=PlF4M8_QdgOcmznwdCMsxFh7aXWwvePuXEAGbxAQEynm34FjneeU8Olmzk4fY_sb&s=n8nqgkjRAO1xAzK1pN1RzXcjPRCRV1JzMHtiRPin8Go&e= 
> >
> > Updated output files:
> >   https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388.txt&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=PlF4M8_QdgOcmznwdCMsxFh7aXWwvePuXEAGbxAQEynm34FjneeU8Olmzk4fY_sb&s=0LWp4bviDj8SxKpwjsBA2bKPXEQ2e5YZ2suJM8RqSrg&e= 
> >   https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388.pdf&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=PlF4M8_QdgOcmznwdCMsxFh7aXWwvePuXEAGbxAQEynm34FjneeU8Olmzk4fY_sb&s=MeDbPGbIAixAixZdDSL4J-8d1-17t6VLWuKfznY61mw&e= 
> >   https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388.html&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=PlF4M8_QdgOcmznwdCMsxFh7aXWwvePuXEAGbxAQEynm34FjneeU8Olmzk4fY_sb&s=vuuh2LywyyPPjyFDjACeK7T0he_gTVSXYNAFAjcMdMA&e= 
> >
> > Diff file showing all changes made during AUTH48:
> >   https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388-2Dauth48diff.html&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=PlF4M8_QdgOcmznwdCMsxFh7aXWwvePuXEAGbxAQEynm34FjneeU8Olmzk4fY_sb&s=izrh5yCq36M_Mp9jyvN4prxiCrB_4Lv9qXtGjZj0WIc&e= 
> >
> > Diff files showing all changes:
> >   https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388-2Ddiff.html&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=PlF4M8_QdgOcmznwdCMsxFh7aXWwvePuXEAGbxAQEynm34FjneeU8Olmzk4fY_sb&s=8FGmPRkaOnT4wp7JEcjNLulabxLt4O9P1I0-29PlMDo&e= 
> >   https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388-2Drfcdiff.html&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=PlF4M8_QdgOcmznwdCMsxFh7aXWwvePuXEAGbxAQEynm34FjneeU8Olmzk4fY_sb&s=r09pl7lX1i83651V75aSBavKut288c8KGAuXmlqVv2c&e=  (side-by-side
> > rfcdiff)
> >
> > For the AUTH48 status of this document, please see:
> >   https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=http-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_auth48_rfc9388&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=PlF4M8_QdgOcmznwdCMsxFh7aXWwvePuXEAGbxAQEynm34FjneeU8Olmzk4fY_sb&s=WM3-w3gVwp_nbVxfp5d6BMb0jLOCc2qxBw9B6pQ5Y7M&e= 
> >
> > Thank you,
> > RFC Editor/rv
> >
> >
> > > On Jul 5, 2023, at 9:10 AM, Mishra, Sanjay <[e-mail]>
> > wrote:
> > >
> > > Hi Rebecca - Thank you for the current edits. Please see our response
> > below.
> > >
> > > With regards to the "aside" container. We did not find any need for it
> > in the document.
> > >
> > > However, while scanning the document, we found a few additional edits:
> > >
> > > 1. Abstract: (adding "for delegation" after "granularity to better
> > explain the context)
> > > OLD:
> > > Defining this country subdivision code improves granularity as compared
> > to the
> > > ISO 3166-1 country code footprint type defined in RFC 8006.
> > >
> > > NEW (changes marked in bold for visual identification):
> > > Defining this country subdivision code improves granularity for
> > delegation
> > >  as compared to the
> > > ISO 3166-1 country code footprint type defined in RFC 8006.
> > >
> > >
> > > 2. Abstract: (Remove "this" and join it with the prior sentence for ease
> > of flow of the sentence. text bolded for identification)
> > > OLD:
> > > The second footprint type defines a footprint union to aggregate
> > footprint objects. This allows for an additive semantics over the narrowing
> > semantics defined in Appendix B of RFC 8008. This updates RFC 8008.
> > >
> > > New:
> > > The second footprint type defines a footprint union to aggregate
> > footprint objects. This allows for an additive semantics over the narrowing
> > semantics defined in Appendix B of RFC 8008, and therefore updates RFC 8008.
> > >
> > > 3. Section 2.2 - a very long sentence that may be broken into 2 parts.
> > Changes are shown in BOLD for identification of the new text
> > > OLD:
> > > Using footprint objects of these types, one can define FCI Capability
> > Advertisement object footprint constraints that match either IPv4 or IPv6
> > clients, but not both due to the described "narrowing" semantic of the
> > Footprint Objects array, as described in Appendix B of that prevents the
> > usage of these objects together to create a footprint constraint that
> > matches IPv4 clients with IPv6 clients.
> > >
> > > New:
> > > Using footprint objects of these types, one can define FCI Capability
> > Advertisement object footprint constraints that match either IPv4 or IPv6
> > clients, but not both. This is due to the described "narrowing" semantic of
> > the Footprint Objects array, as described in Appendix B of RFC 8008 that
> > prevents the usage of these objects together to create a footprint
> > constraint that matches IPv4 clients with IPv6 clients.
> > >
> > > 4. Section 1 Introduction (first bullet). Adding "Country" before
> > subdivision code. Text is bolded for identification.
> > > OLD:
> > > Subdivision code footprint type (e.g., for a dCDN advertising a
> > footprint that is specific to a state in the United States of America)
> > >
> > > NEW:
> > > Country subdivision code footprint type (e.g., for a dCDN advertising a
> > footprint that is specific to a state in the United States of America)
> > >
> > > 5. Section 2.2 - a typo (missing "i" and a space. also adding "country"
> > ahead of subdivision code)
> > > OLD:
> > > for example, an IPv4 CIDR together with an IPv6 CIDR or a country code
> > together with a subdivisoncode
> > >
> > > NEW:
> > > for example, an IPv4 CIDR together with an IPv6 CIDR or a country code
> > together with a country subdivision code
> > >
> > > 6. Section 2.2.2 - We don't think "the" is needed in this sentence (as
> > below) and also adding "country" in front of "subdivision code".
> > > OLD:
> > > The footprint union also enables the
> > >  composing of footprint objects
> > > based on the
> > > country code and  subdivision code.
