[Gen-art] Re: Gen-art review of draft-ietf-tsvwg-diffserv-class-aggr-04.txt

Gonzalo, Magnus, all:

A new version (-05) of this draft is available at:
http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-tsvwg-diffserv-class-aggr-05.txt

The changes made are based on the comments indicated by Gonzalo in this
E-Mail thread.  Please see in-line below on the changes made.

Based on the comment by Magnus (Westerlund) dated 16 Oct 2007 
13:18:17.0424 (UTC),
which I agree with, no changes were made on comments of the E-Mail 
thread with Brian,
Ken, Pekka, and Marshall.

Thanks!
-- Kwok --

At 02:45 AM 10/9/2007, Gonzalo Camarillo wrote:
>Hi,
>
>I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
>reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
>http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
>
>Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
>you may receive.
>
>
>Draft: draft-ietf-tsvwg-diffserv-class-aggr-04.txt
>Reviewer: Gonzalo Camarillo <Gonzalo.Camarillo@ericsson.com>
>Review Date: 8 October 2007
>
>Summary:
>
>This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should
>be fixed before publication.
>
>
>Comments:
>
>This draft is Informational and does not seem to contain any normative
>text. If this is actually the case, Section 1.1 with its reference to
>RFC 2119 should be removed.

Changed the "should", "must" to "SHOULD", "MUST" where they are appropriate.
Five changes in section 3, and one change in section 4.1.3.
These "SHOULD" and "MUST" indicates what needs to be done for the 
configurations
to work well together, they are not used to specify any standards.

>A set of acronyms are not expanded. They should be expanded on their
>first use.

Expanded the acronyms on their first use as suggested.

>References [1] and [2] are never used in the text.

Deleted references [1] and [2] as suggested.

>Abstracts should not contain references.

Removed references in the Abstract section as suggested.

>Thanks,
>
>Gonzalo
>

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