Re: [Gen-art] (full) review of draft-ietf-imss-fc-fcsp-mib-02.txt

Thanks for your comments.  I'm impressed that you were still awake
enough to find typos on page 183 :-), and if they can all be handled by
the RFC Editor, that's better for me.  (I expect others to "abuse" the
Queen's English, but it's a personal pain if I have to do so myself :-).

Keith.

> I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
> reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
> http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
> 
> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
> you may receive.
> 
> Document: draft-ietf-imss-fc-fcsp-mib-02.txt
> Reviewer: Francis Dupont
> Review Date: 2008-06-19
> IETF LC End Date: 2008-06-19
> IESG Telechat date: unknown
> 
> Summary: Ready
> 
> Comments: I've found only a low number of editorial (i.e., to be handled
> by the RFC Editor) problems (spelling errors, typos, raw abbrevs, ...):
> (I've put a '?' after suggestions/questionable items, MIB names are for
>  their descriptions)
> 
>  - ToC page 2: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
>   (i.e., US spelling, same in 7 page 232)
> 
>  - 1 page 3: IETF's -> IETF? (same in t11FcTcMIB page 27,
>   t11FcSpAuthenticationMIB page 43, t11FcSpZoningMIB page 64,
>   t11FcSpPolicyMIB page 77, t11FcSpSaMIB page 176, 7 page 232)
> 
>  - 3.2 page 11: HBAs -> Host Bus Adapters
>   (usually abbrevs, including this one, should be introduced by it is
>    the only use)
> 
>  - 3.4.7 page 17: introduce abbrevs: SSB (Server Session Begin), SSE
>   (Server Session End), SW_ILS (Switch Fabric Internal Link Services);
>   or extend them when they are used once in the introduction part:
>   EACA -> Enhanced Acquire Change Authorization Request, ERCA ->
>   Enhanced Release Change Authorization, SFC -> Stage Fabric Configuration
> 
>  - 4.9 page 25: the the -> the (and in t11FcSpAuRejDirection page 58,
>   don't believe you can get >240 pages without a typo :-)
> 
>  - 5 page 26: focussed -> focused?
> 
>  - t11FcSpAuIfStatOutAcceptedMsgs page 55: neighbouring -> neighboring?
>  
>  - t11FcSpPoSwMembAuthBehaviour page 89: neighbour -> neighbor?
>   (same in t11FcSpPoNaSwMembAuthBehaviour page 129
> 
>  - t11FcSpPoSwConnAllowedNameType page 99: portname -> portName
> 
>  - t11FcSpSaIfTerminateAllSas page 183: outsanding -> outstanding
> 
> Regards
> 
> Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
> 

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