> > >   In Figure 4, we
> > > create a constraint covering autonomous system 64496 within the USA
> > >
> > > NEW:
> > > The footprint union also enables
> > > composing of footprint objects
> > > based on the country code and
> > > country subdivision code.
> > >   In Figure 4, we
> > > create a constraint covering autonomous system 64496 within the USA
> > >
> > > 7. Section 3.1.3 (adding "country" in front of the subdivision codes.)
> > > OLD:
> > > There is no hierarchy or inheritance for properties associated with
> > subdivision codes.
> > > New:
> > > There is no hierarchy or inheritance for properties associated with
> > country subdivision codes.
> > > Thank you very much.
> > > Nir and Sanjay
> > >
> > > On Mon, Jul 3, 2023 at 1:21 PM Rebecca VanRheenen <[e-mail]>
> > wrote:
> > > Hi Nir,
> > >
> > > Thank you for addressing theses questions. We have updated the document
> > accordingly and added the keywords you provided to our database.
> > >
> > > Regarding this:
> > >
> > > >>>> > 11) <!-- [rfced] Please review whether any of the notes in this
> > document
> > > >>>> > should be in the <aside> element. It is defined as "a container
> > for
> > > >>>> > content that is semantically less important or tangential to the
> > > >>>> > content that surrounds it" (
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__authors.ietf.org_en_rfcxml-2Dvocabulary-23aside&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=aNcD_pgXb5qjTllxyCe5MJQgRTzMv518ReluUd8bmm0&e=
> > ).
> > > >>>> > -->
> > > >>>> > [NS] I do not fully understand the point here.
> > > >>>> > Will try to read more about it, but if you can give more
> > details/an example it would greatly assist me.
> > > >>>
> > > >>> [rfced]  You may find more info at
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__authors.ietf.org_rfcxml-2Dvocabulary-23aside&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=1M4B3QCqA-VdOlGvuDQx_ARDiekvCjXUnsFEl3YM6OM&e=
> > .
> > > >> [NS] I'm not familiar with this concept but do not think we have a
> > need for such a change.
> > > > Can you please share an example for a document where it had been in
> > use?
> > >
> > > You can view examples in RFCs 9396 and 9393. Search for “Note:” in the
> > output files to see how these are formatted.
> > >
> > > This is our final question. After it is addressed, we will ask Murray to
> > approve the latest changes in the abstract and then request that IANA
> > update the registry to match the edited document.
> > >
> > > Updated XML file:
> > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388.xml&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=rnI8C1TMJM7slUpITW4U5Vdm5ztUEavWyIDN1E3AAfM&e=
> > >
> > > Updated output files:
> > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388.txt&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=IieWbMjKlQyOjbotwBn4pWyKdVhg6OHEvOZ_92Fxpac&e=
> > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388.pdf&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=OsOtC3a1iG3EgG5MI90EvAiIm5JQfFFZTLCCfOi2FjU&e=
> > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388.html&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=5RUZa-waUbT9MLHL6Uk72KiqqboJpZRPGtNhb1I_XhM&e=
> > >
> > > Diff file showing all changes made during AUTH48:
> > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388-2Dauth48diff.html&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=UKF29gl7ddwUQLv3EBUGmwRVHlWi-Pb4MFMgVeu08GA&e=
> > >
> > > Diff files showing all changes:
> > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388-2Ddiff.html&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=hyrRs85zhPo4vN4YB01d1PryXreU2Y-TFs1wADaivqE&e=
> >
> > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388-2Drfcdiff.html&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=SQiCq6D5pEFep56sVnJKK7eYV2HQh5AOE40pMme0PDg&e=
> > (side-by-side rfcdiff)
> > >
> > > For the AUTH48 status of this document, please see:
> > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=http-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_auth48_rfc9388&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=YlgKeXnxnaQB9jBO1Qvz99OclaLDY4kdfWGy0i_IFEw&e=
> > >
> > > Thank you,
> > > RFC Editor/rv
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > > > On Jun 29, 2023, at 6:28 AM, Nir Sopher <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > > >
> > > > Thank you Rebecca,
> > > > See comments below.
> > > > Many thanks,
> > > > Nir
> > > >
> > > > ------
> > > > WRT the abstract. Indeed a "a" or "this is missing. Let's go for
> > adding a "this", we were also missing the "country" token
> > > > OLD: Defining subdivision code
> > > > NEW: Defining this country subdivision code
> > > >
> > > > -------
> > > > Now, for the additional comments:
> > > > [rfced] If there are any keywords you think readers might want to
> > search when they look for documents on this topic, and the words are not
> > already in the title, we can add them to our database.
> > > > [NS/SM] We would add:
> > > > - Request Routing
> > > > - Footprint and Capabilities Semantics
> > > >
> > > > -------
> > > > [rfced] Please review our updates to ensure that this reference now
> > appears as desired.
> > > > [NS/SM] Reviewed. Great :)
> > > > -------
> > > > > 8) ...[rfced] We made these updates based on
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__author-2Dtools.ietf.org_iddiff-3Furl1-3Ddraft-2Dietf-2Dcdni-2Dadditional-2Dfootprint-2Dtypes-2D11-26url2-3Ddraft-2Dietf-2Dcdni-2Dadditional-2Dfootprint-2Dtypes-2D12-26difftype-3D-2D-2Dhwdiff&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=Z1AcNQijBUwEzbxLmx0zS3S9_ix4Q4-tcdsIllVGvSc&e=
> > > > [rfced] We have updated the examples below as suggested.  Please let
> > us know if any further occurrences of “match” need changes.
> > > > [NS/SM] Approved
> > > >
> > > > -------
> > > > > 11) <!-- [rfced] Please review whether any of the notes in this
> > document
> > > > > should be in the <aside> element. It is defined as "a container for
> > > > > content that is semantically less important or tangential to the
> > > > > content that surrounds it" (
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__authors.ietf.org_en_rfcxml-2Dvocabulary-23aside&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=aNcD_pgXb5qjTllxyCe5MJQgRTzMv518ReluUd8bmm0&e=
> > ).
> > > > > -->
> > > > > [NS] I do not fully understand the point here.
> > > > > Will try to read more about it, but if you can give more details/an
> > example it would greatly assist me.
> > > >
> > > > -------
> > > > [rfced]  You may find more info at
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__authors.ietf.org_rfcxml-2Dvocabulary-23aside&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=1M4B3QCqA-VdOlGvuDQx_ARDiekvCjXUnsFEl3YM6OM&e=
> > .
