Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-mcast-mib-04.txt

Glenn Mansfield Keeni <glenn@cysols.com> Sun, 17 July 2016 14:45 UTC

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Jeffrey and team,
      Any progress on the MIB matters
(draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-mcast-mib-05.txt,
  draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-mib-03.txt )?

Glenn
On 2016/06/07 18:39, Glenn Mansfield Keeni wrote:
> Hi Jeffrey,
>    Thanks for the good work on draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-mcast-mib
> document. It took me some time to do this review. But now here it
> is. A (near complete) review of
> draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-mcast-mib-04.txt is attached. Hope this helps.
>    I understand that the Security Considerations section is TBD.
>
>    Glenn
>
> On 2016/05/19 4:48, Jeffrey (Zhaohui) Zhang wrote:
>> Hi Glenn,
>>
>>> -----Original Message-----
>>> From: Glenn Mansfield Keeni [mailto:glenn@cysols.com]
>>> Sent: Sunday, May 08, 2016 11:02 AM
>>> To: Jeffrey (Zhaohui) Zhang <zzhang@juniper.net>; Benoit Claise
>>> <bclaise@cisco.com>; EXT - thomas.morin@orange.com
>>> <thomas.morin@orange.com>
>>> Cc: Mach Chen <mach.chen@huawei.com>; ops-ads@ietf.org; Martin Vigoureux
>>> <martin.vigoureux@nokia.com>; bess@ietf.org; mib-doctors@ietf.org
>>> Subject: Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-mcast-mib-
>>> 02.txt
>>>
>>> Jeffrey,
>>>  > Thanks for your comments. I've addressed most of your comments
>>>  > in the new revision:
>>> Thanks for your cooperation. I will need at least one more revision
>>> with the following comments/recommendations addressed before I will
>>> be able to complete the detailed review. In the following the numbers
>>> refer to the issue numbers in the initial review. The issues that are
>>> addressed and closed are not listed. For brevity, the issue
>>> descriptions have been trimmed. In case of doubts please look at the
>>> response mail appended below.
>>> Hope this helps.
>>
>> Thanks for your detailed comments/suggestions. I posted a new revision
>> with the following issues addressed.
>>
>> URL:
>> https://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-mcast-mib-04.txt
>>
>> Status:
>> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-mcast-mib/
>> Htmlized:
>> https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-mcast-mib-04
>> Diff:
>> https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-mcast-mib-04
>>
>> Please see some notes below.
>>
>>>
>>> Glenn
>>>
>>> -------------------------------------------------------------------
>>>
>>> Comments:
>>>
>>> 1.1
>>>  >  I had thought this would be standard/obvious for all MIB objects -
>>> We will comeback to this time and again, whereever possible make
>>> matters explicit and clear. That will help.
>>>  >  Is it enough to say something similar? For example:
>>>  >          In particular, it describes common managed objects used
>>>  >          to configure and/or monitor both L2 and L3 VPN Multicast.
>>> That is better.
>>
>> I take it that this is already closed in -03 revision.
>>
>>>
>>> 2.2
>>>  >  Having said that, I'll explain PMSI a bit further.
>>> PMSI explanation is good.
>>> Please use the same style/format for I-PMSI and S-PMSI.
>>
>> I think -03 revision already use the same style/format for I-PMSI and
>> S-PMSI?
>>
>>>
>>> 2.3
>>>  >  No difference. I was using "Layer 3" or "L3" but it was pointed out
>>>  > that the layer 3 VPN is often referred to IP VPN in other RFCs and I
>>>  > was advised to change it accordingly. Looks like I did not change all
>>>  > the cases.
>>>  >  On the other hand, I noticed that RFC 4382 does use "Layer 3 VPN" so
>>>  > I'll change it back.
>>> No problems. just make sure that the same expression/notation is used
>>> uniformly.
>>
>> I take it that this is also addressed in -03 already.
>>
>>> 3.
>>>  >  > > 3.  Summary of MIB Module.
>>>  >  > >     An overview of the L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB will be good- the
>>>  >  > >     structure of the MIB, short descriptions of the table(s)
>>>  >  > >     including usage of the table(s) for management and/or by
>>>  >  > >     other MIB(s).
