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Greg Mirsky <gregimirsky@gmail.com> Wed, 12 October 2022 23:26 UTC

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Subject: Re: [Detnet] WG Last Call: draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-oam-08
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Hi Ethan,
thank you for your thorough review and very helpful suggestions.  I've
applied all updates to the working version of the draft with a small
modification. I hope that these modifications are acceptable. Please check
the attached diff that highlights all updates suggested by Andy and you.

Best regards,
Greg

On Wed, Oct 12, 2022 at 3:15 PM Ethan Grossman <ethan=
40ieee.org@dmarc.ietf.org> wrote:

> I have read the document and though I can't comment on the technical
> details of OAM or MPLS I find the document is basically readable and
> understandable. I have a few minor comments on grammar and spelling - I
> suppose such things can be left to Editorial (and at a certain point I
> figured I would stop doing this and let Editorial handle it) but you'll
> have to deal with them eventually. Below are the first few that I noticed.
> Ethan.
> ===============
> Was: "This document defines format and use principals of the
> Deterministic Network (DetNet)"
> Spelling - should be "...use principles..."
>
> Was "Operations, Administration and Maintenance (OAM) protocols are used
>    to detect, localize defects in the network, and monitor network
>    performance."
> Grammar: How about "Operations, Administration and Maintenance (OAM)
> protocols are used
>    to detect and localize defects in the network, and to monitor network
>    performance."
>
> Was: "Some OAM functions, e.g., failure detection, work in the network
> proactively, while others, e.g., defect localization,
>    usually performed on-demand."
> Grammar, maybe "Some OAM functions (e.g., failure detection) are usually
> performed proactively in the network, while others (e.g., defect
> localization) are usually performed on demand."
>
> Was "format and use principals"
> Spelling: "principles"
>
> Was: "Janos Farcas"
> Spelling "Farkas"
> =============
>
>
> On Tue, Oct 11, 2022 at 7:22 AM Janos Farkas <Janos.Farkas=
> 40ericsson.com@dmarc.ietf.org> wrote:
>
>> All,
>>
>>
>>
>> This starts working group last call on
>>
>> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-oam/
>>
>>
>>
>> The working group last call ends on October 25th.
>>
>> Please send your comments to the working group mailing list.
>>
>>
>>
>> No IPR has been disclosed against this document.
>>
>>
>>
>> Positive comments, e.g., "I've reviewed this document and believe it is
>> ready for publication", are welcome!
>>
>> This is useful and important, even from authors.
>>
>>
>>
>> Thank you,
>>
>> János (DetNet Co-Chair & doc Shepherd)
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