Re: [Detnet] WG Last Call: draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-oam-08

Hi Greg, do you want me to go through the rest of the (updated) doc at this
level of grammatical detail, or do you want to leave it to Editorial?
Ethan.

On Wed, Oct 12, 2022 at 4:27 PM Greg Mirsky <gregimirsky@gmail.com> wrote:

> Hi Ethan,
> thank you for your thorough review and very helpful suggestions.  I've
> applied all updates to the working version of the draft with a small
> modification. I hope that these modifications are acceptable. Please check
> the attached diff that highlights all updates suggested by Andy and you.
>
> Best regards,
> Greg
>
> On Wed, Oct 12, 2022 at 3:15 PM Ethan Grossman <ethan=
> 40ieee.org@dmarc.ietf.org> wrote:
>
>> I have read the document and though I can't comment on the technical
>> details of OAM or MPLS I find the document is basically readable and
>> understandable. I have a few minor comments on grammar and spelling - I
>> suppose such things can be left to Editorial (and at a certain point I
>> figured I would stop doing this and let Editorial handle it) but you'll
>> have to deal with them eventually. Below are the first few that I noticed.
>> Ethan.
>> ===============
>> Was: "This document defines format and use principals of the
>> Deterministic Network (DetNet)"
>> Spelling - should be "...use principles..."
>>
>> Was "Operations, Administration and Maintenance (OAM) protocols are used
>>    to detect, localize defects in the network, and monitor network
>>    performance."
>> Grammar: How about "Operations, Administration and Maintenance (OAM)
>> protocols are used
>>    to detect and localize defects in the network, and to monitor network
>>    performance."
>>
>> Was: "Some OAM functions, e.g., failure detection, work in the network
>> proactively, while others, e.g., defect localization,
>>    usually performed on-demand."
>> Grammar, maybe "Some OAM functions (e.g., failure detection) are usually
>> performed proactively in the network, while others (e.g., defect
>> localization) are usually performed on demand."
>>
>> Was "format and use principals"
>> Spelling: "principles"
>>
>> Was: "Janos Farcas"
>> Spelling "Farkas"
>> =============
>>
>>
>> On Tue, Oct 11, 2022 at 7:22 AM Janos Farkas <Janos.Farkas=
>> 40ericsson.com@dmarc.ietf.org> wrote:
>>
>>> All,
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> This starts working group last call on
>>>
>>> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-oam/
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> The working group last call ends on October 25th.
>>>
>>> Please send your comments to the working group mailing list.
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>>>
>>>
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>>>
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