Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9490 <draft-iab-m-ten-workshop-02> for your review
Wes Hardaker <hardaker@isi.edu> Mon, 09 October 2023 22:12 UTC
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From: Wes Hardaker <hardaker@isi.edu>
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Subject: Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9490 <draft-iab-m-ten-workshop-02> for your review
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> > > > I believe consensus should be left set to “true”. This document has > consensus of the IAB as a report of what occurred at the workshop. > Whoops; I see Tommy and I disagree. Given the discussion about whether or not there was community consensus about even the contents, and that it's really just a report about what was said/happened in the workshop I'll stand by my thought that there isn't documented consensus in the document itself, but I do see your point. Our (the IAB's) consensus was to publish it, not on the contents really (IMHO). We should chat :-) > > > > > 3) <!--[rfced] Section 2.2.1. Please let us know how we can clarify the > following > > sentence. Is the collaboration between the intermediary services or the > > support they provide? > > > > Original: > > Instead of encrypted communication between only two ends and passive > > observation by all on-path elements, intermediate ays could be > > trusted parties with limited information for the purposes of > > collaboration between in-network intermediary services' support. > > --> > > I suggest saying the following (the other authors should check): > > Instead of encrypting communication between only two ends with passive > observation by all on-path elements, intermediate relays could be > introduced as trusted parties that get to see limited information for the > purpose of collaboration between in-network intermediary services. > that's fine with me. > > How about: > > These collaborative solutions may be > the best compromise to resolve the the tension between privacy and > protection-based services [PAULY]. Ah whoops, I should have read this first. I think Tommy's text is fine, but my point of inserting a double services ("between privacy services and protection-based services") was to be clear. But that should certainly be Tommy's call since he's the PAULY in the sentence :-) > > > > > > 7) <!--[rfced] Section 3. In the following sentence, it is not clear > what kind > > of technologies the operators are being asked to allow into their > > environments. In addition, is the phrase "environment requirements" > > correct? Please let us know how to clarify this sentence. > > > > Original: > > * There is an unanswered question of whether or not network > > operators be willing to participate and allow technologies into > > their environment requirements in exchange for technologies that > > prove their clients are being good net-citizens. > > --> > > I’ll ask Wes to help answer this one, as I believed he had written that > section. > Answered in the other mail > > For consistency, it might be best to have all of the references be to > GitHub? > We agree! > > > > > 12) <!--[rfced] Appendix A.2. The following paper does not have a > reference. > > Would you like to add one? > > > > Wes Hardaker. "Network Flow Management by Probability." > > --> > > Wes? > Fixed in my last message. > > > > > > 13) <!--[rfced] Appendix B. > > a) The list of participants includes a duplication: "Michael Ackermann" > and > > "Mike Ackermann". Which should be used? > > b) While we understand that some participants may wish to provide only > partial > > names, is "Qiufang" actually "Qiufang Ma"? > > > > Please review the participant list and let us know if any updates are > needed. > > --> > > Since Mike Ackermann lists himself as “Mike” on the paper, we can probably > use that. > And yes, Qiufang is Qiufang Ma. > We agree again! > 14) <!--[rfced] FYI, we have removed the Acknowledgments section because > it was > > empty. Please let us know if any further updates are necessary. > > --> > > Thank you, that should be fine. > Tommy: any problems with adding a note about the last call comments we got from Eliot and Arnaud? They caused changes, so they seem appropriate. > > 15) <!--[rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the > online Style Guide > > < > https://urldefense.us/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.rfc-2Deditor.org_styleguide_part2_-23inclusive-5Flanguage&d=DwIFaQ&c=qzHnJIRvjI6L-clJH8JwLQvf_Iq43fzikf6aoxZgMb8&r=0c5g_jBisMd0Mvrv260WjCsDo_lphr-fsVao5L9S4DI&m=aEvW67XF5u1jpwXCNHC1PvZUL5gXbCMLU7KOBO9hC8aTZF_A6-_kwr-9VGWASrYk&s=EAIgKlFVgOm-xa2Cdd33SSSPB3MCpTQfwPl_9-QUHsc&e= > > and let us know > > if any changes are needed. > > > > Please consider whether "tradition" should be updated for clarity. > While the NIST website > > < > https://urldefense.us/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.nist.gov_nist-2Dresearch-2Dlibrary_nist-2Dtechnical-2Dseries-2Dpublications-2Dauthor-2Dinstructions-23table1&d=DwIFaQ&c=qzHnJIRvjI6L-clJH8JwLQvf_Iq43fzikf6aoxZgMb8&r=0c5g_jBisMd0Mvrv260WjCsDo_lphr-fsVao5L9S4DI&m=aEvW67XF5u1jpwXCNHC1PvZUL5gXbCMLU7KOBO9hC8aTZF_A6-_kwr-9VGWASrYk&s=vTaIjP8mdb9u7XXOEdmwhon73OCnP_ynNSXEF55y6pQ&e= > > > > indicates that this term is potentially biased, it is also ambiguous. > > "Tradition" is a subjective term, as it is not the same for everyone. > > --> > > Since this refers to a “tradition” in network management, I personally > think this use is appropriate. > I think my suggested changes reflect the point behind the original text while replacing the confusion for non-English speakers about the term. -- Wes Hardaker USC/ISI
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- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9490 <draft-iab-m-… Tommy Pauly
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9490 <draft-iab-m-… Jean Mahoney
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9490 <draft-… Tommy Pauly
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9490 <draft-… Wes Hardaker
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9490 <draft-… Wes Hardaker
- [auth48] [IAB Chair] Re: [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be … Jean Mahoney
- Re: [auth48] [IAB Chair] Re: [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to… Wes Hardaker
- Re: [auth48] [IAB Chair] Re: [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to… Jean Mahoney
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] [IAB Chair] Re: AUTH48: RFC-to… Tommy Pauly
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9490 <draft-… Wes Hardaker
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] [IAB Chair] Re: AUTH48: RFC-to… Wes Hardaker
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] [IAB Chair] Re: AUTH48: RFC-to… Jean Mahoney
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] [IAB Chair] Re: AUTH48: RFC-to… Jean Mahoney
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] [IAB Chair] Re: AUTH48: RFC-to… Mallory Knodel
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] [IAB Chair] Re: AUTH48: RFC-to… Jean Mahoney
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] [IAB Chair] Re: AUTH48: RFC-to… Mirja Kuehlewind (IETF)
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] [IAB Chair] Re: AUTH48: RFC-to… Jean Mahoney
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] [IAB Chair] Re: AUTH48: RFC-to… Wes Hardaker
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- Re: [auth48] [IAB] Paper references to GitHub? [w… Jean Mahoney
- Re: [auth48] [IAB Chair] Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 94… Jean Mahoney
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] [IAB Chair] Re: AUTH48: RFC-to… Wes Hardaker
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] [IAB Chair] Re: AUTH48: RFC-to… Jean Mahoney
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] [IAB Chair] Re: AUTH48: RFC-to… Wes Hardaker
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- Re: [auth48] [IAB] [IAB Chair] Re: AUTH48: RFC-to… Wes Hardaker
- Re: [auth48] Paper references to GitHub? [was: Re… Mirja Kuehlewind (IETF)