>>>  >
>>>  >  I had that, but have added one sentence about the only table.
>>> A sentence or two about the textual convention will be good.
>>
>> Added in -04.
>>
>>>  >  > > 4. MIB syntax checking:
>>>  >  > >    smilint -s -e -l 5 mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB
>>> 2>L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB.txt
>>>  >
>>>  >  I used simpleweb's validation tool but looks like I did not use the
>>>  > strictest level of validation. I've now fixed the following issues
>>> and
>>>  > verified.
>>> Good.
>>> 5.
>>>  >  > >
>>>  >  > > 5. REFERENCE clauses: Please use REFERENCE clauses liberally.
>>>  >  > >    Wherever possible, provide references for objects used in
>>>  >  > >    the MIB. The references will point to specific sections/
>>>  >  > >    sub-sections of the RFCs defining the protocol for which the
>>>  >  > >    MIB is being designed. It will greatly improve the
>>> readability
>>>  >  > >    of the document.
>>>  >
>>>  >  Added.
>>> I would recommend using the REFERENCE clause as in rfs4382 and
>>> improve on it.
>>> Specifically, instead of keeping the reference in the DESCRIPTION
>>> clause move it to a separate REFERENCE clause. The addition of the
>>> section number is an improvement. It is friendlier to the reader.
>>> Note. Same comment for other OBJECTs too.
>>
>> Oh I missed that. All fixed.
>>
>>> 7.1
>>>  >  > > 7.1 CONTACT-INFO
>>>  >  > >     Following the conventions (including indentation style) will
>>>  >  > >     improve the readability. (e.g. RFC4382, RFC5132).
>>>  >  > >     Will be good if it does not overflow into the next page.
>>>  >
>>>  >  Fixed.
>>> The format is OK. The Postal address etc., need not have been
>>> deleted. Please put the complete contact information as in the
>>> Author's Address. (RFC 2578 section 5.7 gives a usage example).
>>
>> Fixed.
>>
>>> 7.3
>>>  >  I kept "experimental 99" so that I could continue to use mib tools
>>>  > to validate; but I added notes for the editor to replace them as you
>>>  > indicated.
>>> Use of "experimental 99" is not recommended.
>>
>> Do you mean 99 is not a good number? What about 9999? As I explained,
>> I kept it so that we can use mib tools to validate, and I've added
>> detailed notes for the editor.
>>
>>> 8
>>>  >  > > 8. Specific MO and TC related comments.
>>>  >  Are spaces allowed? I don't know so I used hyphen. For now I replace
>>>  > with things like rsvpP2mp.
>>> Yes. Camelcase is an allowed practice. SMI does not mind it.
>>
>> Ok this is closed already then.
>>
>>> 8.2
>>>  >  > > 8.2   l2L3VpnMcastPmsiTunnelAttributeFlags OBJECT-TYPE
>>>  >  The intent is to simply return the octet value of the flags
>>>  > field, w/o listing individual bits like "Leaf Information Required".
>>>  > More bits could be defined in the future but the MIB would not
>>> change.
>>>  >
>>>  >  Is that OK?
>>> As far as possible, the meaning of the objects must be made clear.
>>> That will help implementors and operators- users of the MIB.
>>
>> I added the definition for one existing bit and reference to the IANA
>> registry being created for this flag field.
>>
>>>
>>> 8.3
>>>  >  > > 8.3   l2L3VpnMcastPmsiTunnelAttributeId OBJECT-TYPE
>>>  >  Depending on the tunnel type, there could be different sizes.
>>>  > Future tunnel types could have other sizes that not specified
>>>  > today. I was thinking to just give a size
>>>  > tPmsiTunnelAttributeId OBJECT-TYPE range so that it is flexible.
>>>  > Is that ok?
>>> I see that you have changed the size upper limit to 50.
>>> If the size varies continuously from 0 to 50 the above description
>>> is correct.
>>> Please confirm, explain and cite appropriate reference. If the size
>>> may change in the future that must be stated too.
>>
>> I changed to discrete sizes for currently defined tunnel types.
