Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9534 <draft-ietf-ippm-stamp-on-lag-06> for your review

["Rakesh Gandhi (rgandhi)" <[e-mail]>]

Thanks Jean and authors for the review and edits.

One minor comment:
Could you please update my affiliate to - Cisco Systems, Inc.

Thanks,
Rakesh



From: Jean Mahoney <[e-mail]>
Date: Wednesday, January 24, 2024 at 10:21 AM
To: [e-mail] <[e-mail]>, Tianran Zhou <[e-mail]>, Greg Mirsky <[e-mail]>, [e-mail] <[e-mail]>
Cc: [e-mail] <[e-mail]>, Rakesh Gandhi (rgandhi) <[e-mail]>, [e-mail] <[e-mail]>, IPPM Chairs <[e-mail]>, marcus.ihlar <[e-mail]>, Martin Duke <[e-mail]>, [e-mail] <[e-mail]>, Zhukeyi (Kaiyin, Enterprise NE) <[e-mail]>
Subject: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9534 <draft-ietf-ippm-stamp-on-lag-06> for your review
Zhenqiang, Greg, Tianran,

Thank you for your quick responses! We have updated the document based
on your feedback:

    https://www.rfc-editor.org/in-notes/authors/rfc9534-lastrfcdiff.html

Zhenqiang, we have noted your approval on the AUTH48 status page:

    https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9534

The files have been posted here:
    https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9534.txt
    https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9534.pdf
    https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9534.html
    https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9534.xml
    https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9534-diff.html (all changes)
    https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9534-rfcdiff.html (all changes
side by side)
    https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9534-auth48diff.html
    https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9534-alt-diff.html

We will await further word from you and your coauthors regarding other
AUTH48 changes and/or approval.