> > > > [NS] I'm not familiar with this concept but do not think we have a
> > need for such a change.
> > > > Can you please share an example for a document where it had been in
> > use?
> > > >
> > > > -------
> > > > > 12) ...
> > > > [rfced] Sounds like this issue has been reviewed.
> > > > [NS/SM] Correct
> > > >
> > > > On Wed, Jun 28, 2023 at 9:56 PM Rebecca VanRheenen <
> > [e-mail]> wrote:
> > > > Hi Nir and Sanjay,
> > > >
> > > > Thank you for your replies! We have updated the abstract and Section
> > 2.2 as suggested by Nir. The updated files are listed below.
> > > >
> > > > We have one question about the abstract: should “Defining subdivision
> > code” be updated to "Defining a subdivision code” (with “a”), "Defining
> > this subdivision code” (with “this”), or something similar?
> > > >
> > > > Current:
> > > >   Defining subdivision code improves granularity as compared to the
> > ISO3166-1
> > > >   country code footprint type, defined in RFC 8006.
> > > >
> > > > Also, Megan sent the following followup questions/comments on 22 June
> > 2023. (I’ll be the point of contact going forward as Megan is out of the
> > office.) Once these and the question above about the abstract are
> > addressed, we will mark your approvals.
> > > >
> > > > Note that once the sentence in the abstract is finalized, we will ask
> > Murray to approve the abstract as some text was added (we consider added
> > text to be “above editorial”, thus requiring AD approval). In addition,
> > some changes were made to the description column in Section 4.1, which
> > affects the IANA registry. After we receive all approvals, we will ask IANA
> > to update the registry to match the edited document (see details in the
> > note on the AUTH48 status page at
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_auth48_rfc9388&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=VQjmYPucQGmeTZrxHx4YLSjD_AjjHaAC3RCCHQKTf_g&e=
> > ).
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > > 2) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear
> > in the title) for use on
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=H-DXaaooMlmFo5W3UAuSjRt_Fy-dd-mEaPEILis6hkE&e=
> > .
> > > > > org/search. -->
> > > > >
> > > > > [SM/NS]
> > > > > Can you please clarify?
> > > >
> > > > [rfced] If there are any keywords you think readers might want to
> > search when they look for documents on this topic, and the words are not
> > already in the title, we can add them to our database.
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > > 6) <!--[rfced] We had the following questions about text in the
> > Table in
> > > > >     Section 4.1.  Note that we will communicate any necessary changes
> > > > >     to IANA upon completion of AUTH48.
> > > > >
> > > > > a) What does "hyphen-minus" mean?  Is this trying to communicate that
> > > > > some people might call it a hyphen and some might say minus sign?  Or
> > > > > something else?
> > > > >
> > > > > [SM/NS]
> > > > > We can drop the "-minus" and leave only the "hyphen".
> > > > > Note that we took the "hyphen-minus" terminology for the actual ISO
> > defining the country subdivision values:
> > > > > See
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.iso.org_obp_ui_-23iso-3Astd-3Aiso-3A3166-3A-2D2-3Aed-2D4-3Av1-3Aen&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=gGyH0z2JR4_54vqv0BBl6b5AL58HCWllGcPr3Cs9-7E&e=
> > > > >
> > > > >
> > > > > b) Is this spacing correct?
> > > > >
> > > > > Original:
> > > > > Characters from A-Z;0-9
> > > > >
> > > > > Perhaps:
> > > > > Characters from A-Z and 0-9
> > > > >
> > > > > -->
> > > > > [SM/NS]
> > > > > For the ease of reading we agree with your suggestion.
> > > > > Yet again, this was copied from the ISO defining the values structure
> > > >
> > > > [rfced] We have left both of the above as they were.  Thank you for
> > providing background on these choices.
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > > 7) <!-- [rfced] For reference [OC-RR], the provided URL points to a
> > page
> > > > >     that shows the document being both Version 2.0 and 2.1. Which
> > > > >     version is correct?
> > > > >
> > > > > Also, the provided URL shows two more contributors: Thomas Edwards
> > and
> > > > > Yoav Gressel. Would you like these to be added to the reference as
> > > > > authors?
> > > > >
> > > > > Original:
> > > > >   [OC-RR]    Finkelman, O., Ed., Hofmann, J., Klein, E., Mishra, S.,
> > > > >              Ma, K., Sahar, D., and B. Zurat, "Open Caching - Request
> > > > >              Routing Functional Specification", Version 2.0, 15
> > January
> > > > >              2021, <
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.svta.org_product_open-2Dcache-2Drequest-2D&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=WhHa9lNnA0TysADGsuVn07x3jcJhEwjEINW6NhaL9FY&e=
> > > > >              routing-functional-specification/>.
> > > > > Perhaps:
> > > > >   [OC-RR]    Finkelman, O., Ed., Zurat, B., Sahar, D., Klein, E.,
> > > > >              Hofmann, J., Ma, K.J., Stock, M., Mishra, S., Edwards,
> > T.,
> > > > >              and Y. Yoav, "Open Caching - Request Routing Functional
> > > > >              Specification", Version 2.0, 15 January 2021,
> > > > >              <
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.svta.org_product_open-2Dcache-2Drequest-2Drouting-2D&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=Fae8JNp_La87atc_-iT7-guUyp6yGpEQYdMzUNiBcdY&e=
> > > > >              functional-specification/>.
> > > > > -->
> > > > > [SM/NS]
> > > > > We will stick to version 2.0
> > > > > We are working to get the OC-RR webpage updated to reflect version
> > 2.0.
> > > > > We would also push forward adding Thomas Edwards to the authors list
> > (Yoav is already listed in the document).
> > > > > Please note that in the proposal Yoav was added as "Y. Yoav" instead
> > of "G. Yoav" or to be consistent "Gressel, Y.”
> > > >
> > > > [rfced] Please review our updates to ensure that this reference now
> > appears as desired.
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > > 8) <!-- [rfced] Terminology: Throughout the document, we spotted the
> > > > >     following issues related to terminology.  Please review each
> > > > >     question below and let us know how to update, using old/new where
> > > > >     necessary.  Note that you are welcome to update the xml file
> > > > >     itself if that is easier than explaining the changes via email.