>>
>>>
>>> 8.4
>>>  >  > > 8.4  l2L3VpnMcastPmsiTunnelIf OBJECT-TYPE
>>>  >  > >         SYNTAX        RowPointer
>>>  >  > >         MAX-ACCESS    read-only
>>>  >  > >         STATUS        current
>>>  >  > >         DESCRIPTION
>>>  >  > >             "If the tunnel has a corresponding interface,
>>>  >  > >              this is the row pointer to the ifName table."
>>>  >  > >      o DESCRIPTION looks incorrect. Please fix it. Do you
>>>  >  > >        want to say this object points to the corresponding
>>>  >  > >        row in the ifTable?
>>>  >
>>>  >  Yes. Fixed.
>>> Not quite.
>>>     What is ifName table ? ifName is a columnar object in the ifXTable.
>>>     Is l2L3VpnMcastPmsiTunnelIf a pointer to the corresponding row in
>>> the
>>>     ifXTable table ? Please fix accordingly.
>>
>> You're right. Fixed.
>>
>>>
>>> 9.
>>>  >  > > 9. The Security Considerations section does not follow
>>>  >  > >    the Security Guidelines for IETF MIB Modules
>>>  >  > >    http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/ops/trac/wiki/mib-security.
>>>  >  > >    Please fix.
>>>  >
>>>  >  I was really hoping that it would not have to be that
>>>  > tedious. SNMP/MIB secur
>>> ity should be no different from the
>>>  > CLI security - once you secure the infrastructure
>>>  > then what's more to do?
>>>  >
>>>  >  I'll need more time to work on this. Let me try to address
>>>  > the issues in the other mib first and come back to this.
>>>
>>> Please take your time. Looking at examples will help. And let me
>>> know where I can help.
>>
>> I will need to work on that later.
>>
>>>
>>> 10.1
>>>  >  > > 10.1 Checking nits according to
>>>  >  > > http://www.ietf.org/id-info/checklist :
>>>  >  Should I break them into different lines or just keep them
>>>  >  as is? Any example of expected indentation if I break the
>>>  >  lines?
>>> No problems at all to  break lines.
>>>       l2L3VpnMcastGroups      OBJECT IDENTIFIER
>>>                               ::= {l2L3VpnMcastConformance 1}
>>> Should do.
>>
>> Done.
>>
>>>
>>> 10.2
>>>  >  > > 10.2 Checking references for intended status: Proposed Standard
>>>  >  > >      == Missing Reference: 'RFC 7117' is mentioned on line 76,
>>>  >  > >          but not defined
>>>  >  > >         'described in [RFC6513, RFC6514, RFC 7117] and other
>>>  >  I hope I understood and fixed it (removing the space in "RFC 7117").
>>> I would recommend that you put it as [RFC6513], [RFC6514], [RFC7117]
>>> That is simpler to parse.
>>
>> I see some other documents do not have comma between multiple
>> references so I followed that.
>>
>>>
>>>  >  > > 11.  There is another WIP MVPN-MIB in
>>>  >  > >      draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-mib-02.txt
>>>  >  > >      MVPN-MIB has objects that refer to L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB.
>>>  >  > >      Is there a good reason for not merging the 2 documents?
>>>  >  > >      I have not seen any discussion or explanation on this.
>>>  >  > >      I may have missed it.
>>>  >  > >      Please clarify or, give some pointers.
>>>  >
>>>  >  As mentioned in the introduction:
>>>  >
>>>  >     this memo describes managed objects common to both VPLS
>>>  >     Multicast [RFC7117] and MVPN [RFC6513, RFC6514].
>>>  >     MVPN-MIB is for MVPN. There was another VPLS Multicast MIB
>>>  >     in the work and both would reference common
>>>
>>>  >     objects defined in this MIB.
>>>
>>> OK. So you are saying that this MIB contains core objects that
>>> will be used to manage implementations of various multicast VPN
>>> protocols e.g. [RFC7117], [RFC6513],[RFC6514] ? It will help if
>>> you spell it out at the beginning.
>>
>> Yes. I thought I did it already:
>>
>> 1.  Introduction
>>
>>    ... and this memo describes managed objects common to both VPLS
>>    Multicast [RFC7117] and MVPN [RFC6513, RFC6514].
