Re: [auth48] [C336] [AD] RE: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9299 <draft-ietf-lisp-introduction-15> for your review

[Luigi Iannone <[e-mail]>]

Hi,

Thanks Albert.

Just as a very minor suggestions:


> On 14 Sep 2022, at 14:58, Albert Cabellos <[e-mail]> wrote:
> 
> 
> 4) <!-- [rfced] There are a couple of places that refer to "at the time of 
> this writing".  Please review and let us know if any updates are desired, as 
> this document was approved in 2015.  
> 
> Section 3.2 Original: 
>    EIDs are IPv4 or IPv6
>    addresses that uniquely identify communication end-hosts and are
>    assigned and configured by the same mechanisms that exist at the time
>    of this writing.
> 
> Section 4.3 Original:
>    At the time of this writing LISP does not specify a mechanism to
>    achieve ETR synchronization.
> -->
> 
> 
> No updates are required. 

This may lead confusion with the publication date.
What is we add: “… time of this writing (Editor’s Note: 2015)…”

What do you think?
> 26) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the online 
> Style Guide <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language>> 
> and let us know if any changes are needed.  For example, please consider 
> whether "natively" or "native" should be updated.
> -->
> 
> 
> 
> I have reviewed the document and I have not identified any instance where a change is required.

May be:

Replace the only occurrence of “natively” with “as-is”

Replace the only occurrence of “native” with “original”

What do you think?

> 
> Thanks for the outstanding review, I am really impressed how the readability and correctness of the document has improved. 
> 

+1

Thanks

L.



> Albert