Re: [secdir] Secdir review of draft-ietf-mpls-tp-oam-id-mib-08

Venkatesan Mahalingam <venkat.mahalingams@gmail.com> Wed, 02 September 2015 03:58 UTC

Return-Path: <venkat.mahalingams@gmail.com>
X-Original-To: secdir@ietfa.amsl.com
Delivered-To: secdir@ietfa.amsl.com
Received: from localhost (ietfa.amsl.com [127.0.0.1]) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTP id A2EAC1B3BFB; Tue, 1 Sep 2015 20:58:42 -0700 (PDT)
X-Virus-Scanned: amavisd-new at amsl.com
X-Spam-Flag: NO
X-Spam-Score: -0.799
X-Spam-Level:
X-Spam-Status: No, score=-0.799 tagged_above=-999 required=5 tests=[BAYES_00=-1.9, DKIM_SIGNED=0.1, DKIM_VALID=-0.1, DKIM_VALID_AU=-0.1, FREEMAIL_FROM=0.001, HTML_MESSAGE=0.001, J_CHICKENPOX_35=0.6, J_CHICKENPOX_45=0.6, SPF_PASS=-0.001] autolearn=no
Received: from mail.ietf.org ([4.31.198.44]) by localhost (ietfa.amsl.com [127.0.0.1]) (amavisd-new, port 10024) with ESMTP id y5P56vvn2Lty; Tue, 1 Sep 2015 20:58:41 -0700 (PDT)
Received: from mail-la0-x22b.google.com (mail-la0-x22b.google.com [IPv6:2a00:1450:4010:c03::22b]) (using TLSv1.2 with cipher ECDHE-RSA-AES128-GCM-SHA256 (128/128 bits)) (No client certificate requested) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTPS id 951901B3597; Tue, 1 Sep 2015 20:58:40 -0700 (PDT)
Received: by laeb10 with SMTP id b10so13085721lae.1; Tue, 01 Sep 2015 20:58:39 -0700 (PDT)
DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; d=gmail.com; s=20120113; h=mime-version:in-reply-to:references:date:message-id:subject:from:to :cc:content-type; bh=ZEdfGoYhUX0b9VBZC/9GfwMnRMzBR692YiM9BwM3li8=; b=Zn4igDWjUagms5oZc5d5xnBIGo1DlUp+gV6lJqiyhUk/1z7w2jsG7STZU6+5yBjHAA Ad6RrxmbIWw+wWq4WB6SUqR0LkFK/dy6Br3ypnqJYEoH1GmiD2yfZjRjx41xeqMu8M0d 1wT3yANcd1guYpgD3W2c1dwNL1Mw631P1XSdSL5OOxSqyVOHWQgphSQHEpvZuP1pEZxy HBhkUaaQlNu2ku0BUgXJ9pB/JcboWGyB9stYXGowUh5r+iiK2JYwnG07jvWmMIb//hZJ sY749IDr/Gapjxz2Pltu95qFupucjmypRWkJlfMlCxKaFEaXL0yXYMdFWQFjqMWEGdPG UCsw==
MIME-Version: 1.0
X-Received: by 10.152.219.172 with SMTP id pp12mr14700452lac.17.1441166318889; Tue, 01 Sep 2015 20:58:38 -0700 (PDT)
Received: by 10.25.84.147 with HTTP; Tue, 1 Sep 2015 20:58:38 -0700 (PDT)
In-Reply-To: <C0E0A32284495243BDE0AC8A066631A818DAD4F1@szxeml557-mbs.china.huawei.com>
References: <CADajj4bzDNqCzaJSjviVZm1nk8CrbUopzj0PrNNOUcK9SNG1ZA@mail.gmail.com> <C0E0A32284495243BDE0AC8A066631A818DAD4F1@szxeml557-mbs.china.huawei.com>
Date: Tue, 01 Sep 2015 20:58:38 -0700
Message-ID: <CA+UNA02oU2CvwNEFVKPUTydSSc30bCzR8FY=xVG1J1mCKYkCvQ@mail.gmail.com>
From: Venkatesan Mahalingam <venkat.mahalingams@gmail.com>
To: Tina TSOU <Tina.Tsou.Zouting@huawei.com>
Content-Type: multipart/alternative; boundary="001a1134328a7ff4b7051ebbae1d"
Archived-At: <http://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/secdir/yngFCxchvxA28gnayIh2JjjeIAs>
X-Mailman-Approved-At: Wed, 02 Sep 2015 07:10:52 -0700
Cc: "draft-ietf-mpls-tp-oam-id-mib.all@tools.ietf.org" <draft-ietf-mpls-tp-oam-id-mib.all@tools.ietf.org>, The IESG <iesg@ietf.org>, "secdir@ietf.org" <secdir@ietf.org>
Subject: Re: [secdir] Secdir review of draft-ietf-mpls-tp-oam-id-mib-08
X-BeenThere: secdir@ietf.org
X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.15
Precedence: list
List-Id: Security Area Directorate <secdir.ietf.org>
List-Unsubscribe: <https://www.ietf.org/mailman/options/secdir>, <mailto:secdir-request@ietf.org?subject=unsubscribe>
List-Archive: <https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/browse/secdir/>
List-Post: <mailto:secdir@ietf.org>
List-Help: <mailto:secdir-request@ietf.org?subject=help>
List-Subscribe: <https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/secdir>, <mailto:secdir-request@ietf.org?subject=subscribe>
X-List-Received-Date: Wed, 02 Sep 2015 03:58:42 -0000