>>
>> Thanks!
>> Jeffrey
>>
>>>
>>> ----------------------------------------------------------------------
>>> On 2016/04/16 21:47, Jeffrey (Zhaohui) Zhang wrote:
>>>> Glenn,
>>>>
>>>> Thanks for your comments. I've addressed most of your comments in the
>>> new revision:
>>>>
>>>> URL:            https://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-bess-
>>> l2l3-vpn-mcast-mib-03.txt
>>>> Status:         https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-
>>> vpn-mcast-mib/
>>>> Htmlized:       https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-
>>> mcast-mib-03
>>>> Diff:           https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-
>>> vpn-mcast-mib-03
>>>>
>>>> Please see below.
>>>>
>>>>> 1.  Abstract:
>>>>> 1.1 A sentence on how the managed objects will be used by
>>>>>     applications for operations, monitoring and management
>>>>>     would be good.
>>>>
>>>> I had thought this would be standard/obvious for all MIB objects - the
>>> read-write ones are used to control how a device works, and the
>>> read-only
>>> ones are used for monitoring. Do I really need to say it explicitly?
>>>>
>>>> I see RFC 4382 has the following:
>>>>
>>>>    This memo defines a portion of the Management Information Base (MIB)
>>>>    for use with network management protocols in the Internet community.
>>>>    In particular, it describes managed objects to configure and/or
>>>>    monitor Multiprotocol Label Switching Layer-3 Virtual Private
>>>>    Networks on a Multiprotocol Label Switching (MPLS) Label Switching
>>>>    Router (LSR) supporting this feature.
>>>>
>>>> Is it enough to say something similar? For example:
>>>>
>>>>         In particular, it describes common managed objects used to
>>> configure
>>>>         and/or monitor both L2 and L3 VPN Multicast.
>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> 2.  Introduction
>>>>> 2.1 Please give the full expansion of the abbreviations
>>>>>     appearing for the first time.  (PE, VPLS,..)
>>>>
>>>> Fixed.
>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> 2.2 The terminology section is a bit terse. Explaining the
>>>>>     terms that are used, nicely with reference to the protocol
>>>>>     documents will improve readability.
>>>>>     e.g.
>>>>>      - PMSI, I-PMSI, S-PMSI, provider tunnels
>>>>
>>>> As the paragraph alluded to, this MIB needs to be understood in the
>>> general context of L2/L3 multicast VPN and providing good explanation of
>>> the terms is not attempted. The references for the terms are the the
>>> RFCs
>>> for the relevant technologies.
>>>>
>>>> Having said that, I'll explain PMSI a bit further.
>>>>
>>>>> 2.3 Is there a difference between
>>>>>        "multicast in Layer 2 and Layer 3 VPNs , defined by
>>>>>         RFC 7117 and RFC 6513/6514"
>>>>>     used in the DESCRIPTION in the MODULE-IDENTITY
>>>>>     and
>>>>>        "multicast in BGP/MPLS L2 or IP VPN"
>>>>>     used in the DESCRIPTION of L2L3VpnMcastProviderTunnelType ?
>>>>>     If these are the same, it will be helpful to stick to the
>>>>>     same expression. If these are not the same, the dictinction
>>>>>     should be clarified.
>>>>
>>>> No difference. I was using "Layer 3" or "L3" but it was pointed out
>>>> that
>>> the layer 3 VPN is often referred to IP VPN in other RFCs and I was
>>> advised to change it accordingly. Looks like I did not change all the
>>> cases.
>>>>
>>>> On the other hand, I noticed that RFC 4382 does use "Layer 3 VPN" so
>>> I'll change it back.
>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> 3.  Summary of MIB Module.
>>>>>     An overview of the L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB will be good- the
>>>>>     structure of the MIB, short descriptions of the table(s)
>>>>>     including usage of the table(s) for management and/or by
>>>>>     other MIB(s).
>>>>
>>>> I had that, but have added one sentence about the only table.
>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> MIB definitions:
>>>>> 4. MIB syntax checking:
>>>>>    smilint -s -e -l 5 mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB 2>L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB.txt
>>>>
>>>> I used simpleweb's validation tool but looks like I did not use the
>>> strictest level of validation. I've now fixed the following issues and
>>> verified.