> > > >
> > > > [rfced] We made these updates based on
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__author-2Dtools.ietf.org_iddiff-3Furl1-3Ddraft-2Dietf-2Dcdni-2Dadditional-2Dfootprint-2Dtypes-2D11-26url2-3Ddraft-2Dietf-2Dcdni-2Dadditional-2Dfootprint-2Dtypes-2D12-26difftype-3D-2D-2Dhwdiff&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=Z1AcNQijBUwEzbxLmx0zS3S9_ix4Q4-tcdsIllVGvSc&e=
> > .
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > > 1) Please review the way that the following terms appear throughout
> > the document
> > > > > with regard to capitalization, hyphenation, quotation, spacing,
> > phrasing, etc. and let us know
> > > > > if/how we may make these terms consistent:
> > > > >
> > > > > a) object vs. Object
> > > > >
> > > > > CDNI Footprint object vs. CNDI Footprint Object
> > > > > Footprint Objects vs. Footprint objects vs. footprint objects
> > > > >
> > > > > (Note that RFC 8006 uses Footprint object)
> > > > >
> > > > > [SM/NS] we changed all instances to lower case "object"
> > > > >
> > > > > b) Footprint, Footprint Types, Footprint Values, Footprint Union
> > > > >
> > > > > footprint (as a general noun)
> > > > >
> > > > > Footprint Types vs. footprint-type vs. footprint types vs.
> > "footprint-type"
> > > > > -See also "Country Code" footprint type and "IPv4CIDR" and
> > "IPv6CIDR" footprint types.
> > > > >
> > > > > Footprint-value vs. footprint value
> > > > >
> > > > >
> > > > > Union Footprint type
> > > > > "Footprintunion" footprint type
> > > > > "Footprintunion" object
> > > > > Footprint object of type "footprint union"
> > > > >
> > > > > [SM/NS] We are comparing the draft with previous RFCs and trying to
> > come up wit a consistent scheme for different use cases
> > > > > 1) "Footprint Type": "type" should  be in lower case unless it is
> > part of the section header
> > > > > 2)  "footprint-type": the dash is OK when it is part of an anchor or
> > when it stand for the property name (in the different examples)
> > > > > 3) "Footprint Union": should be capitalized
> > > > > 4) "footprintunion" should be used in some cases - we are trying to
> > understand where
> > > > >
> > > > >
> > > > > c) Subdivision
> > > > >
> > > > > Subdivision Code Footprint Type
> > > > > a footprint object of type "subdivisioncode"
> > > > > SUBDIVISION Domain (and SUBDIVISION domain)
> > > > > country Subdivision code vs. Country Subdivision codes
> > > > > subdivisioncode vs. subdivision code
> > > > >
> > > > > [SM/NS] this case is similar to the "Footprint Union" case. We will
> > work on it and would update
> > > > >
> > > > > 2) For the following terms, would you like to match their use in past
> > > > > RFCs, specifically RFC 8006?  Please review the various styles that
> > > > > appear in the document currently and our suggested updates to
> > > > > make those forms consistent throughout the document and with RFC
> > 8006.
> > > > >
> > > > > Current:
> > > > > Country Code vs. countrycode vs. country code
> > > > >
> > > > > Perhaps:
> > > > >   countrycode
> > > > >
> > > > > Current:
> > > > >   ipv4cidr vs. IPv4CIDR
> > > > >
> > > > > Perhaps:
> > > > >   ipv4cidr
> > > > >
> > > > > Current:
> > > > >   ipv6cidr vs. IPv6CIDR
> > > > >
> > > > > Perhaps:
> > > > >   ipv6cidr
> > > > >
> > > > > -->
> > > > >
> > > > > [SM/NS] This is again the "footprint union" vs. "footprintunion"
> > issue. We will find a consistent usage
> > > > >
> > > > > 9) <!--[rfced]Please review the uses of the word "match" throughout
> > the document.
> > > > > In some places, it is not clear that the constraint does not have to
> > > > > match both patterns given.
> > > >
> > > > [rfced] We have updated the examples below as suggested.  Please let
> > us know if any further occurrences of “match” need changes.
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > > Examples with some possible updates to help the reader.
> > > > >
> > > > > Original:
> > > > > The Footprint Object in this example creates a
> > > > > constraint matching clients in the states of New Jersey and New York,
> > > > > USA (ISO [ISO3166-2] codes "US-NJ" and "US-NY", respectively).
> > > > >
> > > > > Perhaps:
> > > > > The Footprint Object in this example creates a
> > > > > constraint that matches clients in the state of either New Jersey or
> > New York,
> > > > > (ISO [ISO3166-2] codes "US-NJ" and "US-NY", respectively).
> > > > >
> > > > > [SM/NS]  Agreed
> > > > >
> > > > >
> > > > > Original:
> > > > > Using Footprint Objects of these types, one can define FCI Capability
> > > > > Advertisement Object footprint constraints that match IPv4 or IPv6
> > > > > clients.  However, the described "narrowing" semantic of the
> > Footprint
> > > > > Objects array, as described in Appendix B of [RFC8008], prevents the
> > > > > usage of these objects together to create a footprint constraint that
> > > > > matches IPv4 clients together with IPv6 clients.
> > > > >
> > > > > Perhaps (adding "either...but not both", cutting "together", and
> > > > > combining the sentences):
> > > > > Using Footprint Objects of these types, one can
> > > > > define FCI Capability Advertisement Object footprint constraints that
> > > > > match either IPv4 or IPv6 clients, but not both, due to the
> > described
> > > > > "narrowing" semantic of the Footprint Objects
> > > > > array (Appendix B of [RFC8008]) that prevents the usage of
> > > > > these objects together to create a footprint constraint that matches
> > > > > IPv4 clients with IPv6 clients.
> > > > >
> > > > > [SM/NS] Agreed
> > > > >
> > > > >
> > > > >
> > > > > Original:
> > > > > Below is an example for an attempt at creating an object matching
> > > > > IPv4 clients of subnet "192.0.2.0/24", as well as IPv6 clients of
> > > > > subnet "2001:db8::/32".
> > > > >
> > > > > Perhaps:
> > > > > Below is an example attempting to create an object that matches
> > > > > IPv4 clients of subnet "192.0.2.0/24" as well as IPv6 clients of
> > > > > subnet "2001:db8::/32".
