Re: [Diversity] [Mentoring-coordinators] Participation in active IETF work

Dave Crocker <dhc@dcrocker.net> Tue, 19 April 2016 15:24 UTC

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On 4/19/2016 8:13 AM, nalini.elkins@insidethestack.com wrote:
> I also think that if people wanted help in making their draft more
> readable - I am just talking about the English part of it, then maybe we
> need:
>
> 1.5  English Review Mentors
>
> These are people who will just review for grammar, sentence
> construction, readability, etc.


Well, my experience for such documents is that the mentor needs to get 
deeply into the substance of the document and the process needs to be 
extended.

In my experience, simple language help is easy, but frankly not that 
common or at least not really different from what drafts by 'native' 
English speakers need.

The real challenge is developing an adequate understanding of what the 
author /intends/ and then helping to figure out how to write that well.

And for reference, it's not uncommon to have a draft from a 'native' 
English speaker that also needs this sort of help...

d/
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   Dave Crocker
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