Re: [Rfced-future] Fwd: [IAB] I18ndir last call review of draft-iab-rfcefdp-rfced-model-11

[John C Klensin <[e-mail]>]

--On Thursday, March 3, 2022 17:21 -0700 Peter Saint-Andre
<[e-mail]> wrote:

> On 3/3/22 4:14 PM, Martin J. Dürst wrote:
>> On 2022-03-04 00:52, Peter Saint-Andre wrote:
>> 
>>> Perhaps something like this:
>>> 
>>> ### 
>>> 
>>> The overall framework for the RFC Series and the RFC Editor
>>> Function is described in {{RFC8729}} and is updated by this
>>> document. Under version 3 of the RFC Editor Model, various
>>> responsibilities of the RFC Editor Function are now performed
>>> alone or in combination by the RSWG, RSAB, RPC, RFC Series
>>> Consulting Editor (RSCE), and IETF LLC, which collectively
>>> comprise the essence of the RFC Editor Function.
>>> 
>>> ### 
>>> 
>> 
>> Very good, as usual. However, I'd cut out "the essence".
>> There may be  some other little splinters somewhere, but I
>> couldn't name them.
> 
> Yes, I said "the essence" to forestall the objection that
> there are little splinters somewhere. But I'm happy to remove
> those words.

Or you could replace "essence" with "core components", "range",
"core bodies that make up" (maybe without "core"), or something
similar.  My concern about future-proofing again suggests avoid
close-ended lists where possible and, while I share your
concerns about "splinters" I'm more concerned about future
changes and things that might look like splinters initially but
turn out to be the pointy end of spears.

But I can live with any of those choices, including dropping
"the essence".

   john