>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>    mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:63: [4] {hyphen-in-label} warning: named
>>> number `rsvp-p2mp' must not include a hyphen in SMIv2
>>>>>    mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:64: [4] {hyphen-in-label} warning: named
>>> number `ldp-p2mp' must not include a hyphen in SMIv2
>>>>>    mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:65: [4] {hyphen-in-label} warning: named
>>> number `pim-asm' must not include a hyphen in SMIv2
>>>>>    mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:66: [4] {hyphen-in-label} warning: named
>>> number `pim-ssm' must not include a hyphen in SMIv2
>>>>>    mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:67: [4] {hyphen-in-label} warning: named
>>> number `pim-bidir' must not include a hyphen in SMIv2
>>>>>    mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:68: [4] {hyphen-in-label} warning: named
>>> number `ingress-replication' must not include a hyphen in SMIv2
>>>>>    mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:69: [4] {hyphen-in-label} warning: named
>>> number `ldp-mp2mp' must not include a hyphen in SMIv2
>>>>
>>>> See later question/comments below.
>>>>
>>>>>    mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:215: [5] {group-unref} warning: current
>>> group `l2L3VpnMcastOptionalGroup' is not referenced in this module
>>>>>    mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:4: [5] {import-unused} warning: identifier
>>> `NOTIFICATION-TYPE' imported from module `SNMPv2-SMI' is never used
>>>>>    mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:5: [5] {import-unused} warning: identifier
>>> `Unsigned32' imported from module `SNMPv2-SMI' is never used
>>>>>    mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:8: [5] {import-unused} warning: identifier
>>> `NOTIFICATION-GROUP' imported from module `SNMPv2-CONF' is never used
>>>>>    mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:11: [5] {import-unused} warning: identifier
>>> `TruthValue' imported from module `SNMPv2-TC' is never used
>>>>>    mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:11: [5] {import-unused} warning: identifier
>>> `RowStatus' imported from module `SNMPv2-TC' is never used
>>>>>    mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:12: [5] {import-unused} warning: identifier
>>> `TimeStamp' imported from module `SNMPv2-TC' is never used
>>>>>    mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:12: [5] {import-unused} warning: identifier
>>> `TimeInterval' imported from module `SNMPv2-TC' is never used
>>>>>    mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:15: [5] {import-unused} warning: identifier
>>> `SnmpAdminString' imported from module `SNMP-FRAMEWORK-MIB' is never
>>> used
>>>>>    mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:18: [5] {import-unused} warning: identifier
>>> `InetAddress' imported from module `INET-ADDRESS-MIB' is never used
>>>>>    mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:18: [5] {import-unused} warning: identifier
>>> `InetAddressType' imported from module `INET-ADDRESS-MIB' is never used
>>>>
>>>> Removed the above unused imports.
>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> 5. REFERENCE clauses: Please use REFERENCE clauses liberally.
>>>>>    Wherever possible, provide references for objects used in
>>>>>    the MIB. The references will point to specific sections/
>>>>>    sub-sections of the RFCs defining the protocol for which the
>>>>>    MIB is being designed. It will greatly improve the readability
>>>>>    of the document.
>>>>
>>>> Added.
>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> 6. IMPORTS clause
>>>>>    MIB modules from which items are imported must be cited and
>>>>>    included in the normative references.
>>>>>    The conventional style is
>>>>>      mplsStdMIB
>>>>>         FROM MPLS-TC-STD-MIB                           -- [RFC3811]
>>>>
>>>> Added.
>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> 7. Please update the MODULE-IDENTITY. (There are no syntantic errors.)
>>>>> 7.1 CONTACT-INFO
>>>>>     Following the conventions (including indentation style) will
>>>>>     improve the readability. (e.g. RFC4382, RFC5132).
>>>>>     Will be good if it does not overflow into the next page.
>>>>
>>>> Fixed.
>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> 7.2 REVISION clause: follow the convention recommended in RFC4181
>>>>>     sec 4.5
>>>>>           REVISION    "200212132358Z"  -- December 13, 2002
>>>>>           DESCRIPTION "Initial version, published as RFC yyyy."