> > > > > -->
> > > > > [SM/NS] Agreed
> > > > >
> > > > >
> > > > > 10) <!--[rfced] Please review the following with regard to ISO
> > citations.
> > > > >
> > > > > a) Is ISO 3166-2 the name of the code?  If not, perhaps the following
> > > > > change would be helpful to the reader.  Note that there may be more
> > > > > occurences, please review all as this is simply an example.
> > > > >
> > > > > Original:
> > > > >   The "subdivisioncode" data type specified in Section 2.1.1.1
> > > > >   describes a country-specific subdivision using an [ISO3166-2] code.
> > > > >
> > > > > Perhaps:
> > > > >   The "subdivisioncode" data type specified in Section 2.1.1.1
> > > > >   describes a country-specific subdivision using a code described in
> > > > >   [ISO3166-2].
> > > > > [SM/NS]
> > > > > Maybe:
> > > > > The "subdivisioncode" data type specified in Section 2.1.1.1
> > > > >   describes a country-specific subdivision using a code as defined in
> > > > >   [ISO3166-2].
> > > >
> > > > [rfced] Thank you for this guidance. Please review other similar
> > instances throughout the doc and let us know if/how they may be updated
> > using old/new text.
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > > 11) <!-- [rfced] Please review whether any of the notes in this
> > document
> > > > > should be in the <aside> element. It is defined as "a container for
> > > > > content that is semantically less important or tangential to the
> > > > > content that surrounds it" (
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__authors.ietf.org_en_rfcxml-2Dvocabulary-23aside&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=aNcD_pgXb5qjTllxyCe5MJQgRTzMv518ReluUd8bmm0&e=
> > ).
> > > > > -->
> > > > > [NS] I do not fully understand the point here.
> > > > > Will try to read more about it, but if you can give more details/an
> > example it would greatly assist me.
> > > >
> > > > [rfced]  You may find more info at
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__authors.ietf.org_rfcxml-2Dvocabulary-23aside&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=1M4B3QCqA-VdOlGvuDQx_ARDiekvCjXUnsFEl3YM6OM&e=
> > .
> > > >
> > > > ______________
> > > >
> > > > Updated XML file:
> > > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388.xml&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=rnI8C1TMJM7slUpITW4U5Vdm5ztUEavWyIDN1E3AAfM&e=
> > > >
> > > > Updated output files:
> > > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388.txt&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=IieWbMjKlQyOjbotwBn4pWyKdVhg6OHEvOZ_92Fxpac&e=
> > > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388.pdf&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=OsOtC3a1iG3EgG5MI90EvAiIm5JQfFFZTLCCfOi2FjU&e=
> > > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388.html&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=5RUZa-waUbT9MLHL6Uk72KiqqboJpZRPGtNhb1I_XhM&e=
> > > >
> > > > Diff file showing all changes made during AUTH48:
> > > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388-2Dauth48diff.html&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=UKF29gl7ddwUQLv3EBUGmwRVHlWi-Pb4MFMgVeu08GA&e=
> > > >
> > > > Diff files showing all changes:
> > > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388-2Ddiff.html&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=hyrRs85zhPo4vN4YB01d1PryXreU2Y-TFs1wADaivqE&e=
> >
> > > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388-2Drfcdiff.html&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=SQiCq6D5pEFep56sVnJKK7eYV2HQh5AOE40pMme0PDg&e=
> > (side-by-side rfcdiff)
> > > >
> > > > For the AUTH48 status of this document, please see:
> > > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=http-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_auth48_rfc9388&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=YlgKeXnxnaQB9jBO1Qvz99OclaLDY4kdfWGy0i_IFEw&e=
> > > >
> > > > Thank you,
> > > > RFC Editor/rv
> > > >
> > > >
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > > On Jun 27, 2023, at 10:48 PM, Nir Sopher <[e-mail]>
> > wrote:
> > > > >
> > > > > Hi Megan,
> > > > >
> > > > > All the changes look great. Thank you.  That said, we do have
> > two-more changes (sorry).  The first change is the reworded Abstract. We
> > feel this will make it easier for the reader to follow the work done in
> > this document (the original wording can be hard to follow). You may find
> > grammatical nits here but otherwise the abstract is contextually the same
> > as the current version.
> > > > >
> > > > > The Second change is a slight correction in paragraph 2.2.  This we
> > think should be our final changes. Following are the changes proposed:
> > > > >
> > > > > Abstract:
> > > > > NEW:
> > > > > Open Caching architecture is a use case of Content Delivery Network
> > Interconnection (CDNI) in which the commercial Content Delivery Network
> > (CDN) is the upstream CDN (uCDN) and the ISP caching layer serves as the
> > downstream CDN (dCDN). RFC 8006 defines footprint types which are used for
> > footprint objects as part of the Metadata interface (MI). The footprint
> > types are also used for the Footprint & Capabilities Advertisement
> > interface (FCI) as defined in RFC 8008. This document defines two new
> > footprint types, the first footprint type defined is an ISO3166-2 country
> > subdivision code. Defining subdivision code improves granularity as
> > compared to the ISO3166-1 country code footprint type, defined in RFC
> > 8006.  The ISO3166-2 country subdivision code is also added as a new entity
> > domain type in the "ALTO Entity Domain Types" subregistry as defined in
> > Section 7.4 of RFC 9241. The second footprint type defines a footprint
> > union to aggregate footprint objects. This allows for an additive semantics
> > over the narrowing semantics defined in Appendix B of RFC 8008. This
> > updates RFC 8008. The two new footprint types are based on the requirements
> > raised by Open Caching, but are also applicable to CDNI use cases in
> > general.
> > > > >
> > > > >
> > > > > Section 2.2
> > > > > The second paragraph starts with:
> > > > > OLD:
> > > > > Sections 4.3.5 and 4.3.6 of [RFC8006] specify the IPv4 CIDR and the
> > IPv6 CIDR footprint types
> > > > > Where it should be changed to:
> > > > > NEW:
> > > > > Sections 4.3.5 and 4.3.6 of [RFC8006] specify the "ipv4cidr" and the
> > "ipv6cidr" footprint types
> > > > >
> > > > > After these changes, the document is approved by both of us.