Best regards,
RFC Editor/jm


On 1/23/24 10:13 PM, [e-mail] wrote:
> Hello Editor and coauthors,
>
> I have no objection on Greg's and Tianran's suggestion.
>
> ------------------------------------------------------------------------
> Best Regards,
> Zhenqiang Li
> China Mobile
> [e-mail]
>
>     *From:* Tianran Zhou <mailto:[e-mail]>
>     *Date:* 2024-01-24 11:08
>     *To:* Greg Mirsky <mailto:[e-mail]>;
>     [e-mail] <mailto:[e-mail]>
>     *CC:* [e-mail] <mailto:[e-mail]>;
>     [e-mail] <mailto:[e-mail]>; [e-mail]
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>     <mailto:[e-mail]>; [e-mail]
>     <mailto:[e-mail]>; [e-mail]
>     <mailto:[e-mail]>; Zhukeyi(Kaiyin,Datacom
>     Standard&Patent) <mailto:[e-mail]>
>     *Subject:* RE: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9534
>     <draft-ietf-ippm-stamp-on-lag-06> for your review
>
>     Hi Editor and Greg,
>
>     I prefer Greg’s change on this.
>
>     GIM>> Thank you for the question and proposed update. I agree that
>     the first occurence of "tuple" must be singular. The second, as I
>     think of how it works, is about modifying some elements of the
>     5-tuple. I would propose the following update:
>
>     OLD TEXT:
>
>         One STAMP test session over the LAG can measure the performance of a
>         member link with fixed five tuples, or it can measure an average of
>         some or all member links of the LAG by varying the five tuples.
>
>     NEW TEXT:
>
>         A STAMP test session over the LAG can be used to measure the
>     performance of a
>
>         member link using specially-constructed 5-tuple. The session can
>     be used to measure an average of
>
>         some or all member links of the LAG by varying one or more
>     elements  of that 5-tuple.
>
>     Cheers,
>
>     Tianran
>
>     *From:*Greg Mirsky [mailto:[e-mail]]
>     *Sent:* Wednesday, January 24, 2024 10:53 AM
>     *To:* [e-mail]
>     *Cc:* [e-mail]; Tianran Zhou
>     <[e-mail]>; [e-mail]; [e-mail];
>     [e-mail]; [e-mail]; [e-mail];
>     [e-mail]; [e-mail]
>     *Subject:* Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9534
>     <draft-ietf-ippm-stamp-on-lag-06> for your review
>
>     Dear RFC Editor,
>
>     thank you for your thoughtful consideration of the document and
>     helpful suggestions to improve it. Please find my responses to your
>     questions below tagged by GIM>>. Please let me know if there are any
>     further questions or actions I should take.
>
>     Regards,
>
>     Greg
>
>     On Tue, Jan 23, 2024 at 10:44 AM <[e-mail]
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>         Authors,
>
>         While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as
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>         1) <!-- [rfced] We have updated the title of the document by
>         expanding LAG. Please let us know if any changes are necessary.
>
>         Original:
>           Simple Two-Way Active Measurement Protocol Extensions for
>         Performance
>                                     Measurement on LAG
>
>         Current:
>           Simple Two-Way Active Measurement Protocol Extensions for
>         Performance
>                             Measurement on a Link Aggregation Group
>
>     GIM>> I agree with the proposed text.
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>         "tuple" in the sentence below:
>
>         Current:
>
>             One STAMP test session over the LAG can measure the
>         performance of a
>             member link with fixed five tuples, or it can measure an
>         average of
>             some or all member links of the LAG by varying the five tuples.
>
>         Perhaps (updating "five tuple" to "5-tuple", which is more
>         commonly used; making the first use of "tuple" singular; and
>         changing "varying the five tuples" to "specifying their 5-tuples"):
>
>             One STAMP test session over the LAG can measure the
>         performance of a
>             member link using its fixed 5-tuple, or it can measure an
>         average of
>             some or all member links of the LAG by specifying their
>         5-tuples.
>
>     GIM>> Thank you for the question and proposed update. I agree that
>     the first occurence of "tuple" must be singular. The second, as I
>     think of how it works, is about modifying some elements of the
>     5-tuple. I would propose the following update:
>
>     OLD TEXT:
>
>         One STAMP test session over the LAG can measure the performance of a
>         member link with fixed five tuples, or it can measure an average of
>         some or all member links of the LAG by varying the five tuples.
>
>     NEW TEXT:
>
>         A STAMP test session over the LAG can be used to measure the
>     performance of a
>
>         member link using specially-constructed 5-tuple. The session can
>     be used to measure an average of
>
>         some or all member links of the LAG by varying one or more
>     elements  of that 5-tuple.
>
>         -->
>
>
>         4) <!-- [rfced] [IEEE802.1AX] 802.1AX-2008 has been superseded
>         by 802.1AX-2014. Would you like to update the reference?
>
>         Current:
>             [IEEE802.1AX]
>                        IEEE, "IEEE Standard for Local and metropolitan area
>                        networks - Link Aggregation", IEEE Std 802.1AX-2008,
>                        DOI 10.1109/IEEESTD.2008.4668665, November 2008,
>                        <https://ieeexplore.ieee.org/document/4668665
>         <https://ieeexplore.ieee.org/document/4668665>>.
>
>     GIM>> Yes, please update the reference to the latest.
>
>         -->
>
>
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>         and let us know if any changes are needed.
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>         Note that our script did not flag any words in particular, but
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>
>     GIM>> I don't find any updates
>
>         -->
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>     GIM>> All expansions are correct.
>
>         -->
>
>
>         Thank you.
>
>         RFC Editor/jm
>
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>         RFC9534 (draft-ietf-ippm-stamp-on-lag-06)
>
>         Title            : Simple Two-Way Active Measurement Protocol
>         Extensions for Performance Measurement on LAG
>         Author(s)        : Z. Li, T. Zhou, J. Guo, G. Mirsky, R. Gandhi
>         WG Chair(s)      : Marcus Ihlar, Tommy Pauly
>         Area Director(s) : Martin Duke, Zaheduzzaman Sarker
>