>>>>>    -- RFC Ed.: replace yyyy with actual RFC number & remove this note:
>>>>
>>>> Fixed.
>>>>
>>>>> 7.3 OID assignment: follow the convention recommended in RFC4181
>>>>>     sec 4.5 i
>>>>>     replace
>>>>>           ::= { experimental 99 } -- number to be assigned
>>>>>     by
>>>>>           ::= { <subtree> XXX }
>>>>>    -- RFC Ed.: replace XXX with IANA-assigned number & remove this
>>>>> note
>>>>>    <subtree> will be the subtree under which the module will be
>>>>>    registered.
>>>>>
>>>>
>>>> I kept "experimental 99" so that I could continue to use mib tools to
>>> validate; but I added notes for the editor to replace them as you
>>> indicated.
>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> 8. Specific MO and TC related comments.
>>>>>       L2L3VpnMcastProviderTunnelType ::= TEXTUAL-CONVENTION
>>>>>         STATUS       current
>>>>>         DESCRIPTION
>>>>>             "Types of provider tunnels used for multicast in
>>>>>              BGP/MPLS L2 or IP VPN."
>>>>>         SYNTAX       INTEGER { unconfigured (0),
>>>>>                                rsvp-p2mp (1),
>>>>>                                ldp-p2mp (2),
>>>>>                                pim-asm (3),
>>>>>                                pim-ssm (4),
>>>>>                                pim-bidir (5),
>>>>>                                ingress-replication (6),
>>>>>                                ldp-mp2mp (7)
>>>>>
>>>>>     o Would be nice to align the enumeration labels with the
>>>>>       labels in the protocol document RFC 6514 unless there is
>>>>>       a good reason for not doing so. (You will have to take
>>>>>       care of the smi compilation errors too; '-' is not allowed ).
>>>>
>>>> Are spaces allowed? I don't know so I used hyphen. For now I replace
>>> with things like rsvpP2mp.
>>>> Or could/should I just remove the definitions, so that if a new type is
>>> defined in the future there is no need to update the MIB?
>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> 8.1  l2L3VpnMcastPmsiTunnelAttributeEntry OBJECT-TYPE
>>>>>          SYNTAX        L2L3VpnMcastPmsiTunnelAttributeEntry
>>>>>          MAX-ACCESS    not-accessible
>>>>>          STATUS        current
>>>>>          DESCRIPTION
>>>>>              "An entry in this table corresponds to an PMSI attribute
>>>>>               that is advertised/received on this router.
>>>>>               For BGP-based signaling (for I-PMSI via auto-discovery
>>>>>               procedure, or for S-PMSI via S-PMSI A-D routes),
>>>>>               they are just as signaled by BGP (RFC 6514 section 5,
>>>>>               'PMSI Tunnel attribute').
>>>>>               For UDP-based S-PMSI signaling for PIM-MVPN,
>>>>>               they're derived from S-PMSI Join Message
>>>>>               (RFC 6513 section 7.4.2, 'UDP-based Protocol')..
>>>>>
>>>>>               Note that BGP-based signaling may be used for
>>>>>               PIM-MVPN as well."
>>>>>     o Fix the ".." in "'UDP-based Protocol').." above.
>>>>>     o Please give the reference for this Table.
>>>>>       Is it-  "PMSI Tunnel attribute" in RFC 6513 Sec.4  ?
>>>>>               "PMSI Tunnel attribute" in RFC 6514 Sec.5  ?
>>>>>                both?
>>>>>       Any other pointers?
>>>>
>>>> Fixed.
>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> 8.2   l2L3VpnMcastPmsiTunnelAttributeFlags OBJECT-TYPE
>>>>>          SYNTAX        OCTET STRING (SIZE (1))
>>>>>          MAX-ACCESS    not-accessible
>>>>>          STATUS        current
>>>>>          DESCRIPTION
>>>>>              "For UDP-based S-PMSI signaling for PIM-MVPN, this is 0.
>>>>>               For BGP-based I/S-PMSI signaling, this is the Flags
>>>>>               field in PMSI Tunnel Attribute of the corresponding
>>>>>               I/S-PMSI A-D route."
