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Re: [C430] RFC 9000 - Re: [IANA #1196209] Protocol Action: 'QUIC: A UDP-Based Multiplexed and Secure Transport' to Proposed Standard (draft-ietf-quic-transport-34.txt)

"Martin Thomson" <mt@lowentropy.net> Wed, 26 May 2021 01:47 UTC

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Date: Wed, 26 May 2021 11:47:02 +1000
From: Martin Thomson <mt@lowentropy.net>
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OK, Jana and I have had a chat and concluded:

1.
The three ECN counts; see ...

2.
ECN counts are only present when ...

3.
The ECN count fields are:

(We dropped the word "three" here as it is redundant.)


On Wed, May 26, 2021, at 11:34, Jana Iyengar via C430 wrote:
> Thanks for the catch, Lynne!
> 
> I agree with Martin, except for the last two corrections. There are 3 
> fields (ECT0 Count, ECT1 Count, ECN-CE Count), grouped together in the 
> text as the ECN counts. I don't think we should say ECN Counts field, 
> since that isn't actually a field... we can say "ECN counts" or "ECN 
> counts fields", but not "ECN Counts field".
> 
> > >> 2.  In Section 19.3.2:  ... ECN Counts are only present ...
> > > 
> > > Instead:
> > > The ECN Counts field is only present ...
> 
> I propose changing this to "ECN counts are"
> 
> > >> 3.  Just after Figure 27:  The three ECN Counts are: ...
> > > 
> > > Instead:
> > > The three fields in ECN Counts are: ...
> 
> I would propose here "The three ECN counts fields are: ..."
> I'm fine with "The three ECN counts are: ..." as well, but I think 
> "fields" is appropriate here.
> 
> Martin -- WDYT?
> 
> - jana
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