Re: [Detnet] WG Last Call: draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-oam-08

Hi Tianran,
thank you for your comments and thoughtful consideration of the updates.
Will use your suggested editorial change in the next update of the draft.

Best regards,
Greg

On Fri, Nov 11, 2022 at 9:53 AM Tianran Zhou <zhoutianran@huawei.com> wrote:

> Hi Grey,
>
> Thanks very much for taking my suggestion.
>
> I am comfortable with all the changes.
>
>
>
> 3. “Channel Type - contains the value of DetNet Associated Channel Type.”
> This is confusing to me at first sight. It seem you are going to define a
> new channel type. I struggled a while before I understand finally. So it
> would be nice to revise the text.
>
> GIM>> I greatly appreciate your suggestions to clarify the definition of
> the Channel Type field. Could you kindly propose the clarification making
> it clearer?
>
>
>
> ZTR> I am not sure. Maybe “contains -> reuses” could be better? I think in
> somewhere you would better describe something like, the proposed fields are
> attached to existing ACHs as shown in figure *.
>
>
>
> Best,
>
> Tianran
>
>
>
> *发件人:* Greg Mirsky [mailto:gregimirsky@gmail.com]
> *发送时间:* 2022年11月9日 22:24
> *收件人:* Tianran Zhou <zhoutianran@huawei.com>
> *抄送:* Janos Farkas <Janos.Farkas@ericsson.com>; detnet@ietf.org
> *主题:* Re: [Detnet] WG Last Call: draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-oam-08
>
>
>
> Hi Tianran,
>
> I've uploaded the -09 version of the draft that includes clarifications of
> fields in the d-ACH as proposed in the text below. I greatly appreciate
> your feedback and comments about the updates and my responses to your
> questions.
>
>
>
> Kind regards,
>
> Greg
>
>
>
> On Fri, Oct 21, 2022 at 12:15 AM Greg Mirsky <gregimirsky@gmail.com>
> wrote:
>
> Hi Tianran,
>
> thank you for your questions and comments. Please find responses in-lined
> below tagged with GIM>>. Attached are the diff and a copy of the working
> version of the draft.
>
>
>
> Regards,
>
> Greg
>
>
>
> On Wed, Oct 12, 2022 at 8:38 PM Tianran Zhou <zhoutianran=
> 40huawei.com@dmarc.ietf.org> wrote:
>
> Hi Authors,
>
>
>
> I read this draft and find it’s useful.
>
> I have several suggestions as follows.
>
> 1. I am not clear why existing PW OAM cannot be used directly for DetNet.
> I think there will be text to describe why 4 bytes are added, and also why
> each field, like node id.
>
> GIM>> As described in RFC 8655, DetNet headers may be needed to support
> DetNet service and forwarding sub-layers. Additional fields are added in
> support of OAM at the DetNet service sub-layer. Furthermore, we can note
> that a DetNet PW is more like an MS-PW, where DetNet service sub-layer
> functions are at the “segment” endpoints. However, DetNet service sub-layer
> functions operate per packet level (not per segment level). These
> per-packet level characteristics of PREOF require additional fields for
> proper OAM packet processing. Would the following update make it clearer:
>
> OLD TEXT:
>
>    DetNet OAM, like PW OAM, uses PW Associated Channel Header defined in
>
>    [RFC4385].  Encapsulation of a DetNet MPLS [RFC8964] active OAM
>
>    packet is shown in Figure 3.
>
> NEW TEXT:
>
>    DetNet OAM, like PW OAM, uses PW Associated Channel Header defined in
>
>    [RFC4385].  At the same time, a DetNet PW can be viewed as a Multi-
>
>    Segment PW, where DetNet service sub-layer functions are at the
>
>    segment endpoints.  However, DetNet service sub-layer functions
>
>    operate per packet level (not per segment level).  These per-packet
>
>    level characteristics of PREOF require additional fields for proper
>
>    OAM packet processing.  Encapsulation of a DetNet MPLS [RFC8964]
>
>    active OAM packet is shown in Figure 3.
>
>
>
> The Node ID field is described in the draft as follows:
>
>
>
>       Node ID - is an unsigned 20 bits-long field.  The value of the
>
>       Node ID field identifies the DetNet node that originated the
>
>       packet.  Methods of distributing Node ID are outside the scope of
>
>       this specification.
>
>
>
> 2. There is no description for Level,  Flags, and Session fields on the
> meaning. I do not know how to use and how to extend.
>
> GIM>> Thank you for pointing out too minimalistic descriptions.  The
> following text is updated in the working version:
>
> OLD TEXT:
>
>       Level - is a 3-bit field.
>
> NEW TEXT:
>
>       Level - is a 3-bit field.  Level field is used to cope with the
>
>       "all active path forwarding" characteristics of the PREOF concept.
>
>       A hierarchical relationship between OAM domains can be created
>
>       using the Level field value.
>
> And another update:
>
> OLD TEXT:
>
>       Session ID is a four-bits field.
>
> NEW TEXT:
>
>       Session ID - is a 4-bit field.  Session field is used to distinguish
>
>       OAM sessions originated from the same node (a given Maintenance
>
>       End Point may have multiple simultaneously active OAM sessions).
>
>
>
> 3. “Channel Type - contains the value of DetNet Associated Channel Type.”
> This is confusing to me at first sight. It seem you are going to define a
> new channel type. I struggled a while before I understand finally. So it
> would be nice to revise the text.
>
> GIM>> I greatly appreciate your suggestions to clarify the definition of
> the Channel Type field. Could you kindly propose the clarification making
> it clearer?
>
> 4. You mentioned hybrid OAM a little bit in section 4. IMHO, it has
> nothing to do with this draft, including the solution, the format. So, I
> would suggest to clean up the hybrid OAM texts in this doc.
>
> GIM>> We've discussed and agreed with your suggestion. Removed the section
> in the working version.
>
>
>
> Best,
>
> Tianran
>
>
>
> *From:* detnet [mailto:detnet-bounces@ietf.org] *On Behalf Of *Janos
> Farkas
> *Sent:* Tuesday, October 11, 2022 10:23 PM
> *To:* detnet@ietf.org
> *Subject:* [Detnet] WG Last Call: draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-oam-08
>
>
>
> All,
>
>
>
> This starts working group last call on
>
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-oam/
>
>
>
> The working group last call ends on October 25th.
>
> Please send your comments to the working group mailing list.
>
>
>
> No IPR has been disclosed against this document.
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>
> Positive comments, e.g., "I've reviewed this document and believe it is
> ready for publication", are welcome!
>
> This is useful and important, even from authors.
>
>
>
> Thank you,
>
> János (DetNet Co-Chair & doc Shepherd)
>
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