>>>>>          ::= { l2L3VpnMcastPmsiTunnelAttributeEntry 1 }
>>>>>     o  Please confirm that the above is a complete enumeration of the
>>>>>        types of signalling.
>>>>>     o  RFC 6514 Sec.5 says that the Flags field indicates
>>>>>        "Leaf Information Required". That is useful information.
>>>>>        Please include in the description.
>>>>
>>>> The intent is to simply return the octet value of the flags field, w/o
>>> listing individual bits like "Leaf Information Required". More bits
>>> could
>>> be defined in the future but the MIB would not change.
>>>>
>>>> Is that OK?
>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> 8.3   l2L3VpnMcastPmsiTunnelAttributeId OBJECT-TYPE
>>>>>          SYNTAX        OCTET STRING ( SIZE (0..37) )
>>>>>          MAX-ACCESS    not-accessible
>>>>>          STATUS        current
>>>>>          DESCRIPTION
>>>>>              "For UDP-based S-PMSI signaling for PIM-MVPN, the first
>>>>>               four or sixteen octets of this attribute are filled with
>>>>>               the provider tunnel group address (IPv4 or IPv6)..
>>>>>               For BGP-based I/S-PMSI signaling, this is the Tunnel
>>> Identifier
>>>>>               Field in PMSI Tunnel Attribute of the corresponding I/S-
>>> PMSI
>>>>>               A-D route."
>>>>>     o Check the size specifications. The specs above say it can be
>>>>>       all sizes 0..37. That is not clear from the DESCRIPTION clause.
>>>>>     o Fix the ".." in "(IPv4 or IPv6).." above.
>>>>>     o RFC 6514 Sec 5.  PMSI Tunnel Attribute gives the Tunnel
>>> Identifiers
>>>>>       for mLDP, PIM-SM, PIM-SSM, BIDIR-PIM,Ingress Replication,MP2MP.
>>>>>       It appears that the sizes (range) for each case will be
>>>>> different.
>>>>>       Please clarify that, and if there are discrete sizes, specify
>>>>>       accordingly.
>>>>
>>>> Depending on the tunnel type, there could be different sizes. Future
>>> tunnel types could have other sizes that not specified today. I was
>>> thinking to just give a size range so that it is flexible. Is that ok?
>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> 8.3  l2L3VpnMcastPmsiTunnelPointer OBJECT-TYPE
>>>>>         SYNTAX        RowPointer
>>>>>         MAX-ACCESS    read-only
>>>>>         STATUS        current
>>>>>         DESCRIPTION
>>>>>             "If the tunnel exists in some MIB table, this is the
>>>>>              row pointer to it."
>>>>>     o "some MIB table" : specify which MIB table.
>>>>
>>>> I can give an example, like mplsTunnelTable [RFC 3812]. It could be
>>> whatever table that a tunnel may be put into.
>>>>
>>>>>     o In what case will the tunnel exist and in what case will it not?
>>>>
>>>> If a device supports mplsTunnelTable and the tunnel is represented
>>>> there,
>>> then it exists.
>>>>
>>>>>     o What will be the behaviour if the above condition is not
>>> satisfied?
>>>>
>>>> A null pointer should be given.
>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> 8.4  l2L3VpnMcastPmsiTunnelIf OBJECT-TYPE
>>>>>         SYNTAX        RowPointer
>>>>>         MAX-ACCESS    read-only
>>>>>         STATUS        current
>>>>>         DESCRIPTION
>>>>>             "If the tunnel has a corresponding interface, this is the
>>>>>              row pointer to the ifName table."
>>>>>      o DESCRIPTION looks incorrect. Please fix it. Do you want to say
>>>>>        this object points to the corresponding row in the ifTable?
>>>>
>>>> Yes. Fixed.
>>>>
>>>>>      o In what case does the TunnelIf exist and in what case will it
>>> not?
>>>>
>>>> Some tunnels may not have a corresponding interface.
>>>>
>>>>>      o What will be expected if the tunnel does not have a
>>> corresponding
>>>>>        interface?
>>>>
>>>> Null row pointer.
