Re: [dhcwg] WGLC: draft-ietf-dhc-leasequery-by-remote-id

[Pavan Kurapati <[e-mail]>]

Hi Alfred,
Apologies if some editorial comments were missed, I thought I covered
all of them. I will take care of both the changes suggested below
along with the minor changes given by idnits. Please do send other
comments as well. I will make the changes and publish the same next
week.

Thanks,
Pavan

On Fri, Oct 1, 2010 at 2:36 PM, Alfred HÎnes <[e-mail]> wrote:
> I'm in support of this draft as well, in principle.
>
> However, on a quick pass over the current version, I now see some
> of my editorial points raised once in a review of a previous draft
> version still not being addressed, and new ones having crept in.
>
> My apologies, but I doubt I'll be able to compile a detailed report
> today.  Therefore here's an advance notice of the more significant
> details, where the first perhaps should be discussed:
>
>
> The various definitions in Section 2 still talk about "hosts".
>
> In recent discussions on broadband access gateway behavior
> it has become apparent that, from the perspective of different
> specifications, such devices have to behave as a "host" on the
> upstream interface and as a "router" and the LAN side, and for
> other specifications, this differentiation does not need to be
> applied.  Since the distinction in some context really matters,
> I reinforce my previous strong suggestion to   s/host/node/g .
>
> Rationale:  For all purposes within the scope of the draft,
> it does not matter whether a device acts as a router or a host
> (i.e., its IP forwarding behavior and/or L2 switching behavior),
> be it in general or per interface.  The only focal point of the
> draft is the device's role in DHCP (client/server/relay agent).
> Therefore the use of "host" is considered confusing and too
> restrictive.  The more general term, "node", should be used
> throughout.
>
>
> Section 4, 2nd para:   3x "specified"/"specifies" in a single
> sentence on two lines -- argh!   Please rephrase!
> I suggest to change:
>
>   A DHCPLEASEQUERY specified in this document specifies a lease query
>   by Remote ID unless otherwise specified.
> ---
>   When used in this document, the unqualified term "DHCPLEASEQUERY"
>   indicates a lease query by Remote ID, unless otherwise specified.
>
>
> I'll hurry up to document ASAP all the remaining editorials (like
> singular/plural mismatches, wrong/missing articles, etc.) in the memo,
> but please admit it might take me until Sunday to accomplish that.
>
>
> Kind regards,
>  Alfred HÎnes.
>
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