> > > > >
> > > > > Cheers,
> > > > > Sanjay & Nir
> > > > >
> > > > > On Fri, Jun 23, 2023 at 7:04 PM Nir Sopher <[e-mail]>
> > wrote:
> > > > > Thanks for pushing it forward,
> > > > > Will further review at the beginning of next week.
> > > > > Have a nice weekend.
> > > > > Nir
> > > > >
> > > > > On Fri, Jun 23, 2023 at 12:28 AM Megan Ferguson <[e-mail]>
> > wrote:
> > > > >
> > > > > Sanjay and Nir (and *ADs),
> > > > >
> > > > > [*ADs - please review and approve the author-submitted changes to
> > our question #1 below.]
> > > > >
> > > > > Thank you for your replies.  We have updated the document based on
> > your comments below.
> > > > >
> > > > > Please also note that we have incorporated some responses marked
> > with [rfced] in the mail below (items closed out have been snipped). Please
> > let us know if we can be of further assistance with any of the outstanding
> > issues.
> > > > >
> > > > >   The files have been posted here:
> > > > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388.txt&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=IieWbMjKlQyOjbotwBn4pWyKdVhg6OHEvOZ_92Fxpac&e=
> > > > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388.pdf&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=OsOtC3a1iG3EgG5MI90EvAiIm5JQfFFZTLCCfOi2FjU&e=
> > > > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388.html&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=5RUZa-waUbT9MLHL6Uk72KiqqboJpZRPGtNhb1I_XhM&e=
> > > > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388.xml&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=rnI8C1TMJM7slUpITW4U5Vdm5ztUEavWyIDN1E3AAfM&e=
> > > > >
> > > > >   The relevant diff files have been posted here:
> > > > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388-2Ddiff.html&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=hyrRs85zhPo4vN4YB01d1PryXreU2Y-TFs1wADaivqE&e=
> > (comprehensive diff)
> > > > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388-2Drfcdiff.html&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=SQiCq6D5pEFep56sVnJKK7eYV2HQh5AOE40pMme0PDg&e=
> > (comprehensive rfcdiff)
> > > > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_authors_rfc9388-2Dauth48diff.html&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=UKF29gl7ddwUQLv3EBUGmwRVHlWi-Pb4MFMgVeu08GA&e=
> > (AUTH48 changes only)
> > > > >
> > > > >   The AUTH48 status page is viewable here:
> > > > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=http-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_auth48_rfc9388&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=YlgKeXnxnaQB9jBO1Qvz99OclaLDY4kdfWGy0i_IFEw&e=
> > > > >
> > > > > Thank you.
> > > > >
> > > > > RFC Editor/mf
> > > > >
> > > > > > On Jun 16, 2023, at 9:26 AM, Mishra, Sanjay <
> > [e-mail]> wrote:
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Hello there is a slight update from our last response RE the
> > [OC-RR].
> > > > > >
> > > > > > The webpage administrator confirms the version is 2.0 (already
> > confirmed) but that Thomas Edwards name in the webpage was erroneously
> > listed as one of the co-authors. The SVTA administrator will update the
> > document webpage to reflect the document version as 2.0 and remove Thomas
> > Edwards. Yoav Gressel as co-author is listed on the webpage and also in the
> > document.
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Thanks
> > > > > > Sanjay and Nir
> > > > > >
> > > > > > On Thu, Jun 15, 2023 at 4:09 PM Nir Sopher <[e-mail]>
> > wrote:
> > > > > > Hi,
> > > > > > And thank you very much for the comments.
> > > > > > See responses inline.
> > > > > > WRT item #8, #9, #12 we will do our best to prepare a new XML with
> > the proper changes by the beginning of next week.
> > > > > > Many thanks,
> > > > > > Nir
> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > > On Wed, Jun 7, 2023 at 6:22 AM <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > > > > > Authors and *AD,
> > > > > >
> > > > > > While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as
> > necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file.
> > > > > >
> > > > > > 1) <!--[rfced] *AD - Should RFC 9241 be added to this document's
> > header as being updated by this document?
> > > > > >
> > > > > > We see the following in the Abstract:
> > > > > >
> > > > > > "This document also supplements RFC 9241 with relevant ALTO entity
> > > > > > domain types."
> > > > > >
> > > > > > And in the document announcement message (see
> > > > > >
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__datatracker.ietf.org_doc_draft-2Dietf-2Dcdni-2Dadditional-2Dfootprint-2Dtypes_writeup_&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=EAl7D2D-HAbXpNeMnyvElnb0BM62XGZaAoG7mfZEveo&e=
> > ):
> > > > > >
> > > > > > "The document also updates RFC 9241 with relevant ALTO entity
> > > > > > domain types."
> > > > > >
> > > > > > The current header only indicates RFC 8008 as being updated by
> > this document.
> > > > > > Please advise.
> > > > > >
> > > > > > -->
> > > > > > [NS/SM]
> > > > > > We think it would be best to change the wording a bit:
> > > > > > Original:
> > > > > > This document also supplements RFC 9241 with relevant ALTO entity
> > domain types.
> > > > > > Suggested:
> > > > > > Furthermore, this document defines a new entity domain type
> > registered in the ALTO Entity Domain Types Registry, as defined in section
> > 7.4 of RFC 9241.
> > > > >
> > > > > [rfced] *AD - please confirm that the updates to the text of the
> > Abstract are the correct action here.
> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > > 2) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that
> > appear in the title) for use on
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=H-DXaaooMlmFo5W3UAuSjRt_Fy-dd-mEaPEILis6hkE&e=
> > .
> > > > > > org/search. -->
> > > > > >
> > > > > > [SM/NS]
> > > > > > Can you please clarify?
> > > > >
> > > > > [rfced] If there are any keywords you think readers might want to
> > search when they look for documents on this topic, and the words are not
> > already in the title, we can add them to our database.
> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > > 6) <!--[rfced] We had the following questions about text in the
> > Table in
> > > > > >      Section 4.1.  Note that we will communicate any necessary
> > changes
> > > > > >      to IANA upon completion of AUTH48.
> > > > > >
> > > > > > a) What does "hyphen-minus" mean?  Is this trying to communicate
> > that
> > > > > > some people might call it a hyphen and some might say minus sign?
> > Or
> > > > > > something else?
> > > > > >
> > > > > > [SM/NS]
> > > > > > We can drop the "-minus" and leave only the "hyphen".