>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> 9. The Security Considerations section does not follow the Security
>>>>>    Guidelines for IETF MIB Modules
>>>>>    http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/ops/trac/wiki/mib-security.
>>>>>    Please fix.
>>>>
>>>> I was really hoping that it would not have to be that tedious. SNMP/MIB
>>> security should be no different from the CLI security - once you secure
>>> the infrastructure then what's more to do?
>>>>
>>>> I'll need more time to work on this. Let me try to address the
>>>> issues in
>>> the other mib first and come back to this.
>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> 10.ID-nits
>>>>> 10.1 Checking nits according to
>>>>> http://www.ietf.org/id-info/checklist :
>>>>>
>>>>> ------------------------------------------------------------------
>>> ---------
>>>>>
>>>>>      ** There are 4 instances of too long lines in the document, the
>>> longest one
>>>>>         being 3 characters in excess of 72.
>>>>
>>>> I fixed some but there still three too long lines:
>>>>
>>>>      l2L3VpnMcastPmsiTunnelAttributeType
>>>> L2L3VpnMcastProviderTunnelType,
>>>>
>>>>   l2L3VpnMcastGroups      OBJECT IDENTIFIER ::=
>>>> {l2L3VpnMcastConformance
>>> 1}
>>>>   l2L3VpnMcastCompliances OBJECT IDENTIFIER ::=
>>>> {l2L3VpnMcastConformance
>>> 2}
>>>>
>>>> Should I break them into different lines or just keep them as is? Any
>>> example of expected indentation if I break the lines?
>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> 10.2 Checking references for intended status: Proposed Standard
>>>>>
>>>>> ------------------------------------------------------------------
>>> ---------
>>>>>
>>>>>      == Missing Reference: 'RFC 7117' is mentioned on line 76, but not
>>>>>         defined
>>>>>         'described in [RFC6513, RFC6514, RFC 7117] and other documents
>>> tha...'
>>>>
>>>> I hope I understood and fixed it (removing the space in "RFC 7117").
>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> 11.  There is another WIP MVPN-MIB in draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-mib-02.txt
>>>>>      MVPN-MIB has objects that refer to L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB.
>>>>>      Is there a good reason for not merging the 2 documents? I have
>>>>> not
>>> seen
>>>>>      any discussion or explanation on this. I may have missed it.
>>> Please
>>>>>      clarify or, give some pointers.
>>>>
>>>> As mentioned in the introduction:
>>>>
>>>>    this memo describes managed objects common to both VPLS
>>>>    Multicast [RFC7117] and MVPN [RFC6513, RFC6514].
>>>>
>>>> MVPN-MIB is for MVPN. There was another VPLS Multicast MIB in the work
>>> and both would reference common objects defined in this MIB.
>>>>
>>>> Thanks!
>>>> Jeffrey
>>>>
>>>>> -----Original Message-----
>>>>> From: BESS [mailto:bess-bounces@ietf.org] On Behalf Of Glenn Mansfield
>>>>> Keeni
>>>>> Sent: Tuesday, April 12, 2016 2:28 AM
>>>>> To: Benoit Claise <bclaise@cisco.com>; EXT - thomas.morin@orange.com
>>>>> <thomas.morin@orange.com>
>>>>> Cc: Jeffrey (Zhaohui) Zhang <zzhang@juniper.net>; ops-ads@ietf.org;
>>> Martin
>>>>> Vigoureux <martin.vigoureux@nokia.com>; bess@ietf.org; Mach Chen
>>>>> <mach.chen@huawei.com>
>>>>> Subject: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-mcast-mib-
>>> 02.txt
>>>>>
>>>>> Hi,
>>>>> I have been asked to do a MIB Doctors review of
>>>>> draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-mcast-mib-02.txt.
>>>>> My knowledge of L2L3VPN Multicast is limited to the reading
>>>>> of this document and browsing through the documents referred
>>>>> to in the draft and bess-wg mailing list archives.( read "shallow").
>>>>> So some of the doubts and questions may sound trivial or
>>>>> strange. Please bear with me and help me help you make
>>>>> this into a better document :-)
>>>>>
>>>>> The comments are attached.
>>>>>
>>>>> Glenn
>>>>>
>>>>
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