Re: [Dime] FW: Russ Housley's Discuss on draft-ietf-dime-pmip6-lr-09: (with DISCUSS)

Hi.

That seems to improved things except:

s1, para 1: The 'itself' is still unclear as to what it refers to.  
suggest s/itself/the same Mobile Access Gateway/.

s5.1, para 3: s/indicating Direct routing/indicating direct routing/

Regards,
Elwyn

On 22/02/12 06:25, Qin Wu wrote:
> Dan:
>
> We have fixed this part in the new version -10.
>
> Regards!
> -Qin
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Romascanu, Dan (Dan)"<dromasca@avaya.com>
> To:<elwynd@googlemail.com>;<dime@ietf.org>;<draft-ietf-dime-pmip6-lr@tools.ietf.org>
> Cc: "Glen Zorn"<glenzorn@gmail.com>; "Russ Housley ""<housley@vigilsec.com>
> Sent: Sunday, February 19, 2012 5:01 PM
> Subject: RE: [Dime] FW: Russ Housley's Discuss on draft-ietf-dime-pmip6-lr-09: (with DISCUSS)
>
>
> Document editors,
>
> Do you have any problem with fixing the editorial nits brought up by
> Elwyn within the note to the RFC Editor?
>
> Thanks and Regards,
>
> Dan
>
>
>
>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: The Master [mailto:elwynd@googlemail.com]
>> Sent: Friday, February 17, 2012 11:34 AM
>> To: Romascanu, Dan (Dan)
>> Cc: Glen Zorn; Russ Housley "; dime@ietf.org; draft-ietf-dime-pmip6-
>> lr@tools.ietf.org
>> Subject: Re: [Dime] FW: Russ Housley's Discuss on draft-ietf-dime-
>> pmip6-lr-09: (with DISCUSS)
>>
>> Hi, Russ, Dan and authors,
>>
>> The latest version (v09) addresses the minor issues that I raised on
>> v07
>> as discussed with Qin.  However I observe that the editorial nits
>> *didn't* get fixed, especially the comment about 'itself' in s1 which
> I
>> ought to be improved.
>>
>> Regards,
>> Elwyn
>>
>> On Tue, 2012-02-14 at 08:51 +0100, Romascanu, Dan (Dan) wrote:
>>> Hi Glen,
>>>
>>> The change control of I-Ds submitted to the IESG belongs to the
>>> shepherding AD. I prefer to hold submissions during the week prior
> to
>> a
>>> telechat so that all ADs review the same version, and editors do all
>>> changes at once after the telechat. Now that you submitted, it's
>> done,
>>> but in case other ADs enter DISCUSSes that require changes you will
>> need
>>> to issue yet another version.
>>>
>>> Russ, Elwyn, can you please check if you concerns were answered?
>>>
>>> Thanks and Regards,
>>>
>>> Dan
>>>
>>>
>>>> -----Original Message-----
>>>> From: Glen Zorn [mailto:glenzorn@gmail.com]
>>>> Sent: Tuesday, February 14, 2012 7:14 AM
>>>> To: Romascanu, Dan (Dan)
>>>> Cc: dime@ietf.org; "@tools.ietf.org>"; Russ Housley"
>>>> Subject: Re: [Dime] FW: Russ Housley's Discuss on draft-ietf-dime-
>>>> pmip6-lr-09: (with DISCUSS)
>>>>
>>>> On 2/14/2012 7:16 AM, Romascanu, Dan (Dan) wrote:
>>>>> Document editors,
>>>>>
>>>>> Can you please check what is the status of these comments?
> Please
>> do
>>>> not make a change now, even if all comments were accepted, but
> wait
>>>> until after the telechat to issue a revised version.
>>>> Your message and Russ's DISCUSS seem to be contradictory.  In any
>>> case,
>>>> a revision was posted last night, long before the DISCUSS.
>>>>
>>>>> Thanks and Regards,
>>>>>
>>>>> Dan
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> -----Original Message-----
>>>>> From: iesg-bounces@ietf.org [mailto:iesg-bounces@ietf.org] On
>> Behalf
>>>> Of Russ Housley
>>>>> Sent: Tuesday, February 14, 2012 12:55 AM
>>>>> To: The IESG
>>>>> Cc: draft-ietf-dime-pmip6-lr@tools.ietf.org;
>> elwynd@dial.pipex.com;
>>>> dime-chairs@tools.ietf.org
>>>>> Subject: Russ Housley's Discuss on draft-ietf-dime-pmip6-lr-09:
>>> (with
>>>> DISCUSS)
>>>>> Russ Housley has entered the following ballot position for
>>>>> draft-ietf-dime-pmip6-lr-09: Discuss
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> ---------------------------------------------------------------------
>>>> -
>>>>> DISCUSS:
>>>>>
> ---------------------------------------------------------------------
>>>> -
>>>>>
>>>>>    The authors have agreed to make some changes based on the Gen-
>> ART
>>>>>    Review by Elwyn Davies on 2-Feb-2012.  The changes have not
>> been
>>>>>    posted yet.
>>>>>
>>>>>
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