Re: [CCAMP] WG Last Call on draft-ietf-ccamp-flexi-grid-fwk-03 and call for sheperd

["Adrian Farrel" <[e-mail]>]

Hello Matt,
 
Leaving the bulk of the editorials to the, erm, editors...
 
> 3.2.5, first bullet: “This group of OTSi should be carried over a single fibre.” Is that
> a normal English should, or a 2219 SHOULD? If the former, it might be worth 
> rephrasing to avoid ambiguity.
 
It is certainly not 2119 because we do not define data plane behaviour.
 
I would favour s/should be/are/
 
> 4.2: “The association of the three components a filter, a fiber, and a filter, is a 
> media channel in its most basic form.”. It’d be nice to clarify that this is a fiber 
> with a filter at each end – that’s not immediately obvious on first reading, 
> especially with the diagram that makes it clear on the next page.
 
s/association/association sequence/
 
> 4.8.4: bear in mind that 0 is not a positive integer, and it looks like the definitions 
> involving (2^n) and (2^m) are intended to include the case where n/m is 0.
 
Yeah, we should probably say "non-negative integer" to be consistent with the usage in computer science.
It would be OK to write ℕ0 if only we supported unicode and superscript in I-Ds :-)
Or perhaps being more explicit "the set of zero and all positive integers".
 
Thanks for the review,
Adrian