> > > > > > Note that we took the "hyphen-minus" terminology for the actual
> > ISO defining the country subdivision values:
> > > > > > See
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.iso.org_obp_ui_-23iso-3Astd-3Aiso-3A3166-3A-2D2-3Aed-2D4-3Av1-3Aen&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=gGyH0z2JR4_54vqv0BBl6b5AL58HCWllGcPr3Cs9-7E&e=
> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > > b) Is this spacing correct?
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Original:
> > > > > > Characters from A-Z;0-9
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Perhaps:
> > > > > > Characters from A-Z and 0-9
> > > > > >
> > > > > > -->
> > > > > > [SM/NS]
> > > > > >  For the ease of reading we agree with your suggestion.
> > > > > > Yet again, this was copied from the ISO defining the values
> > structure
> > > > >
> > > > > [rfced] We have left both of the above as they were.  Thank you for
> > providing background on these choices.
> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > > 7) <!-- [rfced] For reference [OC-RR], the provided URL points to
> > a page
> > > > > >      that shows the document being both Version 2.0 and 2.1. Which
> > > > > >      version is correct?
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Also, the provided URL shows two more contributors: Thomas Edwards
> > and
> > > > > > Yoav Gressel. Would you like these to be added to the reference as
> > > > > > authors?
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Original:
> > > > > >    [OC-RR]    Finkelman, O., Ed., Hofmann, J., Klein, E., Mishra,
> > S.,
> > > > > >               Ma, K., Sahar, D., and B. Zurat, "Open Caching -
> > Request
> > > > > >               Routing Functional Specification", Version 2.0, 15
> > January
> > > > > >               2021, <
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.svta.org_product_open-2Dcache-2Drequest-2D&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=WhHa9lNnA0TysADGsuVn07x3jcJhEwjEINW6NhaL9FY&e=
> > > > > >               routing-functional-specification/>.
> > > > > > Perhaps:
> > > > > >    [OC-RR]    Finkelman, O., Ed., Zurat, B., Sahar, D., Klein, E.,
> > > > > >               Hofmann, J., Ma, K.J., Stock, M., Mishra, S.,
> > Edwards, T.,
> > > > > >               and Y. Yoav, "Open Caching - Request Routing
> > Functional
> > > > > >               Specification", Version 2.0, 15 January 2021,
> > > > > >               <
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.svta.org_product_open-2Dcache-2Drequest-2Drouting-2D&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=Fae8JNp_La87atc_-iT7-guUyp6yGpEQYdMzUNiBcdY&e=
> > > > > >               functional-specification/>.
> > > > > > -->
> > > > > > [SM/NS]
> > > > > > We will stick to version 2.0
> > > > > > We are working to get the OC-RR webpage updated to reflect version
> > 2.0.
> > > > > > We would also push forward adding Thomas Edwards to the authors
> > list (Yoav is already listed in the document).
> > > > > > Please note that in the proposal Yoav was added as "Y. Yoav"
> > instead of "G. Yoav" or to be consistent "Gressel, Y.”
> > > > > [rfced] Please review our updates to ensure that this reference now
> > appears as desired.
> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > > 8) <!-- [rfced] Terminology: Throughout the document, we spotted
> > the
> > > > > >      following issues related to terminology.  Please review each
> > > > > >      question below and let us know how to update, using old/new
> > where
> > > > > >      necessary.  Note that you are welcome to update the xml file
> > > > > >      itself if that is easier than explaining the changes via
> > email.
> > > > > [rfced] We made these updates based on
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__author-2Dtools.ietf.org_iddiff-3Furl1-3Ddraft-2Dietf-2Dcdni-2Dadditional-2Dfootprint-2Dtypes-2D11-26url2-3Ddraft-2Dietf-2Dcdni-2Dadditional-2Dfootprint-2Dtypes-2D12-26difftype-3D-2D-2Dhwdiff&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=Z1AcNQijBUwEzbxLmx0zS3S9_ix4Q4-tcdsIllVGvSc&e=
> > .
> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > > 1) Please review the way that the following terms appear
> > throughout the document
> > > > > > with regard to capitalization, hyphenation, quotation, spacing,
> > phrasing, etc. and let us know
> > > > > > if/how we may make these terms consistent:
> > > > > >
> > > > > > a) object vs. Object
> > > > > >
> > > > > > CDNI Footprint object vs. CNDI Footprint Object
> > > > > > Footprint Objects vs. Footprint objects vs. footprint objects
> > > > > >
> > > > > > (Note that RFC 8006 uses Footprint object)
> > > > > >
> > > > > > [SM/NS] we changed all instances to lower case "object"
> > > > > >
> > > > > > b) Footprint, Footprint Types, Footprint Values, Footprint Union
> > > > > >
> > > > > > footprint (as a general noun)
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Footprint Types vs. footprint-type vs. footprint types vs.
> > "footprint-type"
> > > > > > -See also "Country Code" footprint type and "IPv4CIDR" and
> > "IPv6CIDR" footprint types.
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Footprint-value vs. footprint value
> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Union Footprint type
> > > > > > "Footprintunion" footprint type
> > > > > > "Footprintunion" object
> > > > > > Footprint object of type "footprint union"
> > > > > >
> > > > > > [SM/NS] We are comparing the draft with previous RFCs and trying
> > to come up wit a consistent scheme for different use cases
> > > > > > 1) "Footprint Type": "type" should  be in lower case unless it is
> > part of the section header
> > > > > > 2)  "footprint-type": the dash is OK when it is part of an anchor
> > or when it stand for the property name (in the different examples)
> > > > > > 3) "Footprint Union": should be capitalized
> > > > > > 4) "footprintunion" should be used in some cases - we are trying
> > to understand where
> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > > c) Subdivision
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Subdivision Code Footprint Type
> > > > > > a footprint object of type "subdivisioncode"
> > > > > > SUBDIVISION Domain (and SUBDIVISION domain)
> > > > > > country Subdivision code vs. Country Subdivision codes
> > > > > > subdivisioncode vs. subdivision code
> > > > > >
> > > > > > [SM/NS] this case is similar to the "Footprint Union" case. We
> > will work on it and would update
> > > > > >
> > > > > > 2) For the following terms, would you like to match their use in
> > past
> > > > > > RFCs, specifically RFC 8006?  Please review the various styles that
> > > > > > appear in the document currently and our suggested updates to
> > > > > > make those forms consistent throughout the document and with RFC
> > 8006.
