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Authors, While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. 1) <!-- [rfced] For readability, we would like to flip the order of the title. In addition, to match the 6lo Working Group's wording (see https://datatracker.ietf.org/wg/6lo/charter/), should the title be updated as follows? Please review. Note that this update would also affect terminology in the abstract. Original: IPv6 over Constrained Node Networks (6lo) Applicability & Use cases Perhaps: Applicability and Use Cases for IPv6 over Networks of Resource-constrained Nodes (6lo) --> 2) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in the title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. --> 3) <!-- [rfced] Should this list of design space dimensions be capitalized as they are in Appendix A, or may we lowecase the dimensions in Appendix A? In addition, we note that Security Level does not appear in the list in Appendix A; should it be added to match the list in section 1? Original: In addition, it considers various network design space dimensions such as deployment, network size, power source, connectivity, multi-hop communication, traffic pattern, security level, mobility, and QoS requirements (see Appendix A). Original from Appendix A: In [RFC6568], the following design space dimensions are described: Deployment, Network size, Power source, Connectivity, Multi-hop communication, Traffic pattern, Mobility, Quality of Service (QoS). --> 4) <!-- [rfced] May we expand SIG as Special Interest Group? Original: The Bluetooth SIG has also published the Internet Protocol Support Profile (IPSP). Perhaps (which matches what appears in RFC 9159): The Bluetooth Special Interest Group (Bluetooth SIG) has also published the Internet Protocol Support Profile (IPSP). --> 5) <!-- [rfced] Did you intend to include references for ISO/IEC 14443 A&B and JIS-X 6319-4? If yes, please provide us with the reference information or pointers to the reference information. Original: NFC complements many popular consumer-level wireless technologies, by utilizing the key elements in existing standards for contactless card technology (ISO/IEC 14443 A&B and JIS-X 6319-4). --> 6) <!-- [rfced] We have the following questions related to Table 2. a) Table 2 exceeds the 72-character line limit by 5 characters. We are reviewing possible ways to trim the length of the table. Please let us know if you have any suggestions. b) Please confirm that the reference to RFC 7428 is correct. We ask because we do not see mention of Z-Wave, Home Automation, L2-mesh, or L3-mesh. --> 7) <!-- [rfced] "IPv6 address" is seemingly redundant. May we update the text as follows? Original: For MAC-derived IPv6 addresses, please refer to [RFC8163] for IPv6 address mapping examples. Perhaps: For MAC-derived IPv6 addresses, refer to [RFC8163] for mapping examples. --> 8) <!-- [rfced] For clarity and ease of the reader, may we update the text as follows? Original: The 6LoWPAN node should also support [RFC8505] and use it as the default Neighbor Discovery method. Perhaps: The 6LoWPAN node should also support the registration extensions defined in [RFC8505] and use the mechanism as the default Neighbor Discovery method. --> 9) <!-- [rfced] May we update the expansion for AP-ND to match what appears in RFC 8929, which expands it as "Address-Protected Neighbor Discovery"? Original: Address Protection for 6LoWPAN Neighbor Discovery (AP-ND) [RFC8928] enables Source Address Validation [RFC6620] and protects the address ownership against impersonation attacks. --> 10) <!-- [rfced] Is "objective function" needed here? It seems redundant with the expansion of MRHOF. Original: Note that the L3 routing in Netricity uses RPL in non-storing mode with the MRHOF (Minimum Rank with Hysteresis Objective Function) objective function based on their own defined Estimated Transmission Time (ETT) metric. --> 11) <!-- [rfced] For readability, may we update "enjoys the advantage of" to "benefits from"? Or is there another way we may update? Original: Although other wired and wireless technologies are also used in Smart Grid, PLC enjoys the advantage of reliable data communication over electrical power lines that are already present, and the deployment cost can be comparable to wireless technologies. Perhaps: Although other wired and wireless technologies are also used in a smart grid, PLC benefits from reliable data communication over electrical power lines that are already present, and the deployment cost can be comparable to wireless technologies. --> 12) <!-- [rfced] We have the following questions related to references. a) Would you like to update the reference [BACnet] reference to the most recent version from 2020? Current: [BACnet] ASHRAE, "BACnet-A Data Communication Protocol for Building Automation and Control Networks (ANSI Approved)", ANSI/ ASHRAE Standard 135-2016, January 2016, <https://www.techstreet.com/ashrae/standards/ashrae- 135-2016?product_id=1918140#jumps>. b) For the specification [BTCorev4.1], would you like to update to the most recent version 5.4? Please review and let us know how/if we may update. Current: [BTCorev4.1] Bluetooth, "Core Specification Version 4.1", December 2013, <https://www.bluetooth.com/specifications/specs/ core-specification-4-1/>. c) The URL provided for [IPSP] directs to a page titled "Specifications and Documents", but there is no document named "Bluetooth Internet Protocol Support Profile Specification Version 1.0.0". We are unable to locate a document with this title. Please let us know how this entry should be updated. Original: [IPSP] Bluetooth Special Interest Group, "Bluetooth Internet Protocol Support Profile Specification Version 1.0.0", December 2014, <https://www.bluetooth.org/en- us/specification/adopted-specifications>.>. perhaps the URL should be to <https://www.bluetooth.com/specifications/specs/> or <https://www.bluetooth.com/specifications/specs/internet-protocol-support-profile-1-0/>? d) Would you like to update the provided URL for [LLCP-1.4] to the following to lead directly to the document? Original: [LLCP-1.4] NFC Forum, "NFC Logical Link Control Protocol, Version 1.4", NFC Forum Technical Specification , January 2021, <https://nfc-forum.org/build/specifications>. Perhaps: [LLCP-1.4] NFC Forum, "Logical Link Control Protocol Technical Specification", Version 1.4, December 2022, <https://nfc-forum.org/build/specifications/logical- link-control-protocol-technical-specification/>. --> 13) <!-- [rfced] Please note that we have updated this sentence as follows. Please review and let us know if any corrections are needed. Original: * Buffering requirements: Some 6lo use case may require higher data rate than the link layer technology support. Current: Buffering Requirements: Some 6lo use cases may require a higher data rate than the link- layer technology supports. --> 14) <!-- [rfced] We have the following terminology-related questions. a) We have updated the document to use "link-layer" (with a hyphen) where the terms are acting as an adjective appearing before the noun. Similarly, we have updated "constrained node" to "constrained-node" (with a hyphen). Please review and let us know if you have any concerns. b) Throughout the text, the following acronyms are missing expansions. Please review and let us know if/how we may update. We provided possible expansions the right. GPRS - General Packet Radio Service or Ground Penetrating Radar Systems ISM - Industrial, Scientific, and Medical LV PLC networks - Low-Voltage PLC networks Do instances of Low, Medium, and High Voltage need to be capitalized? c) FYI, for clarity, we added the following expansions to the provided acronyms. Please let us know of any objections. FDMA - Frequency-Division Multiplex TDMA - Time-Division Multiple Access TDD - Time-Division Duplex --> 15) <!-- [rfced] Some author comments are present in the XML. Please confirm that no updates related to these comments are outstanding. 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