Thanks for your comments Tina, will address and publish the new version 09
soon.

-Venkat,

On Tue, Sep 1, 2015 at 7:09 AM, Tina TSOU <Tina.Tsou.Zouting@huawei.com>
wrote:

> Dear all,
>
>
>
> I have reviewed this document as part of the security directorate's
> ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG.
> These comments were written primarily for the benefit of the security area
> directors. Document editors and WG chairs should treat these comments just
> like any other last call comments.
>
> The document seems ready to go. I only found these minor nits:
>
>
>
> The title of this draft indicates mib for MPLS-TP OAM ID but in the body
> MPLS is used mostly and sometimes MPLS-TP appears, for example, both MPLS
> tunnels and MPLS-TP tunnels are mentioned. I'm not sure if they can be used
> interchangeable. Besides, I notice that the names for the objects all start
> with "mplsoamidxxx", which seems to address mib for MPLS OAM ID. Then it is
> not aligned with the title of this draft. A bit confused. Could the authors
> provide any clarification on this? A general suggestion is to make
> alignment throughout the document, including the title of the draft.
>
>
>
> * Abstract:
>
>
>
> > it describes Operations, Administration, and Management (OAM)
>
> > identifiers related managed objects for Multiprotocol Label Switching
>
> > (MPLS) and MPLS based Transport Profile (TP).
>
>
>
> I find this sentence hard to parse. Maybe s/related managed
> objects/related to managed objects/ ?
>
>
>
>
>
> * Section 1, page 3:
>
> > MPLS LSP(Label
>
>
>
> There's a missing space.
>
>
>
>
>
> * Section 5.1, page 4:
>
>
>
> > The mplsOamIdMegTable is used to manage one or more Maintenance
>
> > Entities (MEs) that belongs
>
>
>
> s/belongs/belong/
>
>
>
>
>
> * Section 6, copy&paste mistake
>
>
>
> -- Source MEP id is derived from the IP compatible MPLS LSP
>
>        mplsOamIdMeSinkMepIndex           = 0,
>
>
>
> The description in the note should be sink MEP. There is already another
> line to describe source MEP.
>
>
>
>
>
> * Page 15:
>
>
>
> > BFD
>
>
>
> This is the first and only instance of BFD. Please expand. (and maybe
> reference RFC5880)?
>
>
>
>
>
> * Page 17:
>
>
>
> "p2p" and "P2P" first used here. should probably be expanded.
>
>
>
>
>
> Thank you,
>
> Tina
>
>
>