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Current:
> > > > > > Country Code vs. countrycode vs. country code
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Perhaps:
> > > > > >    countrycode
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Current:
> > > > > >    ipv4cidr vs. IPv4CIDR
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Perhaps:
> > > > > >    ipv4cidr
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Current:
> > > > > >    ipv6cidr vs. IPv6CIDR
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Perhaps:
> > > > > >    ipv6cidr
> > > > > >
> > > > > > -->
> > > > > >
> > > > > > [SM/NS] This is again the "footprint union" vs. "footprintunion"
> > issue. We will find a consistent usage
> > > > > >
> > > > > > 9) <!--[rfced]Please review the uses of the word "match"
> > throughout the document.
> > > > > > In some places, it is not clear that the constraint does not have
> > to
> > > > > > match both patterns given.
> > > > >
> > > > > [rfced] We have updated the examples below as suggested.  Please let
> > us know if any further occurrences of “match” need changes.
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Examples with some possible updates to help the reader.
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Original:
> > > > > > The Footprint Object in this example creates a
> > > > > > constraint matching clients in the states of New Jersey and New
> > York,
> > > > > > USA (ISO [ISO3166-2] codes "US-NJ" and "US-NY", respectively).
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Perhaps:
> > > > > > The Footprint Object in this example creates a
> > > > > > constraint that matches clients in the state of either New Jersey
> > or New York,
> > > > > > (ISO [ISO3166-2] codes "US-NJ" and "US-NY", respectively).
> > > > > >
> > > > > > [SM/NS]  Agreed
> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Original:
> > > > > > Using Footprint Objects of these types, one can define FCI
> > Capability
> > > > > > Advertisement Object footprint constraints that match IPv4 or IPv6
> > > > > > clients.  However, the described "narrowing" semantic of the
> > Footprint
> > > > > > Objects array, as described in Appendix B of [RFC8008], prevents
> > the
> > > > > > usage of these objects together to create a footprint constraint
> > that
> > > > > > matches IPv4 clients together with IPv6 clients.
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Perhaps (adding "either...but not both", cutting "together", and
> > > > > > combining the sentences):
> > > > > > Using Footprint Objects of these types, one can
> > > > > > define FCI Capability Advertisement Object footprint constraints
> > that
> > > > > > match either IPv4 or IPv6 clients, but not both, due to the
> > described
> > > > > > "narrowing" semantic of the Footprint Objects
> > > > > > array (Appendix B of [RFC8008]) that prevents the usage of
> > > > > > these objects together to create a footprint constraint that
> > matches
> > > > > > IPv4 clients with IPv6 clients.
> > > > > >
> > > > > > [SM/NS] Agreed
> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Original:
> > > > > > Below is an example for an attempt at creating an object matching
> > > > > > IPv4 clients of subnet "192.0.2.0/24", as well as IPv6 clients of
> > > > > > subnet "2001:db8::/32".
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Perhaps:
> > > > > > Below is an example attempting to create an object that matches
> > > > > > IPv4 clients of subnet "192.0.2.0/24" as well as IPv6 clients of
> > > > > > subnet "2001:db8::/32".
> > > > > > -->
> > > > > > [SM/NS] Agreed
> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > > 10) <!--[rfced] Please review the following with regard to ISO
> > citations.
> > > > > >
> > > > > > a) Is ISO 3166-2 the name of the code?  If not, perhaps the
> > following
> > > > > > change would be helpful to the reader.  Note that there may be more
> > > > > > occurences, please review all as this is simply an example.
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Original:
> > > > > >    The "subdivisioncode" data type specified in Section 2.1.1.1
> > > > > >    describes a country-specific subdivision using an [ISO3166-2]
> > code.
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Perhaps:
> > > > > >    The "subdivisioncode" data type specified in Section 2.1.1.1
> > > > > >    describes a country-specific subdivision using a code described
> > in
> > > > > >    [ISO3166-2].
> > > > > > [SM/NS]
> > > > > > Maybe:
> > > > > > The "subdivisioncode" data type specified in Section 2.1.1.1
> > > > > >    describes a country-specific subdivision using a code as
> > defined in
> > > > > >    [ISO3166-2].
> > > > >
> > > > > [rfced] Thank you for this guidance. Please review other similar
> > instances throughout the doc and let us know if/how they may be updated
> > using old/new text.
> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > > 11) <!-- [rfced] Please review whether any of the notes in this
> > document
> > > > > > should be in the <aside> element. It is defined as "a container
> > for
> > > > > > content that is semantically less important or tangential to the
> > > > > > content that surrounds it" (
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__authors.ietf.org_en_rfcxml-2Dvocabulary-23aside&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=aNcD_pgXb5qjTllxyCe5MJQgRTzMv518ReluUd8bmm0&e=
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> > > > > > -->
> > > > > > [NS] I do not fully understand the point here.
> > > > > > Will try to read more about it, but if you can give more
> > details/an example it would greatly assist me.
> > > > >
> > > > > [rfced]  You may find more info at
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__authors.ietf.org_rfcxml-2Dvocabulary-23aside&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=1M4B3QCqA-VdOlGvuDQx_ARDiekvCjXUnsFEl3YM6OM&e=
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> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > > 12) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of
> > the online
> > > > > > Style Guide <
> > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_styleguide_part2_-23inclusive-5Flanguage&d=DwIFaQ&c=udBTRvFvXC5Dhqg7UHpJlPps3mZ3LRxpb6__0PomBTQ&r=XniVbishGiO2Ao9hKqSc-hTVIWCi3T-x6GdHR4ZTgoM&m=vqL67r-dxlTLD00nLimEoRk-HnqUkkR4Y7TKyggeyJ6irSZTN_vOgS4gSbY0uOL7&s=7x1Jn1xJ1hiMoAjgIuWr_Sf8lm2sMn9H7G4w4qDDFHE&e=
> > >
> > > > > > and let us know if any changes are needed.
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Note that our script did not flag any words in particular, but
> > this should
> > > > > > still be reviewed as a best practice.
> > > > >
> > > > > [rfced] Sounds like this issue has been reviewed.
> > > > > > -->
> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Thank you.
> > > > > >
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