Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9521 <draft-ietf-nvo3-bfd-geneve-13> for your review
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Subject: Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9521 <draft-ietf-nvo3-bfd-geneve-13> for your review
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Dear RFC Editor, Thanks for your efforts. Please see inline my answers to your questions and several proposed editorial changes. Original From: rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org <rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org> To: 肖敏10093570;gregimirsky@gmail.com <gregimirsky@gmail.com>;santosh.pallagatti@gmail.com <santosh.pallagatti@gmail.com>;jefftant.ietf@gmail.com <jefftant.ietf@gmail.com>;aldrin.ietf@gmail.com <aldrin.ietf@gmail.com>; Cc: rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org <rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org>;nvo3-ads@ietf.org <nvo3-ads@ietf.org>;nvo3-chairs@ietf.org <nvo3-chairs@ietf.org>;matthew.bocci@nokia.com <matthew.bocci@nokia.com>;andrew-ietf@liquid.tech <andrew-ietf@liquid.tech>;auth48archive@rfc-editor.org <auth48archive@rfc-editor.org>; Date: 2023年12月16日 01:10 Subject: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9521 <draft-ietf-nvo3-bfd-geneve-13> for your review Authors, While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. 1) <!-- [rfced] Please note that the title of the document has been updated as follows: Abbreviations have been expanded per Section 3.6 of RFC 7322 ("RFC Style Guide"). Please review. Original: BFD for Geneve Current: Bidirectional Forwarding Detection (BFD) for Generic Network Virtualization Encapsulation (Geneve) --> [XM]>>> Agreed. 2) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in the title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. --> [XM]>>> NVE, VAP, VNI. 3) <!--[rfced] For clarity, may we rephrase the run-on sentence below? Original: This document supports establishing multiple BFD sessions between the same pair of NVEs, each BFD session over a pair of VAPs residing in the same pair of NVEs, there SHOULD be a mechanism to control the maximum number of such sessions that can be active at the same time. Perhaps: This document supports establishing multiple BFD sessions between the same pair of NVEs. For each BFD session over a pair of VAPs residing in the same pair of NVEs, there SHOULD be a mechanism to control the maximum number of such sessions that can be active at the same time. --> [XM]>>> Agreed. 4) <!-- [rfced] We see a number of uses of the "/" character separating terms in this document. Please review and let us know if we should adjust any of these instances to "and/or", "and", or "or" for clarity and ease of the reader. --> [XM]>>> I don't see a need to adjust any of them. I believe it's common to say Ethernet/IP/UDP, Ethernet/IP, IP/UDP, etc. 5) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the online Style Guide <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language> and let us know if any changes are needed. Note that our script did not flag any words in particular, but this should still be reviewed as a best practice. --> [XM]>>> I don't see a need for any changes. Thank you for the reminder. [XM]>>> Besides the above answers to your questions, I propose a few editorial changes as below. Section #1OLD:For simplicity, NVE is usedNEW:For simplicity, a NVE is used Section #4OLD:TTL or Hop Limit: These MUST be set to 255NEW:TTL or Hop Limit: The TTL for IPv4 or Hop Limit for IPv6 MUST be set to 255 Section #4OLD:Geneve specification [RFC8926] depending onNEW:Geneve specification ([RFC8926]) depending on Section #4.1OLD:N-to-1 mapping between a VAP and a VNINEW:N-to-1 mapping between VAPs and VNIs Section #4.1OLD:a Your Discriminator equal to 0NEW:a Your Discriminator equals to 0 Section #5OLD:TTL or Hop Limit: These MUST be set to 255NEW:TTL or Hop Limit: The TTL for IPv4 or Hop Limit for IPv6 MUST be set to 255 Best Regards, Xiao Min Thank you. RFC Editor/kf/mf *****IMPORTANT***** Updated 2023/12/15 RFC Author(s): -------------- Instructions for Completing AUTH48 Your document has now entered AUTH48. 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