Re: [CCAMP] WG Last Call on draft-ietf-ccamp-flexi-grid-fwk-03 and call for sheperd

["Matt Hartley (mhartley)" <[e-mail]>]

Adrian,

The alternatives you’ve proposed all sound good to me.

Cheers

Matt


Hello Matt,



Leaving the bulk of the editorials to the, erm, editors...



> 3.2.5, first bullet: “This group of OTSi should be carried over a single fibre.” Is that

> a normal English should, or a 2219 SHOULD? If the former, it might be worth

> rephrasing to avoid ambiguity.



It is certainly not 2119 because we do not define data plane behaviour.



I would favour s/should be/are/



> 4.2: “The association of the three components a filter, a fiber, and a filter, is a

> media channel in its most basic form.”. It’d be nice to clarify that this is a fiber

> with a filter at each end – that’s not immediately obvious on first reading,

> especially with the diagram that makes it clear on the next page.



s/association/association sequence/



> 4.8.4: bear in mind that 0 is not a positive integer, and it looks like the definitions

> involving (2^n) and (2^m) are intended to include the case where n/m is 0.



Yeah, we should probably say "non-negative integer" to be consistent with the usage in computer science.

It would be OK to write ℕ0 if only we supported unicode and superscript in I-Ds :-)

Or perhaps being more explicit "the set of zero and all positive integers".



Thanks for the review,

Adrian