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Authors, While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. 1) <!--[rfced] Please review the guidance found at <https://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/iab-format.txt> and let us know if any changes are needed. --> 2) <!--[rfced] This document had the consensus attribute set to true, but also says the following. Shall the consensus attribute be set to false? Original: The views and positions documented in this report are those of the expressed during the workshop by participants and do not necessarily reflect IAB views and positions. and Thus, the content of this report follows the flow and dialog of the workshop but does not attempt to capture a consensus. --> 3) <!--[rfced] Section 2.2.1. Please let us know how we can clarify the following sentence. Is the collaboration between the intermediary services or the support they provide? Original: Instead of encrypted communication between only two ends and passive observation by all on-path elements, intermediate relays could be trusted parties with limited information for the purposes of collaboration between in-network intermediary services' support. --> 4) <!--[rfced] Section 2.2.3. The following sentence appears to be missing one or more words between "local transmission" and "end-to-end transmission". Please let us know how to update this: Original: E.g. side car information can contain additional acknowledgements to enable in-network local retransmission faster end-to-end retransmission by reducing the signaling round trip time. --> 5) <!--[rfced] Section 2.3.1. Please help us make the following sentence clearer. Does "categorized into an envelope" mean "comprises"? Original: The proposed contract solution is to define a collection of acceptable behaviors categorized into an envelope of different states that might include IP addresses, domain names, and indicators of compromise. Perhaps: The proposed contract solution is to define a collection of acceptable behaviors that comprises different states that might include IP addresses, domain names, and indicators of compromise. --> 6) <!--[rfced] Section 2.3.3. Is there a phrase missing in this sentence? Is the compromise between the "tension" and something else? Or is the compromise between services that offer privacy and services that offer protection? Original: These collaborative solutions may be the best compromise between the tension of privacy vs protection based services [PAULY]. Perhaps: These collaborative solutions may be the best compromise on services that balance privacy and protection [PAULY]. --> 7) <!--[rfced] Section 3. In the following sentence, it is not clear what kind of technologies the operators are being asked to allow into their environments. In addition, is the phrase "environment requirements" correct? Please let us know how to clarify this sentence. Original: * There is an unanswered question of whether or not network operators be willing to participate and allow technologies into their environment requirements in exchange for technologies that prove their clients are being good net-citizens. --> 8) <!--[rfced] We found alternate sources for both the [GRUBBS] and [KUEHLEWIND] references. Would you like to update these references? [GRUBBS] https://www.usenix.org/conference/usenixsecurity22/presentation/grubbs [KUEHLEWIND] https://www.ericsson.com/en/blog/2022/6/relays-and-online-user-privacy Original: [GRUBBS] Grubbs, P., Arun, A., Zhang, Y., Bonneau, J., and M. Walfish, "Zero-Knowledge Middleboxes", August 2022, <https://github.com/intarchboard/workshop-m- ten/blob/main/papers/Grubbs-Zero- Knowledge%20Middleboxes.pdf>. [KUEHLEWIND] Kühlewind, M., Westerlund, M., Sarker, Z., and M. Ihlar, "Relying on Relays", August 2022, <https://github.com/intarchboard/workshop-m- ten/blob/main/papers/Kuehlewind-Relying-on-Relays.pdf>. --> 9) <!--[rfced] The [KNODEL] reference is an introduction to the pearg Internet-Draft [I-D.irtf-pearg-safe-internet-measurement]. Original: [I-D.irtf-pearg-safe-internet-measurement] Learmonth, I. R., Grover, G., and M. Knodel, "Guidelines for Performing Safe Measurement on the Internet", Work in Progress, Internet-Draft, draft-irtf-pearg-safe-internet- measurement-08, 10 July 2023, <https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-irtf-pearg- safe-internet-measurement-08>. [KNODEL] Knodel, M., "Guidelines for Performing Safe Measurement on the Internet", August 2022, <https://github.com/intarchboard/workshop-m- ten/blob/main/papers/Knodel-Guidelines-for-Performing- Safe-Measurement-on-the-Internet.pdf>. Appendix A lists the following: Iain R. Learmonth, Gurshabad Grover, Mallory Knodel. “Guidelines for Performing Safe Measurement on the Internet.” (Additional rationale) [KNODEL] Perhaps [KNODEL] should be listed in the Informative References as the following: [KNODEL] Knodel, M., "Additional rationale for 'Guidelines for Performing Safe Measurement on the Internet'", August 2022, <https://github.com/intarchboard/workshop-m- ten/blob/main/papers/Knodel-Guidelines-for-Performing- Safe-Measurement-on-the-Internet.pdf>. And Appendix A be updated to show the following: Iain R. Learmonth, Gurshabad Grover, Mallory Knodel. “Guidelines for Performing Safe Measurement on the Internet.” [LEARMONTH] Mallory Knodel. "Additional rationale for 'Guidelines for Performing Safe Measurement on the Internet'" [KNODEL] --> 10) <!--[rfced] On the [KUEHLEWIND] paper (https://github.com/intarchboard/workshop-m-ten/blob/main/papers/Kuehlewind-Relying-on-Relays.pdf), it is unclear to us whether "ANM" is part of Zaheduzzaman Sarker's name or is an honorific. This may impact the initial used in the Informative References section (currently Z.) and the name provided in Appendix A.3 (Currently Zaheduzzaman Sarker). --> 11) <!--[rfced] The original URL provided for [DITTO] does not work: [DITTO] Meier, R., Lenders, V., and L. Vanbever, "Ditto - WAN Traffic Obfuscation at Line Rate", April 2022, <https://nsg.ee.ethz.ch/fileadmin/user_upload/ publications/ditto_final_ndss22.pdf>. We have found the following: A landing page for the paper: https://www.ndss-symposium.org/ndss-paper/auto-draft-195/ And also a DOI URL, which displays the PDF directly: https://doi.org/10.14722/ndss.2022.24056 Perhaps: [DITTO] Meier, R., Lenders, V., and L. Vanbever, "Ditto: WAN Traffic Obfuscation at Line Rate", Network and Distributed Systems Security (NDSS) Symposium, April 2022, <https://doi.org/10.14722/ndss.2022.24056>. --> 12) <!--[rfced] Appendix A.2. The following paper does not have a reference. Would you like to add one? Wes Hardaker. "Network Flow Management by Probability." --> 13) <!--[rfced] Appendix B. a) The list of participants includes a duplication: "Michael Ackermann" and "Mike Ackermann". Which should be used? b) While we understand that some participants may wish to provide only partial names, is "Qiufang" actually "Qiufang Ma"? 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